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three stories of me (and he)
(i)
my small feet atop his
teaching me to dance;
and finer things,
like Elvis's voice
and that love, beaming down
(ii)
"mud monster"
in the blackened basement;
me, clinging to his leg
as we hunted for my sisters—
"DADDY !?!!"
..i peed.
(iii)
you couldn't really talk
confused and afraid
i sat and sang
it was just you and i
..... until the end.
Published 12th Jan 2021
| Edited 14th Jan 2021
Author's Note
~Missy's 20 words comp
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/11724/
Three of my most loving, moving (and brutal) memories of my dad and I. He's wearing MY Mickey Mouse hat that I had just received from Santa Claus on Christmas morning, in'78 I think. He'd probably just got done working 80 hours and putting together all of our Christmas toys , sleeping about 2 hours, only to have us wake him up at 5 in the morning because Santa had visited... lol. He looks pretty good for being utterly exhausted.. lmao
I just fucking miss him and the ache is a forever reminder...
©Blu2020
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/11724/
Three of my most loving, moving (and brutal) memories of my dad and I. He's wearing MY Mickey Mouse hat that I had just received from Santa Claus on Christmas morning, in'78 I think. He'd probably just got done working 80 hours and putting together all of our Christmas toys , sleeping about 2 hours, only to have us wake him up at 5 in the morning because Santa had visited... lol. He looks pretty good for being utterly exhausted.. lmao
I just fucking miss him and the ache is a forever reminder...
©Blu2020
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12th Jan 2021 9:04am
12th Jan 2021 9:09am
12th Jan 2021 9:26am
12th Jan 2021 9:29am
12th Jan 2021 1:53pm
12th Jan 2021 9:44am
Very powerful poem. I believe no one is truly gone as long as their memory lives on.
I agree with you, about memories. Very much so.
I thank you for reading, the list add and your wise words...
They're deeply appreciated.
Always love your visits and I especially like hearing your thoughts.. really.
💜
xo
B
I thank you for reading, the list add and your wise words...
They're deeply appreciated.
Always love your visits and I especially like hearing your thoughts.. really.
💜
xo
B
12th Jan 2021 11:30am
Your father would be thrilled with this poem
A fine tribute and I know writing these keeps his memory close to your heart.
I've written a bunch of them myself and they help ....
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A fine tribute and I know writing these keeps his memory close to your heart.
I've written a bunch of them myself and they help ....
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Ty for reading, PS
I appreciate the kind words and I like to think that he'd laugh and make a joke about me writing about HIM,...yeah... He would of ribbed me, good.. yet, been secretly over the Moon... hahaha
-Grateful for your eyes..
🌹
xo
B
I appreciate the kind words and I like to think that he'd laugh and make a joke about me writing about HIM,...yeah... He would of ribbed me, good.. yet, been secretly over the Moon... hahaha
-Grateful for your eyes..
🌹
xo
B
12th Jan 2021 11:37am
12th Jan 2021 2:04pm
You're so absolutely correct, C
Powerful and visceral.
Thank you for reading, the list add and you taking the time you have.
I appreciate you more than you know
Much love and respect,
🌹
xo
Powerful and visceral.
Thank you for reading, the list add and you taking the time you have.
I appreciate you more than you know
Much love and respect,
🌹
xo
12th Jan 2021 11:44am
This Beautiful tribute for Dad fills my heart. This is truly beautiful and written with so much love that it spills over into my own fond memories of my childhood. Thanks BV for sharing this heart-warming poem!...damn you! got me filling up with emotion to start my day, lol. BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!
FF,
Thank you for reading, the list add and this beautiful and thoughtful comment. I am always on a roller-coaster ride with emotions, when it comes to missing my dad and that ache, then the smiling and laughing as his sense of humor washes over me... sometimes the realization that he's gone, feels like yesterday...
I'm appreciative of all your kindness..
Much love,
🌹
xo
Thank you for reading, the list add and this beautiful and thoughtful comment. I am always on a roller-coaster ride with emotions, when it comes to missing my dad and that ache, then the smiling and laughing as his sense of humor washes over me... sometimes the realization that he's gone, feels like yesterday...
I'm appreciative of all your kindness..
Much love,
🌹
xo
12th Jan 2021 1:59pm
My lovely friend,
Ty for taking the time, your list add and the beautiful sentiment. I know you can relate and I'm so sensitive to that and grateful for your shared understanding.
I appreciate you,
Much love,
🌹
xo
B
Ty for taking the time, your list add and the beautiful sentiment. I know you can relate and I'm so sensitive to that and grateful for your shared understanding.
I appreciate you,
Much love,
🌹
xo
B
12th Jan 2021 3:35pm
What a moving tribute, caused me to think of some special moments with my father. Every day should be "Father's Day.' Hugs and kisses, oral
12th Jan 2021 4:03pm
Thank you for reading Oral. You always have a lovely POV and I'm so glad that I have an opportunity to see things through your eyes.
Much love and returned hugs and kisses,
🌹
xo
B
Much love and returned hugs and kisses,
🌹
xo
B
12th Jan 2021 4:49pm
This is so touching, Blue❣❣ I would have peed too in re the basement vignette. You have beautiful memories. Brava, SSS 😍
Thank you, B
You're right, I love these memories so very much!
I appreciate you reading, the list add and your genuine comments that make me smile and warm my heart.
Much love and respect,
🌹
xo
B
You're right, I love these memories so very much!
I appreciate you reading, the list add and your genuine comments that make me smile and warm my heart.
Much love and respect,
🌹
xo
B
Anonymous
- Edited 1st Jan 2022 9:45pm
12th Jan 2021 6:32pm
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12th Jan 2021 6:37pm
12th Jan 2021 6:40pm
this is beautiful lovely Blue I miss my daddy too
you did a wonderful at being so impactful and powerful with a few words 💕
you did a wonderful at being so impactful and powerful with a few words 💕
12th Jan 2021 7:29pm
Ohh, Thank you my dearest B. I truly appreciate your read and I'm sorry for us both that we know and understand that ache of missing our daddies. (hugs).
I appreciate the generous list add and your thoughtful comments.
Much love,
🌹
xo
B
I appreciate the generous list add and your thoughtful comments.
Much love,
🌹
xo
B
12th Jan 2021 7:42pm
Awww this is so tender and wonderful BlueBoo, happy you wrote it down ..
sounds like your dad is a great one !
Loves you sis ♥️🌹💋
Jackie 💋🥰 xoxox
Listed 👍🏻
sounds like your dad is a great one !
Loves you sis ♥️🌹💋
Jackie 💋🥰 xoxox
Listed 👍🏻
12th Jan 2021 7:51pm
You don't realize how little 20 words is until you try stringing them and together... lol... Ty, my lovely lady! My dad was the best and I miss him every single day. Much love and thanks for the RL add, your terrific comments and all your lovely awesomeness
kisses,
Blueboo
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo 💋
kisses,
Blueboo
🌹 💜 🌹
xoxo 💋
Anonymous
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12th Jan 2021 9:00pm
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12th Jan 2021 9:04pm
You're a sweet soul and your comment almost made my tear dam break... Ty for reading and the RL add, Wilber. You're a gentleman and true poet (I know you say no, but I disagree) with a poet's beautiful poetic heart.
I'm deeply appreciative of you.
Much love and a respectful cheek kiss,
🌹
xo
Blue
🇺🇸 💙 🇬🇧
I'm deeply appreciative of you.
Much love and a respectful cheek kiss,
🌹
xo
Blue
🇺🇸 💙 🇬🇧
13th Jan 2021 1:22am
Powerful, Blue. Memories make up the fabric of our creativity.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
13th Jan 2021 1:32am
Awww... lovely sentiment, bk
You're correct in that. Of course.
I'm still not quite out of the "pist off I don't have him physically here", stage... I keep hoping that my anger lessening, is somewhere on the horizon... lol
Here's to HOPEFULLY!
Ty for reading, you're very kind to take the time.
Much love and respect,
🌹
xo
-B
You're correct in that. Of course.
I'm still not quite out of the "pist off I don't have him physically here", stage... I keep hoping that my anger lessening, is somewhere on the horizon... lol
Here's to HOPEFULLY!
Ty for reading, you're very kind to take the time.
Much love and respect,
🌹
xo
-B
13th Jan 2021 1:36am
13th Jan 2021 1:39am
13th Jan 2021 4:27am
💖🙏 I appreciate all artistic expression that is not arrogant and hateful, with the goal of my spiritual growth being to appreciate everyone and everything, without judgment, but what I love is honesty and intimacy, that's what speaks to me.
13th Jan 2021 4:33am
Thank you,Daniel. That's a good lesson you just laid down.. Wow... Thank you for tonight's deep moment... I appreciate you reading, the list add and as always (what I look forward to) some of my favorite comments...
Much love,
🌹
xo
Susan
Much love,
🌹
xo
Susan
15th Jan 2021 11:23pm
I've always thought how these short forms of poetry feel like flashes of pictures crossing the screen. You've done just that here, given us quick photographs of cherished memories, so beautiful and treasured.
Excellent stuff Blue. Best of luck in the competition.
Excellent stuff Blue. Best of luck in the competition.
15th Jan 2021 11:26pm
Walter,
Thank you for reading and your comments
I am not sure about you, but for me these little snapshots are more difficult to write, so thank you very much for your insights
I can't tell you how much I appreciate it
Have a terrific weekend..
💜
xoxo
B
Thank you for reading and your comments
I am not sure about you, but for me these little snapshots are more difficult to write, so thank you very much for your insights
I can't tell you how much I appreciate it
Have a terrific weekend..
💜
xoxo
B
15th Jan 2021 11:34pm
Well, you're right, they're a little bit more difficult to write to stay within that format or limit of words, which really raises the old phrase "choose your words carefully". You painted picture of your little feet on his, etc., which stresses my point that you did a great job with it.
