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The Breadth Of Life
Written by
Bluevelvete
Published 30th Jun 2021
Author's Note
For the Visual Poetry #aging comp
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/11955/
©Blu2021
Every breath blown
wishes seek their known
From crawling first tries
to awkward teenage cries
Young adventure
indestructible in surrender
Sands of time quicken
mid life roars a daily given
Before blinks fully appreciate,
an empty nest's silence permeates
Treasured days morph,
breaths slow—
to a final wish to blow
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/11955/
©Blu2021
Every breath blown
wishes seek their known
From crawling first tries
to awkward teenage cries
Young adventure
indestructible in surrender
Sands of time quicken
mid life roars a daily given
Before blinks fully appreciate,
an empty nest's silence permeates
Treasured days morph,
breaths slow—
to a final wish to blow
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Re. The Breadth Of Life
30th Jun 2021 8:21am
Dandelion clocks we called them as kids, supposedly the number of blows could tell you roughly the time lol
Fabulous write I really loved that, thanks for the memory beautiful
Love and light
Ron x
Fabulous write I really loved that, thanks for the memory beautiful
Love and light
Ron x
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Re: Re. The Breadth Of Life
30th Jun 2021 8:29pm
That's lovely, Ron. I am so happy that I could remind you of fond memories... I appreciate your thoughtfulness, the list add and all your generous support
Much love,
🌹 - 💙
B
Much love,
🌹 - 💙
B
Re. The Breadth Of Life
30th Jun 2021 9:45am
Re: Re. The Breadth Of Life
30th Jun 2021 8:35pm
Thanks for the compliment and your generous list add, DC..I'm so glad you enjoyed it and that last line...
I appreciate you and appreciate the time you take in reading, my friend
🌹 - B
I appreciate you and appreciate the time you take in reading, my friend
🌹 - B
Re. The Breadth Of Life
Anonymous
30th Jun 2021 2:21pm
Hey Blue…….luv how you’ve done this…….pure art in design and words……enjoyed very much…….purple luv & hugs xo :)
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Re: Re. The Breadth Of Life
30th Jun 2021 8:41pm
Awww... hey there, my purple pal!... your comments are so uplifting and thoughtful.... you have my gratitude and appreciation, my dear.... I'm all smiles you liked it! ☺
🌹 - 💜
xoxo
B
🌹 - 💜
xoxo
B
Re. The Breadth Of Life
30th Jun 2021 6:25pm
This is a delightful read BV, just the right balance as the dandelion clock diminishes its wishes, great work linking the image. very much enjoyed. R
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Re: Re. The Breadth Of Life
30th Jun 2021 8:44pm
Hey there Rl, thanks for the lovely sentiments and the kindness of your list add... I am grateful and delighted you enjoyed.
Always a pleasure ✨
🌹 - 💙
B
Always a pleasure ✨
🌹 - 💙
B
Re. The Breadth Of Life
30th Jun 2021 6:31pm
Every breath of life is precious including yours. Keep on writing you beautiful strong smart sexy woman.
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Thanks for always being a faithful reader, Francisco... 🌹 I appreciate it muchly
Re. The Breadth Of Life
30th Jun 2021 6:31pm
This captivated my attention. Such a lovely description of life's sequence!
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Re: Re. The Breadth Of Life
30th Jun 2021 8:51pm
Ohh LV, I do love that I was able to captivate... I thank you for reading and for such kindness in your thoughtful remarks..... thank you.
It's always so lovely to have you visit 🦋
🌹 - 💙
B
It's always so lovely to have you visit 🦋
🌹 - 💙
B
Re. The Breadth Of Life
30th Jun 2021 6:40pm
Exquisite wording in Just Right array.. goddz how i love ur pen!! Wishes blown hold a magick all their own n i feel like u hit on that Bigtime here ;)
reading thru i found myself in tender smile, uve hit upon every sweet spot with me- right down to the empty nestin.. [how that one does sting fondly, my daughter is 20 and outtie on her own for first time]
Rubbing lukkies all over ur page for the comp, ladyLove.. this touches deep!!
mwahs n lovestuffs♡♡♡
~d
reading thru i found myself in tender smile, uve hit upon every sweet spot with me- right down to the empty nestin.. [how that one does sting fondly, my daughter is 20 and outtie on her own for first time]
Rubbing lukkies all over ur page for the comp, ladyLove.. this touches deep!!
mwahs n lovestuffs♡♡♡
~d
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Re: Re. The Breadth Of Life
30th Jun 2021 9:17pm
I am so grateful for your thoughtfulness, lovely d... All my fulfilled and content sighs of gratitude, are yours.... so delighted that you could relate and that you found some joy and a touch of melancholy within... I'll take all that lukkies offered, too... as I very rarely win anything.... hahaha... it's more about the creating and learning from doing...
Your thoughts and insights are so valuable to me, keeping me motivated and utterly thankful.
Much love your way, dearest lady ✨
🌹 - 💙
xo
B
Your thoughts and insights are so valuable to me, keeping me motivated and utterly thankful.
Much love your way, dearest lady ✨
🌹 - 💙
xo
B
Re. The Breadth Of Life
30th Jun 2021 6:54pm
Re: Re. The Breadth Of Life
30th Jun 2021 8:57pm
Ohhh Tallen... I hope that was a cleansing good cry.... I do so adore you and your visits, my brother in ink - 💙 Thank you for the generous list add and leaving me your thoughts...
Much love and good wishes✨ your way,
🌹-B
Much love and good wishes✨ your way,
🌹-B
Re. The Breadth Of Life
1st Jul 2021 4:15am
Dear BV,
An absolutely amazingly awesome timeline from cradle to grave and each period of life with their own special characteristic. Reading this drove home how quickly each of these phases last and how there’s no going back. I’m quite melancholy from the reflection this write has provided for me. Outstanding poem. I wish you the best for this comp. it’s fabulous.
H🌷
An absolutely amazingly awesome timeline from cradle to grave and each period of life with their own special characteristic. Reading this drove home how quickly each of these phases last and how there’s no going back. I’m quite melancholy from the reflection this write has provided for me. Outstanding poem. I wish you the best for this comp. it’s fabulous.
H🌷
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Hey Honoria :)
It's lovely to see and hear from you... I missed you and hope you are doing well, my dear 🙏🏻 - 💙
I have been in a sadder frame of mind for a bit so that melancholy feel must have seeped in. Nothing too heavy just blah... lol.... I thank you for reading, the generous list add and all your lovely kind words of support and encouragement.... I am reminded of my good luck and fortune that I receive such amazing feedback from you. I wholeheartedly appreciate it and never take it for granted.... it means so much to me.
Much love and respect,
🌹 - 💙
xo
B
It's lovely to see and hear from you... I missed you and hope you are doing well, my dear 🙏🏻 - 💙
I have been in a sadder frame of mind for a bit so that melancholy feel must have seeped in. Nothing too heavy just blah... lol.... I thank you for reading, the generous list add and all your lovely kind words of support and encouragement.... I am reminded of my good luck and fortune that I receive such amazing feedback from you. I wholeheartedly appreciate it and never take it for granted.... it means so much to me.
Much love and respect,
🌹 - 💙
xo
B
Re. The Breadth Of Life
1st Jul 2021 10:18am
Re: Re. The Breadth Of Life
1st Jul 2021 10:20pm
I appreciate the read, slip... thanks for the lovely sentiments... 🌹
Enjoy your evening!
-B
Enjoy your evening!
-B
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Re: Re. The Breadth Of Life
1st Jul 2021 10:43pm
Hey there, ethan :)
I hope you are doing well, it's nice seeing you 🦋
I really like where your mind took you, while reading...I can wholly understand that and see that notion clearly... I am definitely hoping that with advancing age comes the value of wisdom....because I definitely know that your body itself starts to take it's hits... somewhere along the lines between your late 30s and early 40's...lmao.... bouncing back becomes increasingly more difficult.... @ 48, I am still amazed at how my mind feels like I'm still in my youth and then I wake up and roll out of bed.... and in seconds, I remember... "Oh yeah, not so much!" ... lol.... Cherish it while you can!
I'm glad you enjoyed the 'dandelion clock' of sorts.....it's always nice to read your insights - 🌹
Smiles and well wishes ✨ 💫 ✨
-🐝
I hope you are doing well, it's nice seeing you 🦋
I really like where your mind took you, while reading...I can wholly understand that and see that notion clearly... I am definitely hoping that with advancing age comes the value of wisdom....because I definitely know that your body itself starts to take it's hits... somewhere along the lines between your late 30s and early 40's...lmao.... bouncing back becomes increasingly more difficult.... @ 48, I am still amazed at how my mind feels like I'm still in my youth and then I wake up and roll out of bed.... and in seconds, I remember... "Oh yeah, not so much!" ... lol.... Cherish it while you can!
I'm glad you enjoyed the 'dandelion clock' of sorts.....it's always nice to read your insights - 🌹
Smiles and well wishes ✨ 💫 ✨
-🐝
Re. The Breadth Of Life
1st Jul 2021 10:21pm
Nicely penned B ... like the pairing with the photo ... nice couplets ... like how you experimented ... it turned out really well ... the final line tucked in the lower right corner was brilliant ...
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Re: Re. The Breadth Of Life
1st Jul 2021 10:55pm
My umpteenth attempt at a visual poem!! hahaha ... I swear I can never quite get them... I practice and try yet again.... it's the only way to learn....
I really appreciate your thoughtful comments, LilD ... It's what popped into my mind when going through pictures for the comp... the dandelion image struck me.... and the words came... I'm so grateful for the list add and your feedback.... it's always nerve-wracking to publish something that you are experimenting with... I sigh in relief.... :)
Thank you—
All my warmest regards,
🌹 - 💙
B
I really appreciate your thoughtful comments, LilD ... It's what popped into my mind when going through pictures for the comp... the dandelion image struck me.... and the words came... I'm so grateful for the list add and your feedback.... it's always nerve-wracking to publish something that you are experimenting with... I sigh in relief.... :)
Thank you—
All my warmest regards,
🌹 - 💙
B
Re. The Breadth Of Life
2nd Jul 2021 1:32am
Dear, Lady Blue
A beautifully composed, concise summation of a life. I would say human life but I believe animals face some of these emotions as well. Completely identifiable fodder for ponder. Beavissima, goddess BB🐻💞🐰
A beautifully composed, concise summation of a life. I would say human life but I believe animals face some of these emotions as well. Completely identifiable fodder for ponder. Beavissima, goddess BB🐻💞🐰
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Re: Re. The Breadth Of Life
2nd Jul 2021 4:43am
Thanks, BB... I am happy to see you and completely delighted that you enjoyed reading my little comp piece... I appreciate you, the generous list add and all your lovely kindness... 🐻 💞 🐰
Be well and enjoy your weekend...
🌹 - 💙
xoxo
B
Be well and enjoy your weekend...
🌹 - 💙
xoxo
B
Re. The Breadth Of Life
2nd Jul 2021 5:32am
Re: Re. The Breadth Of Life
2nd Jul 2021 5:37am
I am happy to breathe along with you... ;)
Thanks again, my dear
🌹 - 💙
I appreciate you and the thoughtfulness of your list add...
Always a pleasure ✨
-B
Thanks again, my dear
🌹 - 💙
I appreciate you and the thoughtfulness of your list add...
Always a pleasure ✨
-B
Re. The Breadth Of Life
4th Jul 2021 7:48am
The dandelion metaphor of windblown memories that seek a place in my heart tonight. Through your poem, they have found that home. And I am most grateful to you for taking me back to a time that I long with all my heart to be.
Xo
John
Xo
John
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Re: Re. The Breadth Of Life
6th Jul 2021 6:28am
I loved that you felt the visual along with the poetry.... I have been trying to improve my visual poetry and hopefully this that, an improvement, I mean!! My heart sings that you found the tender tinge of nostalgia and small sweetness that I was hoping you try and evoke...
All my heartfelt gratitude, John ✨
🌹 - 💙
-S
All my heartfelt gratitude, John ✨
🌹 - 💙
-S
Re. The Breadth Of Life
28th Jul 2021 5:02pm
Wonderful poem Blue. I love the feel of the aging process coming down to a wish accompanied by the perfect image.
Well done.
Well done.
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28th Jul 2021 6:28pm
Thanks so much for reading Walter!!
I appreciate you taking the time and leaving your thoughts with me.
🌹 - 💙
B
I appreciate you taking the time and leaving your thoughts with me.
🌹 - 💙
B