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Approaching Dark
In the desk drawer with erasers and pencils to short to
sharpen. Every night the clock has to be wound of the
approaching dark. The thunder echoing like the cracking
of knuckles. Touching the ground of the decaying compost
where the dead sleep with pointed-up toes. Murmuring a
litany of musical chairs.
sharpen. Every night the clock has to be wound of the
approaching dark. The thunder echoing like the cracking
of knuckles. Touching the ground of the decaying compost
where the dead sleep with pointed-up toes. Murmuring a
litany of musical chairs.
Published 20th Sep 2021
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20th Sep 2021 4:14pm
It definitely has a gothic feel! The pencils remaining in the drawer, unusable, as a reminder of the finality that awaits sets the tone.
20th Sep 2021 4:16pm
20th Sep 2021 4:22pm
Those worn out pencils, how many dark words of despair they must have written. There is no stopping time and the countdown, darkness approaches. I really like the visuals, echoing like the cracking of knuckles and pointed-up toes ...
20th Sep 2021 4:24pm
20th Sep 2021 4:48pm
20th Sep 2021 4:58pm
20th Sep 2021 6:07pm
I got your message and came immediately to this. To me it is dark, yet not very dark. Who will get the last chair when the final music stops? The darkness complements the light.
By the way, I don't mean to be picky, but in, " In the desk drawer with erasers and pencils to short to
sharpen." , the "to" after pencils should be " too ". I believe
I liked the poem even though I don't really go for free verse. Good job in making one think...
By the way, I don't mean to be picky, but in, " In the desk drawer with erasers and pencils to short to
sharpen." , the "to" after pencils should be " too ". I believe
I liked the poem even though I don't really go for free verse. Good job in making one think...
20th Sep 2021 6:09pm
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21st Sep 2021 6:18pm
21st Sep 2021 6:19pm
