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semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
#1.
caressing of my cheek
with the back of his hand,
pressing in tightly
lips to lips,
a
perfect
first
kiss
#2.
his
cadence
of authority,
the kind
oozing
nothing
but confident
sultry,
timbre'd in
pure sex,
whispers—
"Don't fall in love."
#3.
wiping away tears
as the tiniest
smile remains
'I. hear. you.'
echos through
the trees
s a i l i n g
to find you...there
Written by
Bluevelvete
Published 17th Jan 2021
Author's Note
20 words comp
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17th Jan 2021 2:25am
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Re: Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
17th Jan 2021 2:36am
Your encouragements aren't taken lightly.
Thank you very much, Tim
.... for everything.
🌹
xo
Thank you very much, Tim
.... for everything.
🌹
xo
Anonymous
- Edited 6th Dec 2022 00:45am
17th Jan 2021 2:42am
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Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
17th Jan 2021 3:06am
Re: Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
17th Jan 2021 3:07am
Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
17th Jan 2021 4:09am
Beautiful, Blue❣️❣️ I love the romance, the tenderness of the first stanza. My favorite passage is,
"sultry
timbre'd in
pure sex,"
Brava, S 💋🐻💋🐻
"sultry
timbre'd in
pure sex,"
Brava, S 💋🐻💋🐻
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Re: Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
17th Jan 2021 4:20am
Mmmm....
My favorite, too!
Ty for reading and your thoughtful comments
I appreciate you,
🌹
xo
My favorite, too!
Ty for reading and your thoughtful comments
I appreciate you,
🌹
xo
Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
17th Jan 2021 5:53am
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17th Jan 2021 5:58am
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19th Jan 2021 00:30am
Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
17th Jan 2021 6:45am
Dear BV,
Who is this mythical lover who can so gently illicit devotion and make me swoon with his caress? Never mind. It’s Donny Osmond. I knew that.
I am in awe of the poem itself, it’s gorgeous. I really enjoyed how beautifully you tied these vignettes together in story line and using different fonts- that was a stellar idea. All the best in the comp. This is a fab piece. H🌷
Who is this mythical lover who can so gently illicit devotion and make me swoon with his caress? Never mind. It’s Donny Osmond. I knew that.
I am in awe of the poem itself, it’s gorgeous. I really enjoyed how beautifully you tied these vignettes together in story line and using different fonts- that was a stellar idea. All the best in the comp. This is a fab piece. H🌷
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Re: Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
17th Jan 2021 6:57am
Dearest, H
Your avatar and lovely visit couldn't be more welcomed tonight. A long rough day, ending on a smile and chuckle from you, is much much better! Donny Osmond, she says!!! I remember the whole Osmond family had perfect smiles and you knew instantly they were all related...hahahaha. He was a heartthrob, that's for sure. I loved Shawn Cassidy.. hahaha... Ty so much for reading and enjoying my 60 words... (Damn that's hard!)
I deeply appreciate your comments and I love love love seeing you!!
(Congrats on the diner win, I told you, you were my favorite too!! 👍🏻 Yess!)
Please don't be a stranger,
Much love and hugs, 🌹
xo
-B
Your avatar and lovely visit couldn't be more welcomed tonight. A long rough day, ending on a smile and chuckle from you, is much much better! Donny Osmond, she says!!! I remember the whole Osmond family had perfect smiles and you knew instantly they were all related...hahahaha. He was a heartthrob, that's for sure. I loved Shawn Cassidy.. hahaha... Ty so much for reading and enjoying my 60 words... (Damn that's hard!)
I deeply appreciate your comments and I love love love seeing you!!
(Congrats on the diner win, I told you, you were my favorite too!! 👍🏻 Yess!)
Please don't be a stranger,
Much love and hugs, 🌹
xo
-B
Re: Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
17th Jan 2021 7:07am
I’m sorry you had a rough day. That bites. Full disclosure when Donny and I broke up (their teeth and noses were too perfect) I dated David Cassidy and Shawn was a darling little lad! (All that was completely fictional. Desperate though I was to have dated either or both)
Thank you for the compliment about the diner piece. I was very surprised and very grateful given who I was up against😉.
Thank you for the compliment about the diner piece. I was very surprised and very grateful given who I was up against😉.
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Re: Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
17th Jan 2021 10:06am
You're extremely welcome and it wasn't a surprise to me! I love your El Greco! piece (yes, I'm going to say it) to pieces!!!!... hahaha. It's true, though. It was so heart felt and beautifully written.
I used to have a poster of Shawn Cassidy on my bedroom wall... my sister had her Gene Simmons from Kiss (in full Kiss. makeup and huge spiked boots one) poster on the same shared wall and told me once, that Shawn was in the hospital because Gene Simmons didn't like him and shoved his spiked boot down Shawn's throat.....
What a little mean shit!!... but it's hysterical.
Omg... Lmfao!!! TO THIS DAY I remember that play out like it was yesterday.!!! It STILL makes me laugh whenever I think of Shawn Cassidy, that's what pops into my head... My sister also Loooved Donny Osmond, too.. (so coincidental!) ... weirdo kid, she was!!
-just some levity this morning!
🌹
xo
I used to have a poster of Shawn Cassidy on my bedroom wall... my sister had her Gene Simmons from Kiss (in full Kiss. makeup and huge spiked boots one) poster on the same shared wall and told me once, that Shawn was in the hospital because Gene Simmons didn't like him and shoved his spiked boot down Shawn's throat.....
What a little mean shit!!... but it's hysterical.
Omg... Lmfao!!! TO THIS DAY I remember that play out like it was yesterday.!!! It STILL makes me laugh whenever I think of Shawn Cassidy, that's what pops into my head... My sister also Loooved Donny Osmond, too.. (so coincidental!) ... weirdo kid, she was!!
-just some levity this morning!
🌹
xo
Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
17th Jan 2021 8:21am
So beautiful, girl I adore this like I adore my friend Blue. With my whole heart. Its awesome
Love and light
Ron xx
Love and light
Ron xx
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Re: Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
17th Jan 2021 9:41am
Ron,
Your comments and thoughtful actions are welcomed with gratefulness and THE biggest smile. Thank you for YOU and your time invested
For all you say and support.
Without you and others who I believe in, it would be extremely difficult to believe in myself like I can, now. It's a gift of which I'm aware and forever appreciative of.
Much love with hugs and kisses returned from across the pond,
🌹
xo
B
Your comments and thoughtful actions are welcomed with gratefulness and THE biggest smile. Thank you for YOU and your time invested
For all you say and support.
Without you and others who I believe in, it would be extremely difficult to believe in myself like I can, now. It's a gift of which I'm aware and forever appreciative of.
Much love with hugs and kisses returned from across the pond,
🌹
xo
B
Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
17th Jan 2021 9:34am
Re: Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
17th Jan 2021 9:44am
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17th Jan 2021 2:37pm
Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
17th Jan 2021 2:53pm
BV the beauty of your thoughts flow gracefully in poetry. You are truly an amazing talent and your expressive emotions are always delivered with flawless charisma. Beautiful !!!
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Re: Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
17th Jan 2021 4:22pm
FF,
You're generous sentiments are extremely kind and I can only hope to be remotely close to having such character. I'm humbled with your visits and kindness. The RL isn't taken lightly and I'm grateful
It's always such a pleasure,
🌹
xo
-B
You're generous sentiments are extremely kind and I can only hope to be remotely close to having such character. I'm humbled with your visits and kindness. The RL isn't taken lightly and I'm grateful
It's always such a pleasure,
🌹
xo
-B
Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
17th Jan 2021 8:45pm
As always another A++ poem. Feel the glow and need the UPward flow. Hugs, kisses, and peace. oral
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Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
18th Jan 2021 00:13am
Re: Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
18th Jan 2021 00:32am
Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
18th Jan 2021 00:19am
Re: Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
You're very kind and I appreciate the excitement in your thoughts and comments. Thank you so much for being such a committed reader, Francisco
🌹
🌹
Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
20th Jan 2021 6:54pm
I think I've stated before that there is always a challenge in capturing the essence of profound emotions with brevity. The three movements here convey just that, soft and passionate with overwhelming feelings.
You did a great job.
Best of luck in the comp.
You did a great job.
Best of luck in the comp.
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Re: Re. semblances of a love poem ~ [vignettes of a side story]
20th Jan 2021 6:58pm
Walter,
It's one of my desires to try and accomplish (capturing that essence) , yet I always feel like it's juuuust quite out of grasp... So your comments are extremely meaningful and help me to realize I am on the right track...
I'm truly appreciative, my friend
🌹
xo
It's one of my desires to try and accomplish (capturing that essence) , yet I always feel like it's juuuust quite out of grasp... So your comments are extremely meaningful and help me to realize I am on the right track...
I'm truly appreciative, my friend
🌹
xo