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The Ring
Please copy and paste this link and listen while reading to feel what I’m feeling as I wrote this.
and as always, thanks for looking 🤗
https://youtube.com/watch?v=h8MR3Y18wrM
Love a loaded weapon of dreams
nothing is quite as it seems
compromises heavily one sided
sparkling diamond presented
In hopes of surviving
dysfunctional ring-bearer partakes
with his own selfish rage
enjoying exclusive private parties
day after day
Her eyes watching, utter disbelief
knowing the ring she cannot keep
and as always, thanks for looking 🤗
https://youtube.com/watch?v=h8MR3Y18wrM
Love a loaded weapon of dreams
nothing is quite as it seems
compromises heavily one sided
sparkling diamond presented
In hopes of surviving
dysfunctional ring-bearer partakes
with his own selfish rage
enjoying exclusive private parties
day after day
Her eyes watching, utter disbelief
knowing the ring she cannot keep
Written by
Zazzles
(Broomie)
Published 4th Jan 2021
| Edited 5th Jan 2021
Author's Note
This is my first attempt In trying to learn how to write a 50 word poem using unique words.
I am trying to get ready for the NaPo this March!
I am trying to get ready for the NaPo this March!
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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The author encourages honest critique.
Re. The Ring
4th Jan 2021 7:44pm
You've certainly started out on the right foot!
Well done you!. 💜-u
💍🌹💍🌹💍
xoxo
Well done you!. 💜-u
💍🌹💍🌹💍
xoxo
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Re. The Ring
5th Jan 2021 00:54am
Re: Re. The Ring
5th Jan 2021 1:11am
I was looking at 50 unique words guidelines
It goes on to say you can repeat any word you want but you must have 50 unique words so I think I get it now. Thanks for looking Ava
Jackie❤️
It goes on to say you can repeat any word you want but you must have 50 unique words so I think I get it now. Thanks for looking Ava
Jackie❤️
Re: Re. The Ring
5th Jan 2021 1:13am
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5th Jan 2021 1:19am
Re. The Ring
5th Jan 2021 1:17am
Re: Re. The Ring
Thank you Daniel hope you’re well happy New Year! I can’t WAIT for April!
Hugs
Jackie 😘
Hugs
Jackie 😘
Re. The Ring
6th Jan 2021 2:47am
I like the phrase “loaded weapon of dreams” and the idea that a ring would be presented as an attempt at survival. The poem has clearly been constructed with care for spelling and grammar. That it’s your first attempt at a unique words poem is impressive.
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Re: Re. The Ring
6th Jan 2021 3:02am
Jumps up n down why thank you good man :)
I’m so excited for NaPo I can’t stand it lol
Thankyou for the visit Silly? Or Sibly?
Zazzles 🤗
I’m so excited for NaPo I can’t stand it lol
Thankyou for the visit Silly? Or Sibly?
Zazzles 🤗
Re. The Ring
6th Jan 2021 4:08am
Heartbreaking. Just heartbreaking. The words and music made a path of smoke across my soul such as no poems yet have.
John
John
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Re: Re. The Ring
6th Jan 2021 4:24am
It’s my fault I allow it to go on . One day I’ll dump him once I find a nice place to live by myself .
Thanks John for your beautiful reply
I appreciate you 🤗
Your sister in ink
Jackie ❤️
Thanks John for your beautiful reply
I appreciate you 🤗
Your sister in ink
Jackie ❤️
Re: Re. The Ring
13th Jan 2021 3:08pm