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GATEWAY
Beyond ideas of wrong and right
The truth exists in our plain sight
You and I connected, tree
Squirrel, rock and sky know me
Rivers and brothers
Mountains and mothers
Mind the words you sing
Relations are brewing
The truth exists in our plain sight
You and I connected, tree
Squirrel, rock and sky know me
Rivers and brothers
Mountains and mothers
Mind the words you sing
Relations are brewing
Published 21st Jul 2022
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25th Jul 2022 9:43pm
I like the way that humans and the natural world are connected here. I find brevity difficult, but you've made every word count. I'm not sure if this was your intention, but I took from this poem the fact that what we say, do and believe doesn't matter, and does matter at the same time. Doesn't matter because we are all interconnected and part of something much bigger and more important than ourselves. Does matter, because the words we use have a direct effect on those around us. Very much enjoyed.
26th Jul 2022 1:25am
That sense of paradox is definitely part of what I was going for. Glad you received it!
