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For A Day
I'd break all the laws of man
I'd be immoral and a thief
I'd steal your kiss on chance
If for a day, you'd love me
I'd claim you were not willing
I'd swear you tried to fight me
I'd forget how passionate we were
If for a day, you loved me
I'd tell the world how cruel
I'd taken you so greedily
I'd bow my head and accept my fate
If for that day, you loved me
I'd be put up for judgement
I'd admit my crime at my hanging
I'd lie forever under a stone
If for one day, you'd love me
I'd stand before the gates of heaven
I'd fall in front of the almighty
I'd walk that path straight to hell
If on that day, you loved me
I'd burn in the violent fire
My existence would melt away
But I hope you'd remember me
And the love we had, that day.
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Author's Note
Keeping it short and sweet, for once. LOL
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Re. For A Day
5th Oct 2022 11:16pm
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5th Oct 2022 11:22pm
Look at you cussing it up! What!
I figured I was due to put something easier on the eyes and brains than my normal bulky writes. Lol.
So, I take it you approve?!
Thanks Crimson!
I figured I was due to put something easier on the eyes and brains than my normal bulky writes. Lol.
So, I take it you approve?!
Thanks Crimson!
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5th Oct 2022 11:27pm
well I'll tell you this there is so much passion and desire delivered in a powerful way.... as for your longer writes admittedly I've had trouble with them it's my focus I used to be an avid reader now it something doesn't get me right away I struggle making that connection... this is so beautiful to me 💕
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Re. For A Day
5th Oct 2022 11:36pm
I understand. I speed read and can't help it. I'm a spazz in the head. I usually read something twice or more, in case I missed details, etc. So longer writes, yeah, can become a bit much.
My longer writes are living, breathing things tho, to me. So I don't mind losing myself in my little world when I read and write them.
I will post more shorter ones, because you brought up a good point.
My longer writes are living, breathing things tho, to me. So I don't mind losing myself in my little world when I read and write them.
I will post more shorter ones, because you brought up a good point.
Re. For A Day
6th Oct 2022 00:48am
Hey buddy:)
This is so romantic. Look at you. haha
Easy to digest into the brain and just feel :)
A lot of wonderful visuals too.
Loved the movement also. Started out with a kiss
then moved pretty fast from there. Ending in melting away.
Dude - I'm working on a piece right now that deals with
the devil and fire. LOL
Always a pleasure:)
This is so romantic. Look at you. haha
Easy to digest into the brain and just feel :)
A lot of wonderful visuals too.
Loved the movement also. Started out with a kiss
then moved pretty fast from there. Ending in melting away.
Dude - I'm working on a piece right now that deals with
the devil and fire. LOL
Always a pleasure:)
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6th Oct 2022 1:06am
How you doing Tex?
( Isn't that what a woman would say to a cowboy? ) Frickin gender equality b.s. I tell ya! I'm being sucked into it!
Yes, I'm joking. I'm all for it, as long as you're willing to mow the yard too.
I'm curious, would you, as a female devil, be called "Diabla"? It's a legitimate question!
And thank you. This is obviously a fantasy write of mine. Because if there's a hell, I'm burning for far worse reasons. Lol. (There's no hell. And I'm still kissin!)
( Isn't that what a woman would say to a cowboy? ) Frickin gender equality b.s. I tell ya! I'm being sucked into it!
Yes, I'm joking. I'm all for it, as long as you're willing to mow the yard too.
I'm curious, would you, as a female devil, be called "Diabla"? It's a legitimate question!
And thank you. This is obviously a fantasy write of mine. Because if there's a hell, I'm burning for far worse reasons. Lol. (There's no hell. And I'm still kissin!)
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6th Oct 2022 1:11am
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6th Oct 2022 1:50am
Re. For A Day
6th Oct 2022 2:27am
That was a joy to get into early in the morning. A brisk walk, visiting nice things along the way.
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Re. For A Day
6th Oct 2022 2:32am
Re. For A Day
6th Oct 2022 5:54am
You have a very beautiful mind, my poet... It wanders all over with such vibrant colors you seem to fuse within your ink spill...
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8th Oct 2022 3:33am
You are correct in that my mind wanders! Lol.
I watch no TV programming. Only a really good movie once a week or so. I rather be doing something than watching the tube.
I have several hobbies that keep me sane and mentally stimulated.
Thanks for lumping me in with Russell Crowe. He is a great actor. And that was a very interesting movie. (A Beautiful Mind).
Have a great Saturday!
I watch no TV programming. Only a really good movie once a week or so. I rather be doing something than watching the tube.
I have several hobbies that keep me sane and mentally stimulated.
Thanks for lumping me in with Russell Crowe. He is a great actor. And that was a very interesting movie. (A Beautiful Mind).
Have a great Saturday!
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8th Oct 2022 5:12am
You know I will always give credit where credit is due and with me... you never have to look that far, and you are humbly welcome.. always
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8th Oct 2022 3:47am
Wow, I like your sentiment being so full of hope! That's just as inspiring as my write was.
Do you believe in reincarnation? Methinks that you do.
Thank you for your poetic comment. I really like your avatar pic btw.
Do you believe in reincarnation? Methinks that you do.
Thank you for your poetic comment. I really like your avatar pic btw.
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8th Oct 2022 11:19pm
Thank you, Tim.
On another site, someone commented that this write comes across as hopelessly desperate. And that no one is worth so much.
And I replied that they missed the whole point of it. It isn't a literal poem! Sheesh.
It's the longing. Who doesn't ever feel that.
On another site, someone commented that this write comes across as hopelessly desperate. And that no one is worth so much.
And I replied that they missed the whole point of it. It isn't a literal poem! Sheesh.
It's the longing. Who doesn't ever feel that.
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Re. For A Day
Anonymous
21st Oct 2022 2:05pm
Aww makes your heart smile :)
Everyone needs someone like this by their side.
Always think it's amazing how genuine love for another has you grow as a person, has you stretching...
It really reminds us of who we really are, even in those moments when we may not be so sure.
Gorgeous :)
Everyone needs someone like this by their side.
Always think it's amazing how genuine love for another has you grow as a person, has you stretching...
It really reminds us of who we really are, even in those moments when we may not be so sure.
Gorgeous :)
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Re. For A Day
22nd Oct 2022 3:29pm
Thank you Sophie.
This is one of the very few that I "gifted", and I was actually terrified to share it. -Can't let the world see me as wimpy! Yet sometimes we have to let it out of us, or we implode.
This is one of the very few that I "gifted", and I was actually terrified to share it. -Can't let the world see me as wimpy! Yet sometimes we have to let it out of us, or we implode.