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Scribhneoir
A midnight yarn weaving into truth
A lonely impulse of delight
Drips the potion into my tea
Bleeds the sadness from the night
A timely relic of yesterlore
Bridges the distances of two shores
When tongues were still with terminal weight
The self I love and love to hate
I acquiesce to an uncommon will
To move the beast formidably still
From his cave in my chest, an alien thrill
To rethread the needle, rewet the quill.
A lonely impulse of delight
Drips the potion into my tea
Bleeds the sadness from the night
A timely relic of yesterlore
Bridges the distances of two shores
When tongues were still with terminal weight
The self I love and love to hate
I acquiesce to an uncommon will
To move the beast formidably still
From his cave in my chest, an alien thrill
To rethread the needle, rewet the quill.
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Re. Scribhneoir
Hi Margo :)
Firstly, it's wonderful seeing you here again, I'm so glad to see you post a piece, this morning.
Now - YOU are definitely a writer, indeed... that clever title, says much.
Your rhyming flows impeccable and the juxtaposition against your 'delightful yarn', the word choices and phrasing, feel like old friends... imo. Getting back to your forever love of writing, to lighten your beast and perhaps love yourself a teenie bit more, hits home and resonates deeply. Damn, I missed your quill and I'm glad to get a chance to sample it this morning. Needless to say, I thoroughly enjoyed reading from beginning to end.
Don't be a stranger, my friend
It's always a pleasure.
Thanks for sharing,
🌹
xo
-B
Firstly, it's wonderful seeing you here again, I'm so glad to see you post a piece, this morning.
Now - YOU are definitely a writer, indeed... that clever title, says much.
Your rhyming flows impeccable and the juxtaposition against your 'delightful yarn', the word choices and phrasing, feel like old friends... imo. Getting back to your forever love of writing, to lighten your beast and perhaps love yourself a teenie bit more, hits home and resonates deeply. Damn, I missed your quill and I'm glad to get a chance to sample it this morning. Needless to say, I thoroughly enjoyed reading from beginning to end.
Don't be a stranger, my friend
It's always a pleasure.
Thanks for sharing,
🌹
xo
-B
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30th Mar 2021 4:00pm
Thank you so much, sweetheart 😇🥰❤❤❤...you always make me feel happy and appreciated so much! Yes, I had a life changing experience this past Saturday...scared me back to life I think. Anyway, I selfishly just got on here and posted and read a few of today's new poems, but I always stop over to Blue's corner and see what magic she is weaving, so I'm going to do that! The fact that my writing resonates with you is such a compliment to me! 🤩 thank you, girl.
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31st Mar 2021 11:57am
If I could write like this I would quit my day job ....
Amazing writing
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1st Apr 2021 10:01pm
This is simply fantastic ... love the ripe plump words ... the flow ... great rhyme ... resonating message ... last line is pure poetic gold ...
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1st Apr 2021 10:19pm
Thank you, LilDragonfly. I love that name! It means the world to be complimented in that way! I find the nasty habit of "getting by" creep into my writing where it has NO place, so when I know I put a lot of effort into one and it is acknowledged that's the best! I love and saved your latest...
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18th Apr 2021 11:37pm
Wow, Rian, you floor me. Thank you so much for that beautifully poetic critique. You make me want to really study and become a better and deeper writer, so your compliments mean the world. Hope you're having a lovely, creative day! Oh, and if I didn't say so in my other responses, thank you so much for adding my work to your reading list! 😊
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20th Apr 2021 00:56am
I am learning that...all is becoming...yes...
(((Hugs and big love, sweetheart 💜💛💜💛)))
And thank you so much again.
(((Hugs and big love, sweetheart 💜💛💜💛)))
And thank you so much again.