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Bleeding Blood
Upon the sharpest
Hook moon of fright
Answering the call
Of a newborn night
Summoning inside this
Rusted metal shed
Surrounded by misted
Red air of dread
Remnants of lovers
From who I just fed
Withered and brittle
Inside my stained bed
See them swirl on my
Slivered vicious tongue
Flavored screams sung
To stay forever young
Inside my painted
Bloodroom of doom
Where witchcraft and
Bloodcraft become one
Ensnared by my
Long lifeless hair
Now rejuvenated
Inside my scarlet lair
Flooding the feeding
Truth of youth
All for the love of
Bleeding Blood
Hook moon of fright
Answering the call
Of a newborn night
Summoning inside this
Rusted metal shed
Surrounded by misted
Red air of dread
Remnants of lovers
From who I just fed
Withered and brittle
Inside my stained bed
See them swirl on my
Slivered vicious tongue
Flavored screams sung
To stay forever young
Inside my painted
Bloodroom of doom
Where witchcraft and
Bloodcraft become one
Ensnared by my
Long lifeless hair
Now rejuvenated
Inside my scarlet lair
Flooding the feeding
Truth of youth
All for the love of
Bleeding Blood
Author's Note
Just trying out darker stuff.
Was going to post in the month of
October but I'm way too impatient for that!!
Was going to post in the month of
October but I'm way too impatient for that!!
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Re. Bleeding Blood
25th Sep 2022 11:22pm
Re: Re. Bleeding Blood
26th Sep 2022 2:07am
Hey Ron:)
So happy you enjoyed my witchy vampy write. hahaha
Thanks for stopping by amigo!!
So happy you enjoyed my witchy vampy write. hahaha
Thanks for stopping by amigo!!
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Re: Re. Bleeding Blood
26th Sep 2022 2:08am
Hi D:)
Thanks for your razor snaps amiga.
Love that!!
Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment!!
Thanks for your razor snaps amiga.
Love that!!
Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment!!
Re. Bleeding Blood
Anonymous
26th Sep 2022 2:35am
Nicely penned
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Re: Re. Bleeding Blood
26th Sep 2022 11:36pm
Re. Bleeding Blood
26th Sep 2022 2:50am
Re: Re. Bleeding Blood
26th Sep 2022 11:38pm
Hi Her!!
Thank you. I was going to wait to post closer to Halloween but decided
nah. LOL
Thanks for stopping by and enjoying the read amiga!!
Thank you. I was going to wait to post closer to Halloween but decided
nah. LOL
Thanks for stopping by and enjoying the read amiga!!
Re. Bleeding Blood
26th Sep 2022 4:07am
Dear A,
The rhyming is great, there is so much energy and lots of imagery, and I enjoyed the subject greatly. Halloween is spooky fun and who doesn't love a witch? Why wait? Let’s conjure up some mischief.
H🌷
The rhyming is great, there is so much energy and lots of imagery, and I enjoyed the subject greatly. Halloween is spooky fun and who doesn't love a witch? Why wait? Let’s conjure up some mischief.
H🌷
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Re: Re. Bleeding Blood
26th Sep 2022 11:42pm
Hi H!!
I wanted it to sound like an adult bedtime story
for witches and vamps. LOL
Halloween is fun. Just playing around with my mind a bit.
Getting out of the comfort zone.
Thanks for the RL and support chica!!
I wanted it to sound like an adult bedtime story
for witches and vamps. LOL
Halloween is fun. Just playing around with my mind a bit.
Getting out of the comfort zone.
Thanks for the RL and support chica!!
Re. Bleeding Blood
26th Sep 2022 7:36am
I feel like a vampire with this joy of indulgence into your words. Thank you for sharing. :)
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Re: Re. Bleeding Blood
26th Sep 2022 11:44pm
Hi Jonas:)
Thank you for choosing the word indulgence with this write. LOL
I did indulge a bit - okay a lot - but it was all bloody fun.
Your most welcome.
Thanks for taking the time to leave a comment:)
Thank you for choosing the word indulgence with this write. LOL
I did indulge a bit - okay a lot - but it was all bloody fun.
Your most welcome.
Thanks for taking the time to leave a comment:)
Re. Bleeding Blood
26th Sep 2022 11:58pm
Yeah, I like this a lot. It has overtones of heavy metal, dying to be thrashed out & I don't mean Spinal Tap, lol. It has much more going for it than that. It's classic, well done on this.
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Re: Re. Bleeding Blood
27th Sep 2022 00:03am
Well bestill my heart Billy.
One of the best comments I've got from you.
Thank you so much for that.
You totally nailed it with the classic comment.
I wanted it to sound like a story handed down to
generations of witches and vampires.
They can be both - just saying. LOL
I know I would want to be. hehehehe
Thanks for commenting amigo:)
One of the best comments I've got from you.
Thank you so much for that.
You totally nailed it with the classic comment.
I wanted it to sound like a story handed down to
generations of witches and vampires.
They can be both - just saying. LOL
I know I would want to be. hehehehe
Thanks for commenting amigo:)
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Re: Re. Bleeding Blood
28th Sep 2022 2:28am
Yes - I wanted to save for the month of
October but I'm too impatient. LOL
Just thought I'd stretch my vamp wings a little. hehehe
Again - so happy to see ya amigo:)
October but I'm too impatient. LOL
Just thought I'd stretch my vamp wings a little. hehehe
Again - so happy to see ya amigo:)
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Re: Re. Bleeding Blood
28th Sep 2022 2:33am
Re. Bleeding Blood
I love the gearing up towards the best holiday... ever!!!... 🎃👻
Your bloody pen begets that feeling, tenfold!! Ohh to be rejuvenated in a scarlet lair!! Yesss, Yesss, Yessss! 🧛🏻♀️
Some wonderful creepy thoughts and imagery to feast my wicked mind upon...
Loved it, A!
🌹🕸🕷️🥀
x
Your bloody pen begets that feeling, tenfold!! Ohh to be rejuvenated in a scarlet lair!! Yesss, Yesss, Yessss! 🧛🏻♀️
Some wonderful creepy thoughts and imagery to feast my wicked mind upon...
Loved it, A!
🌹🕸🕷️🥀
x
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Re: Re. Bleeding Blood
1st Oct 2022 1:43am
Hi Blue:)
Couldn't resist. LOL
I wanted it to come across as my own little
bedtime story for adults.
I love witches and vampires.
Haven't seen a good movie about vamps in a while.
Blade was one of my favorites!!!
It's fun to dabble in the darker things for a bit.
Might post a couple more for Halloween.
Thank you so much for the RL and this awesome comment!!
Couldn't resist. LOL
I wanted it to come across as my own little
bedtime story for adults.
I love witches and vampires.
Haven't seen a good movie about vamps in a while.
Blade was one of my favorites!!!
It's fun to dabble in the darker things for a bit.
Might post a couple more for Halloween.
Thank you so much for the RL and this awesome comment!!
Re. Bleeding Blood
28th Sep 2022 7:19pm
Just when you think you know someone.... LOL.
This is awesome! I'm a little wary to Trick or Treat at your house, but I will applaud from across the street!
The rhymes are on point. The theme is carried really well throughout. Truly an edgy piece of Edgar Allen Poe-try!
This is awesome! I'm a little wary to Trick or Treat at your house, but I will applaud from across the street!
The rhymes are on point. The theme is carried really well throughout. Truly an edgy piece of Edgar Allen Poe-try!
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Re: Re. Bleeding Blood
1st Oct 2022 1:50am
Hey Styx:)
Thank you for the awesome comment.
Loved going trick or treating when I was younger.
Soo much fun in a small town. Being able to ride in the
back of a pick up and jumping off when the next stop
is near. Great times.
Applaud away buddy - I'm taking a bow.
I request chocolate - no flowers. hahaha
Did you just name drop Edgar Allen Poe-try.
Look at you being all witty with Poe-try. LOL
Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment
and the RL.
Thank you for the awesome comment.
Loved going trick or treating when I was younger.
Soo much fun in a small town. Being able to ride in the
back of a pick up and jumping off when the next stop
is near. Great times.
Applaud away buddy - I'm taking a bow.
I request chocolate - no flowers. hahaha
Did you just name drop Edgar Allen Poe-try.
Look at you being all witty with Poe-try. LOL
Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment
and the RL.
Re: Re. Bleeding Blood
1st Oct 2022 3:19pm
My sharp wit makes up for my blunt objects...
Alas, the Creator assembled me from the parts bin. I'm begrudgingly thankful I 'spose.
Alas, the Creator assembled me from the parts bin. I'm begrudgingly thankful I 'spose.
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Re: Re. Bleeding Blood
1st Oct 2022 7:30pm
Well I'm so happy the Creator created ya!!
From whatever part - true blessing buddy.
From whatever part - true blessing buddy.
Re. Bleeding Blood
30th Sep 2022 3:04pm
Re: Re. Bleeding Blood
1st Oct 2022 1:57am
Hey Cipher;)
You know the saying - Go big or go home. LOL
Just trying out some story telling blended with
poetry.
thanks for your snaps on this and the RL
Woop Woop
You know the saying - Go big or go home. LOL
Just trying out some story telling blended with
poetry.
thanks for your snaps on this and the RL
Woop Woop
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1st Oct 2022 7:11pm
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Re: Re. Bleeding Blood
1st Oct 2022 7:25pm
Hi Rianne
I do love writing dark poems. Enjoy reading them too.
Not going to lie - this write just flowed from my fingers
to the paper. Very much spell like.
For you to have given me such high praise on this
write is like a badge of honor. I so respect your writing and
point of view on poetry.
Thank you again for such a wonderful comment:)
Have a great day!!
I do love writing dark poems. Enjoy reading them too.
Not going to lie - this write just flowed from my fingers
to the paper. Very much spell like.
For you to have given me such high praise on this
write is like a badge of honor. I so respect your writing and
point of view on poetry.
Thank you again for such a wonderful comment:)
Have a great day!!
Re. Bleeding Blood
7th Oct 2022 10:24am
Wow! Your words and images have a strong sensual quality. I love that in a poem! Thanks for sharing.
Mundus
Mundus
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Re: Re. Bleeding Blood
8th Oct 2022 2:42am
Hello Mundus:)
Love imagery in poetry. For me it elevates the mind a bit.
So glad you enjoyed.
Thanks for the RL and commenting
Woop Woop!
Love imagery in poetry. For me it elevates the mind a bit.
So glad you enjoyed.
Thanks for the RL and commenting
Woop Woop!
Re: Re. Bleeding Blood
8th Oct 2022 10:17am
Yes, wordplay and imagery are my favorite poetic devices! It was my pleasure!
Mundus
Mundus
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Re. Bleeding Blood
15th Dec 2022 3:12am
This is the essence of vampirism that stalks the night and hunts to feed desire. If Anne Rice had focused on poetry this is what she would have conjured. But your contribution to the genre is more than darkly beautiful but a macabre art for the ages.
Xo
John
Xo
John
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Re: Re. Bleeding Blood
15th Dec 2022 3:22am
Hi John!
I wanted it to sound like a bed time story passed down from generation to generation so I really focused on the rhyming and syllables. Almost like how we sing the ABC song. LOL
Ann Rice is such a humbling comparison.
Thank you so much for that.
So glad you enjoyed my Halloween fun:)
I wanted it to sound like a bed time story passed down from generation to generation so I really focused on the rhyming and syllables. Almost like how we sing the ABC song. LOL
Ann Rice is such a humbling comparison.
Thank you so much for that.
So glad you enjoyed my Halloween fun:)