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I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
I swam below the surface.
You tried to drown me there.
Violated by the current stripping me away.
Sharing in the mind's decay.
Picking up the pieces with bloodied hands.
In them I see all the love, it's not pretend.
You just need me to see the monster.
To have no mercy on me, I don't ask.
And each body speaks to you, me too.
You took me to the graveyard.
An Apex predator's hunting ground.
Taking credit for another kill.
You fed me to the wolves.
The perverts eating me, so many bones.
This will to live and feel everything.
Feeling each life taken again and again.
A malicious grin tormenting my soul.
And so I stare captivated, dying.
But so alive as I take off the disguise.
Death loves a beautiful dress and heels.
Wrapped in darkness, light bends around me.
As I accept my abuse taking it all in.
The emptiness is so filling.
Each time you kill me again, filling me.
You tried to drown me there.
Violated by the current stripping me away.
Sharing in the mind's decay.
Picking up the pieces with bloodied hands.
In them I see all the love, it's not pretend.
You just need me to see the monster.
To have no mercy on me, I don't ask.
And each body speaks to you, me too.
You took me to the graveyard.
An Apex predator's hunting ground.
Taking credit for another kill.
You fed me to the wolves.
The perverts eating me, so many bones.
This will to live and feel everything.
Feeling each life taken again and again.
A malicious grin tormenting my soul.
And so I stare captivated, dying.
But so alive as I take off the disguise.
Death loves a beautiful dress and heels.
Wrapped in darkness, light bends around me.
As I accept my abuse taking it all in.
The emptiness is so filling.
Each time you kill me again, filling me.
Author's Note
This is part of the Kristina's mirror series of inspired posts. I thought that perhaps a reading would add to this one. I hope it did.
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/459373-death-behind-these-eyes/
Video and music royalty free credit to Karl Casey @ White Bat Audio.
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Re. I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
21st Nov 2022 9:18pm
Awesome just Awesome another great job gorgeous
Love and light
Ron xx
P.s love your accent x
Love and light
Ron xx
P.s love your accent x
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21st Nov 2022 9:28pm
Two Awesomes, well I adore that! I always want to do a great job for you Ron. I suppose I swam below the surface works well with my one about my near death experience whitewater rafting too. :p Lots of passion and darkness back atcha. (not bad darkness, you know what I mean). P.s. I love the accents across the pond too. ;)
Re. I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
21st Nov 2022 9:20pm
You're such a sweet delicacy of human flesh.
An all consuming meal for the wolves, they are beside themselves with hunger and wrath.
What I wouldn't give to lead the pack, your nightmare becomes pleasure as you satisfy with fragrant sensual death repeated for eternity.
Flagrant Phenomenal Like
Rare RL
An all consuming meal for the wolves, they are beside themselves with hunger and wrath.
What I wouldn't give to lead the pack, your nightmare becomes pleasure as you satisfy with fragrant sensual death repeated for eternity.
Flagrant Phenomenal Like
Rare RL
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21st Nov 2022 9:48pm
Absolutely a sweet delicacy, and snarky too. lol
Made me think of the Two Werewolves write. They are always beside themselves with hunger. I try to feed them but damn they can really tear you apart in the end. Leading the pack is definitely an interesting position to be in. Are you sure you could handle it? I am insatiable so maybe you would be my meal. ;) Fragrant sensual death repeated for eternity, oooo that has Vampires written all over it. BIG LIKE.
Love the Rare RL and Phenomenal Like. Damn! (that's better than a BIG LIKE right? :P)
Made me think of the Two Werewolves write. They are always beside themselves with hunger. I try to feed them but damn they can really tear you apart in the end. Leading the pack is definitely an interesting position to be in. Are you sure you could handle it? I am insatiable so maybe you would be my meal. ;) Fragrant sensual death repeated for eternity, oooo that has Vampires written all over it. BIG LIKE.
Love the Rare RL and Phenomenal Like. Damn! (that's better than a BIG LIKE right? :P)
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23rd Nov 2022 1:32am
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6th Dec 2022 1:46am
Are you sure you can handle the Carolina Reaper hot sauce? :p lol I like it really hot.
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6th Dec 2022 1:58am
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6th Dec 2022 2:04am
Of course but I like making everything else crazy HOT too. That's why I put hot sauce on it.
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Re: Re. I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
22nd Nov 2022 00:51am
Definitely a microcosm of life. I like the word plaintive, I don't know if I ever saw that actually used. There is definitely a fragile vulnerability in the deep syntax. Life is full of challenges and opportunities to grow through compassion and understanding. I am glad you found it wonderful and instructive.
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Re: Re. I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
22nd Nov 2022 00:59am
Really glad you liked hearing it Tim. ;) I had hoped that would add something to it because the poem was really meaningful to me. And I am happy you thought the poem was great too. I suppose it's one of those you really like and understand or not but there are a lot of metaphors and different things being expressed. :)
Re. I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
22nd Nov 2022 2:18am
Interesting. We live in the mystery of how we die or when we die. Keep on writing.
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Re: Re. I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
22nd Nov 2022 12:32pm
So true, we are always living knowing we will die at some point but not when and how. I feel like I have often swam below the surface and had to hold my breath for a long time to keep from dying. You get better and better at it. You can hold your breath longer and longer. It starts to feel serene sometimes, the cold and the dark of being pulled under water. And people may search for you and they may find you and yet you may still be under water. They just don't know it. It's an interesting dichotomy.
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23rd Nov 2022 1:02am
Re. I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
22nd Nov 2022 3:20am
Taking off the disguise....how many layers until down to the skin....
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Re: Re. I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
22nd Nov 2022 12:36pm
Ah, not so many layers to get to the skin but getting past it can be a real challenge. How many to the heart? how many to the soul? Now those can be truly difficult to get to and truly see. But that's where the true prize is. So often being pulled under makes it so much more difficult to reach the heart and soul. There are so many protective mechanism to keep us from drowning and our experiencing make us very good at holding the breath for long period of time. But often mouth to mouth really takes down those barriers so well. :)
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22nd Nov 2022 2:32pm
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Re: Re. I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
22nd Nov 2022 7:17pm
I would have been heartbroken if you didn't comment Jay. ;) I am so happy you feel honored since you inspired it. "needing me to see the monster" is a central line to the entire piece for sure. But sometimes it's like beauty and the beast. Where the monster actually feels very deeply and intensely like I do. Both having swam in those blood soaked waters is where you gain that understanding of one another. Only two people who have been there could, even if the circumstances are different. No pure unity without sacrifice and no atonement without blood, so true. It's universal.
Re. I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
22nd Nov 2022 8:11pm
Oh Kristina, you wrote this with your soul, dying over and over again just to feel alive. So few could pay this price, this martyrdom of pure existence. With the deepest longing I have ever felt, how my world seems so narrow lost in the expanse of your soul.
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22nd Nov 2022 8:55pm
You always have such a way with words APPS. I do indeed write with my heart and soul. You certainly experience the most powerful sensations when you die over and over again feeling so alive. That pain can be unbearable at times but also so pleasurable at others. I suppose it's like what the cenobites offer in Hellraiser. Feeling the intensities in extremes that go beyond any boundaries and push into new ones. I do love your understanding of the deepest longing and how you can always feel it. You can get lost in the expanse of my soul but I can see the expanse of yours too.
Re. I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
22nd Nov 2022 11:27pm
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23rd Nov 2022 3:02pm
Ah yes! sinking to the depths in order to bring it back up where you can see the despair too. Fortunately I am a great swimmer otherwise I would have drown long ago. I am really glad you could take a dip with me below the surface Tim. I really appreciate your thoughts. Happy Thanksgiving! (well tomorrow :p).
Re. I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
23rd Nov 2022 7:42am
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23rd Nov 2022 3:06pm
Haha thanks you... Oh yes! always swimming below the surface and so far down you can feel the pressure all around you. Squeezing you tight... ;) But I know you would like that right? It's very wet below the surface too. I really appreciate you coming to take a swim with me and sharing your thoughts. ;)
Re. I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
24th Nov 2022 00:23am
Intriguing write Kristina. It takes me back to the piece I read a few days ago about your whitewater rafting experience.
This is not only beautiful but haunting.
Amazing work.
This is not only beautiful but haunting.
Amazing work.
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Re: Re. I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
24th Nov 2022 7:11pm
Intriguing is always good in my book. ;) Yes, I thought about the whitewater one as well in regards to this one. There is certainly some cross relevance there, even in the title. Beautiful but haunting is exactly the reaction I would hope for in this case. You always have a great intuition in understanding. I always love hearing your thoughts and I so appreciate the amazing work. Thank you Wally!
Re. I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
24th Nov 2022 11:08am
Love the darkness to this, friend.
"Death loves a beautiful dress and heels"
Wonderful line 😁
"Death loves a beautiful dress and heels"
Wonderful line 😁
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Re: Re. I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
24th Nov 2022 7:11pm
Ah yes, a Devil's child would definitely love and appreciate the darkness. Death is one horny dude, he is always after a beautiful dress and high heels... Trying to trip me up. But I am like a cat, I have nine lives and he has yet to succeed in more than heavy petting and passionate kisses. :p Really glad the strong current pulled you in to come take a dip with me below the surface. ;)
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6th Dec 2022 00:49am
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6th Dec 2022 1:40am
Perfect! Your spoken word is so amazing, I always love hearing your opinion since way back. ;) Knowing that you feel the reading gives it full dimension means a lot to me. That's what I was hoping, that it would really add something to it. I felt like it would on this one.
Re. I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
29th Apr 2024 10:19pm
Interesting that we (humans) can pair love, lust with death and decay so easily. Maybe it's something fear-based and primitive within our psychic formulation. The most basic aspect of our animal minds.
Well done.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
Well done.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
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Re: Re. I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
29th Apr 2024 10:34pm
That is definitely so interesting... Love, lust, death, and decay do seem pair so easily don't they. I think you are on to something that it is within our most primitive brain that these things are encoded. Somehow I always find myself in the darkness in one way or another. I think I belong there... It certainly seems that way. Many hugs back at you BK. Thanks so much for sharing your thoughts with me.
Re. I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
29th Apr 2024 10:37pm
Perfectly read with great music. I can't add anymore than what's been said above.
Excellent writing. :)
Excellent writing. :)
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Re: Re. I swam below the surface, dying... (with Reading)
4th May 2024 10:13pm
Hey Tim! Welcome back... I really appreciate you taking a moment to let me know your thoughts. It means a lot to me especially on these. Always a bit reluctant to do readings. :p I adore that you feel it is excellent writing and thought the read and music enhanced it. X
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5th May 2024 6:28pm
Interesting things happen with the Djinn... Be careful with your wishes... Jennifer probably knows.
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6th May 2024 6:20am
is that a warning threats and intimidation don't work with me have you faced your deepest fear grey?
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