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Thoughts Escaping
I’ll try to write and make this quick
While the words swell up and spill
Surging like waves smooth and slick
Purging these thoughts with my quill
There goes my pen flying off wildly
Where the lyric strays into a dream
Chasing the thought almost childly
Racing to catch it like a moonbeam
So in this verse I caress the emotion
Slow to undress the meaning of it all
Touching the lines of creative notion
Clutching it close because it’s so small
Yet it won’t stay still it wants to soar
Set to tread the fabric of the fantasy
Spreading the idiom and ready to pour
Heading into a bliss that’s fun to see
No matter how hard I try to keep it
Lo and behold it slips through my fingers
What I wanted to write I can’t reap it
But the core of the idea achingly lingers
Published 12th Dec 2020
Author's Note
For the Front Rhyme Feature comp
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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15th Dec 2020 3:13pm
Oh boy, I definitely can relate to this amazing write Wally. Beautifully done and no idea how you kept the lines almost all the same length, my OCD was really happy about that. lol Good luck in the competition.
18th Dec 2020 11:51pm
Thanks Kristina for your comment and for adding to your RL as well.
Sometimes I struggle with the visual aesthetic of poem vs. the syllable count, but as long as I try to convey the idea then I'm happy with it. Over time I've learned not to overthink it.
Sometimes I struggle with the visual aesthetic of poem vs. the syllable count, but as long as I try to convey the idea then I'm happy with it. Over time I've learned not to overthink it.
15th Dec 2020 7:11pm
Anyone who struggles with translation of the living moment into the symbolic rigidity of language could relate to this. I see what Kristina means about the pleasing symmetry as well.
18th Dec 2020 11:56pm
Thank you Daniel for your insightful comment. While the comp had certain rules, trying to capture the emotion within those boundaries always presents a challenge as sometimes original idea in mind feels unattainable, so I try and try.
Hope all is well.
Hope all is well.
23rd Oct 2022 3:38pm
Running out of breath quickly going though the lines. I just wish I had that kind of inspiration and energy.
12th Nov 2022 5:49pm
When I was 9 or 10 I'd spend hours looking at either my dad's Thomas Guide Map or the dictionary (mostly because I had gotten punished and couldn't watch television). I was also learning English and flipping through the dictionary randomly made the time pass by.
