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Song of My Leaving
I've lived my life in boxes,
ordered and made to size.
I've known what some might pass for love,
so often reduced to lies.
I'm no saint in where the truth is told.
I've played parts that paid me well.
I've broken hearts and endured the same
and lived in depression's cell.
Freedom beckoned, so I had to leave
what had been the love of my life.
I could not breath and my spirit wept,
until I was no longer his wife.
ordered and made to size.
I've known what some might pass for love,
so often reduced to lies.
I'm no saint in where the truth is told.
I've played parts that paid me well.
I've broken hearts and endured the same
and lived in depression's cell.
Freedom beckoned, so I had to leave
what had been the love of my life.
I could not breath and my spirit wept,
until I was no longer his wife.
Published 11th Nov 2021
Author's Note
An awkward expression of the ending of my marriage.
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11th Nov 2021 7:25pm
Could be a heart break. Many in this world have broken hearts it is the travesty of life. It is never good to break hearts but then again sometimes it is.
11th Nov 2021 9:57pm
Yes, broken hearts are painful but they continue to beat. I couldn't continue to live as I had, so leaving was best.
11th Nov 2021 8:46pm
11th Nov 2021 9:09pm
11th Nov 2021 9:13pm
so real.
such description.
vivid, this trying situation.
thank you for sharing.
such description.
vivid, this trying situation.
thank you for sharing.
11th Nov 2021 10:00pm
Thank you. It was a bad situation but is better now.
You've got me thinking now of the "parts I played." I think there might be a few words to share there if I'll explore for a while.
You've got me thinking now of the "parts I played." I think there might be a few words to share there if I'll explore for a while.
11th Nov 2021 10:09pm
It sounds like you did well in leaving him. I hope your future is bright. I was struck by your line, "I'm no saint where the truth is told." Isn't that just part of relationships? I guess we all deceive or at least pretend at some levels on some occasions.
11th Nov 2021 10:13pm
Oh my, yes. A little creative deception sometimes adds spice to a relationship. Thank you for your thoughtful comment. Nizana
11th Nov 2021 11:49pm
I'm rooting for you to reach that light at the end of the tunnel but I think you already got there.
Very strong message here. You are right. Hearts continue to beat amiga:)
Very strong message here. You are right. Hearts continue to beat amiga:)
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12th Nov 2021 1:02pm
Belated welcome to DUP. After reading this, I could not help but think this rhyming message;
After all that has been said,
next chapter is to be made.
We here on the DUP
stand by you in your journey.
After all that has been said,
next chapter is to be made.
We here on the DUP
stand by you in your journey.
15th Nov 2021 8:43pm
14th Nov 2021 11:59am
Wow ... great write ... powerful ... yet with a hint of vulnerability ... well penned ... welcome to DUP ...
14th Nov 2021 12:24pm
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4th May 2022 2:02pm
dear Nizana
i like how the opening brought thought of the 1962 song Little Boxes by Malvina Reynolds
and how your p0eming spoke to a myriad of life's vortexes
a warm smile
silent lotus
i like how the opening brought thought of the 1962 song Little Boxes by Malvina Reynolds
and how your p0eming spoke to a myriad of life's vortexes
a warm smile
silent lotus
4th May 2022 2:04pm
17th Sep 2022 3:48am
Sadness and acknowledgement of the past with all it's hardships and lessons it teaches in this life.
As much as you loved the person but it is wasn't enough to keep you together.
"What God Has Put Together Let No Man Put Asunder"
That which was supposed to be was not to be.
As much as you loved the person but it is wasn't enough to keep you together.
"What God Has Put Together Let No Man Put Asunder"
That which was supposed to be was not to be.
29th May 2023 9:30am
Re-reading this (I note your mother's response to my comment), I would say this my favourite verse, with its dramatic allusion and the frankness that so characterised your mother's writes:
I'm no saint in where the truth is told.
I've played parts that paid me well.
I've broken hearts and endured the same
and lived in depression's cell.
I'm no saint in where the truth is told.
I've played parts that paid me well.
I've broken hearts and endured the same
and lived in depression's cell.
