The Chariot

This is brilliant, full of some part realism and other abstract fracture. Post-modern, even.

Post modernism is truly relevant to the intention of this write I think, thank you so much Eren, I appreciate the insight and perspective. 💖🙏

I loved this even though it was very mysterious to me. But mystery is good for us.

Hi Nizana thank you so much. 💖🙏 I think part of what I was expressing here is how mysterious life is, in all its permutations.

This is fantastic, and the reading really brings the mood and voice alive.  Beautifully done!

You sweet thing thank you so much *hugs* I really appreciate you and I'm glad to have been helpful in your growing process with the audio poems recently. 😘💖🙏🏻

You have been and remain a blessing my friend, your insight and understanding is always an overwhelming joy. It was wonderful to collaborate with you on this and I'm eager to continue in that process. 💖🙏🏻

Someone on here, once asserted that any poem that is not understood on first reading has failed. Other than accentuating their ignorance, your words illustrate how poetry is challenging. Bit like encountering The Waste Land or Berryman’s Dream Song for first time. Will comment further on deeper inspection.

Think it’s really positive when DU can unite and inspire. We’re all in the same boat, even though it can appear to be The Titanic at times, and we should be sailing in empathy.  

I would concur that statement is missing the point entirely of expression, there are deeper wells of connection than literal translations. A text book or instruction manual seeks to impart a procedural understanding, so I suppose if that is not done well, it can be said to have failed its intention, but the intention of a poem is often or perhaps in best spirit, to expose the soul, say something honest in a world of so much artificiality by rote, give rise to wonder, curiosity and emotion, to resonate within our mutual humanity. I often try to make that vital connection in my writing, when I comment on writing or in any conversation or discourse.

I was unfamiliar with Berryman but have begun reading it on poetry.org. The Waste Land has long been a personal favorite.

I was telling Rina, we can create an oasis of meaningful connection between us here, even though so many of our treasured friends have departed. I'm all for sailing in empathy my friend. 💖🙏

To see it in print then hear your words bringing the poem to life it truly elevates it to an art form.  And, yes I completely agree the few of us left from the ole times can try to pull this place together with positivity with writing and friendships.
I haven't forgotten to write my part, I haven't had solid couple days off to concentrate on an idea but hopefully soon.

I always look forward to your writing Rina. 💖 Thank you it means a lot to me.

This is gorgeous, a multi-dimensional lattice of sorts, an intriguing course for the chariots of life we each steer.

I really like thinking of it in the structure of a lattice, it says a lot of things about construction and intention and proportion.  Occasionally I write a piece and will invoke an avatar of the tarot, I have pieces titled The Lovers and The Magician, for example, I felt The Chariot was appropriate for this kind of yin yang journey through Freud's id, in a sense. Thank you so much I really appreciate the insight and perspective.

I find this piece one of the most intriguing and interesting collaborative efforts I've read here on DUP. It's a tribute to likeminded souls, expressive emotion and a lovely window into the vast shared affection of how powerfully ingrained the written word impacts not only each poet within this endeavor but also we the more than willing fireflies attracted to the beautiful essence of  light that this piece permeates.... I have missed this type of incredible aura (for lack of a better idea or word) and truly welcome it's effects upon me and the deep warmth it leaves me feeling. Thank you for sharing that with us all....  

Bravo to your reading (you already know how much I adore your style there! ) and to all who participated. What a wonderfully deep and creative triumph.

Much love, my friend
I hope your '23 becomes your best yet.

🌹💙
xo

Hey hey Susie Q *hugs* This work came about in an odd, for me, sort of way. I was talking to friends about working on a collaboration with the theme of honesty, my friend Rianne wrote and sent me several stanzas and I was inspired to write what amounted to this poem. Since it was so long, we decided we would post our poems around the theme separately. Strangeways_Rob wrote his most recent, which is titled, "Walking the Plank on Knees."

After the collaboration splintered off into separate pieces that we had inspired each other to write, we figured we could just start over and work on something else together, that is forthcoming hopefully.

Thank you so much honey. It's wonderful to connect with you. I hope you have a wonderful new year as well! Assuming we can all afford a dozen eggs haha.

Jeez Louise, Daniel. This is a feast post fast. It's so well attended by you, thoughtful, haunting and graceful. The reading was well paced too. Thank you.

Thank you ☺️ That means a lot to me. I've really been enjoying your pieces as well. 💖 I hope this new year brings you peace, purpose and fulfillment. 🙏🏻

"Will you tell me why I ask you  
Questions you could not  
Answer"

If only this was line 1....I could go on for hours over carajillo, and tapas....possibly tequilas. Well done here sir. Much love. <3

I wouldn't mind joining you for a drink or two milady. Thank you 💖🙏🏻

I shall dream of such drinks and words with you, DC! <3

What an amazing piece!!!
It's all great but this is my fave

I absolutely loved line 4.
That whole section reads like a haunt to me.
Scented fingerprints!

It really is a kind of haunting, the memories of love lost. Thank you so much. 💖

Truly a tour de force... engaging... speaks to me on many levels... has an epic quality about it... great job...

Ah thank you kindly LDF it's good to see you. 💖

good stuff dude

Hey johnny thanks I appreciate it. This if the first thing I wrote working up inspiration behind the scenes with other site writers in a while and it was really an enjoyable experience.

I always look forward to your spoken word pieces. Your articulation is very much admired by us all here. I have to admit, for much as I am a fan of words, I had to look a couple.
Amazing Daniel. Now I'm wondering what your English teachers thought when you were in school.

English was a strong subject for me it's true lol I had a hard time with maths and would study til my brain felt like a microwaved egg. 😅

Thank you Walter I really appreciate it. Because I don't have a sound studio, it takes a long time for me to edit out background noises when I record an audio, then because I'm holding down the page down button on my Word document the whole time, I tend to rush a little, so I end up extending the pauses between line and stanza a second or two as well. I'd say every minute of the audio poem takes 5 or ten minutes of editing, but the end products really are okay for a guy without much technical skill. Gratitude always to MissyDemeanor for teaching me how to use the Audacity software.

I thoroughly enjoyed every word of this! It was intriguing, well crafted and thought provoking. I admire the language and how it is all stitched together. The range of the vocabulary is masterful. Great piece!

I admire the master of diction in your pieces as well. Thank you I was truly inspired whilst writing this one and the audio came together pretty well after I edited out the background noises. 💖🙏