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Moment
see me
see me now
in this moment
where are you
reaching
silent screaming
needing
bleeding
where am I
going through motions
heart a black pit
of loathsome
silence
of no one
touch me
ground me
tether me
to love
I can't perceive
where is it
see me
see me now
see me
now
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Re. Moment
13th Nov 2022 5:18am
Dear K,
Silent screaming. In my life time I never thought I’d do that, funny how life plays out and how often I’ve done just that. That line keeps replaying over in my mind.
It’s a dreadful thing not being seen or heard. Even more so when told you’re the one not seeing/hearing the other person and that’s why they behaved in a certain way. I had a reality check after reading this as it brought some necessary behavior realignments on my part. Heartfelt, eye opening write. H🌷
Silent screaming. In my life time I never thought I’d do that, funny how life plays out and how often I’ve done just that. That line keeps replaying over in my mind.
It’s a dreadful thing not being seen or heard. Even more so when told you’re the one not seeing/hearing the other person and that’s why they behaved in a certain way. I had a reality check after reading this as it brought some necessary behavior realignments on my part. Heartfelt, eye opening write. H🌷
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14th Nov 2022 12:55pm
Dear H,
It's amazing how you can read things from all different angles, and take them in to learn what you need at the moment. You have a wonderfully flexible mind!
I'm glad this was helpful, but also just really grateful for your response and for seeing me. I was very alone in that moment. Thank you for connecting.
❤️k
It's amazing how you can read things from all different angles, and take them in to learn what you need at the moment. You have a wonderfully flexible mind!
I'm glad this was helpful, but also just really grateful for your response and for seeing me. I was very alone in that moment. Thank you for connecting.
❤️k
Re. Moment
Anonymous
- Edited 13th Nov 2022 5:55am
13th Nov 2022 5:54am
this reminded me of some dark moments in my two decades of walking the earth and how everybody at a certain time has felt this way in some way or some form, i have to agree with honoria above it's not the greatest feeling not being seen or heard or being treated like your thoughts and feelings are invalid when they are batted back at you — or somebody tries to make a U turn on what you're expressing and i feel anybody who has been made to feel that way in their life wholeheartedly
it also reminded me of how we should hold a space for those who need it the most, to honour it by lending our ears in the moment which connects back to your title, i've always seen it as if somebody could lend an ear or a shoulder for a moment it could defeat the darkness for a while or perhaps save a persons life to be honest
i'm truly happy that you are here sharing this with us because the darkness shouldn't have to win ☺️
thank you for sharing & love atcha cheeky monkey 🐒❤️
-ethan
it also reminded me of how we should hold a space for those who need it the most, to honour it by lending our ears in the moment which connects back to your title, i've always seen it as if somebody could lend an ear or a shoulder for a moment it could defeat the darkness for a while or perhaps save a persons life to be honest
i'm truly happy that you are here sharing this with us because the darkness shouldn't have to win ☺️
thank you for sharing & love atcha cheeky monkey 🐒❤️
-ethan
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Re: Re. Moment
14th Nov 2022 1:05pm
Thank you, ethan.... I have these moments sometimes, and I hate them. Usually nobody has actually done anything to make me feel alone and unseen, they're all just going about their business, oblivious.... I'm pretty good at looking "fine".
You're right, if someone could just be fully present in these dark moments, that could help drive them away. The trouble lies in the fact that sometimes there simply is no one available. I'm still learning how to defeat these moments in a healthy way, and I have a few more decades behind me than you do!! I'll get there....
Really appreciate your love & presence,
❤️k
You're right, if someone could just be fully present in these dark moments, that could help drive them away. The trouble lies in the fact that sometimes there simply is no one available. I'm still learning how to defeat these moments in a healthy way, and I have a few more decades behind me than you do!! I'll get there....
Really appreciate your love & presence,
❤️k
Re. Moment
14th Nov 2022 3:04am
Who can miss the fire haired one?
I can sense the angst within this pleading. No big words needed, just a no tricks, no guessing, shot to the head. Stripped down words make it obvious to even the thick headed ones out there. We hope!
Great write, BT.
I can sense the angst within this pleading. No big words needed, just a no tricks, no guessing, shot to the head. Stripped down words make it obvious to even the thick headed ones out there. We hope!
Great write, BT.
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14th Nov 2022 1:20pm
Well, in real life, I am rather small...
I thought maybe I could defeat this particular moment of existential dread and aloneness by writing it, so I blurted this one direct to the page in about 2 minutes. I wish I could say it worked, but the quicker tricks for emotional numbing are hard to resist.
Anyway, I guess I got a decent poem out of it if you felt the angst. The question is, how to make this intense need for connection obvious to those who can actually provide it in the moment, without feeling completely pathetic and needy...? A work in progress...
Thanks for your warmth and kindness, always.
❤️k
I thought maybe I could defeat this particular moment of existential dread and aloneness by writing it, so I blurted this one direct to the page in about 2 minutes. I wish I could say it worked, but the quicker tricks for emotional numbing are hard to resist.
Anyway, I guess I got a decent poem out of it if you felt the angst. The question is, how to make this intense need for connection obvious to those who can actually provide it in the moment, without feeling completely pathetic and needy...? A work in progress...
Thanks for your warmth and kindness, always.
❤️k
Re. Moment
15th Nov 2022 2:54am
Hi BK
This bold write is anything but pathetic or needy.
I remember telling a friend of mine who was worrying about me
"Don't worry about me - I got me"
I was in the middle of one of my meltdowns and I didn't want to come across needy.
The moment I said it I felt empowered. Sometimes you gotta take that power back from the ones
you expect it from. And I don't mean to belittle how you felt while writing this. We go through all sorts
of invisibility in life. But sometimes all we have to do is look in the mirror and realize you got you:)
And it is exhausting but what other choice do you got - give up - nope:)
Don't mean to preach but this really dug up some old memories. Hope it helped somewhat.
This bold write is anything but pathetic or needy.
I remember telling a friend of mine who was worrying about me
"Don't worry about me - I got me"
I was in the middle of one of my meltdowns and I didn't want to come across needy.
The moment I said it I felt empowered. Sometimes you gotta take that power back from the ones
you expect it from. And I don't mean to belittle how you felt while writing this. We go through all sorts
of invisibility in life. But sometimes all we have to do is look in the mirror and realize you got you:)
And it is exhausting but what other choice do you got - give up - nope:)
Don't mean to preach but this really dug up some old memories. Hope it helped somewhat.
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Re: Re. Moment
15th Nov 2022 1:08pm
Thank you A, for your kindness and for lending me a little of your badassery! I always do come through these moments one way or another. Remembering that fact in the moment is where I sometimes falter. Now I have another voice in my head to help remind me. 😊
Thanks so much for getting it.
❤️k
Thanks so much for getting it.
❤️k
Re. Moment
16th Nov 2022 3:18am
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16th Nov 2022 10:50pm
Re. Moment
18th Nov 2022 3:04am
Damn!! This vibe speaks to me in a very unique way
As poets. we all have ideas sitting on the back burner in our creative minds
Sometimes it's the nudge from another's pen
That may center the movement
Of a latent poem.
This is one such vibe.
Thx for posting .
As poets. we all have ideas sitting on the back burner in our creative minds
Sometimes it's the nudge from another's pen
That may center the movement
Of a latent poem.
This is one such vibe.
Thx for posting .
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Re: Re. Moment
18th Nov 2022 12:49pm
Oh, hey! That's cool. I'm glad to have provided a nudge. Looking forward to what emerges from it.
Thanks so much for reading.
❤️k
Thanks so much for reading.
❤️k
Re. Moment
19th Nov 2022 1:32pm
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19th Nov 2022 2:21pm
Funny you should say that, I just found a music track that might work with this....