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Tasting the Soup
I placed a kiss upon your lips,
a gift bestowed with care.
Then, I saw, but too late,
that your eyes held
other loves inside.
The pots
were stirred.
We held spoons
to our lips while fresh
and hot.
We feasted on the salty soups of love that night,
served up again and again,
haunted by the eyes of our absent lovers.
Later, we rinsed stained lips and sought our pardons.
Though forgiven, and now in the arms of my husband,
I still taste you on my tongue.
a gift bestowed with care.
Then, I saw, but too late,
that your eyes held
other loves inside.
The pots
were stirred.
We held spoons
to our lips while fresh
and hot.
We feasted on the salty soups of love that night,
served up again and again,
haunted by the eyes of our absent lovers.
Later, we rinsed stained lips and sought our pardons.
Though forgiven, and now in the arms of my husband,
I still taste you on my tongue.
Published 1st Dec 2021
Author's Note
I sometimes imagine what it would be like to return to my ex-husband after the loves I've tasted. But, I'll not seek a pardon from him.
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Hey there Nizana :)
You did a truly excellent job of engaging the reader, carrying us along.... I love the spacing and the separation within, as impact—it works very well at eliciting emotion... The fantasy within, is interesting and I sort of wonder if reality would be as easy...I suppose it rarely is.. lol... Nice Author's note, too.... glad you'd never ask for a pardon.. Good for you... Likewise!
I enjoyed this piece, greatly.
Thank you for sharing it with us 🙏🏻
🌹 - 💙
B
You did a truly excellent job of engaging the reader, carrying us along.... I love the spacing and the separation within, as impact—it works very well at eliciting emotion... The fantasy within, is interesting and I sort of wonder if reality would be as easy...I suppose it rarely is.. lol... Nice Author's note, too.... glad you'd never ask for a pardon.. Good for you... Likewise!
I enjoyed this piece, greatly.
Thank you for sharing it with us 🙏🏻
🌹 - 💙
B
3rd Dec 2021 9:20pm
Thank you sooooo much for your thoughtful comments. Thank you for noticing my efforts with spacing. Something a little new to me. You're such an encourager!
7th Sep 2022 00:24am
There's a bit of this sense of revenge by having all your lovers present in your tongue for him to taste after going back to him.
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