Autumn's Demise

Couldn't come up with enough to make it into a song, but didn't want to toss it either.

I'm glad you liked it.

Really lovely and a tinge melancholic.... I'm glad you didn't toss it, Tim .... it resonates..... and paints such a great picture in the mind's eye...


Wonderful work - 🍃
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—B

I really doubt I would have tossed it. I've got a folder full of tidbits I still plan on using eventually, but that one I think stood up alone well. Melancholy is the right word for it I think.

I'm glad you liked it.

Plan on moving south soon, and I'll miss autumn there. Everything stays green all year long. I'm sure we'll head north to see those pretty colors from time to time.

And eventually allow life to start anew

The great circle of life.

Yep, everything has a life cycle.

Glad you liked it.

Awesome write. Honest critique?  Switching the words "snowfall" and "whiteout" gives it a poetic edginess more so. Because it flips the more obvious description.
Ya? Nah?  

I kinda shy away from those kinda tricks. Every once in a while they work, but more often than not they just confuse the readers.

I remember when I used to trash talk playing checker pool, I'd tell my opponent that playing him was easy, "like taking a baby from his candy."

Glad you liked it.

Fair enough.  I myself tend to hide inside metaphors too much perhaps.  Yet one thing about prose/poetry is how readers (the audience) can and will interpret what we write for themselves.  Some will say "exactly!" and some will say "what?".  
At any rate, your piece is good as is, as you intended.  I enjoyed it a lot.