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Droplets
I'll paint a picture for you
with a thin brush on the canvas
Maybe I do not paint well, I'm sorry
But I really want to so badly
I don't know the grace of lines
I can't mix colors in the right tone
What if I paint a picture
from small droplets of different colors?
Yellow droplets of sun glare -
warm specks of happiness and summer
Quiet tenderness will spread
in pink like clouds at dawn
Green drops - they absorbed freshness,
leaves and herbs on wet ground
Transparent drops - drops of sadness
tears of rain on the cold glass
Scarlet droplets, beads of blood
I will gather under a scarred heart
Dairy drops are the ones that will cover
warm lips and provide nourishment
Blue drops - the sea splashes
in memory of seagulls, freedom and wind
Black droplets - splash out grief
drops of fear, drops of death
The only pity is that I cannot complete
this painting, even though I desire to
I miss the DROPS OF LIFE,
They are not among my colors -
Mother of pearl
The incompleteness is so tangible
The idea was not realized, but
I will give you this picture,
maybe YOU can finish it ...
with a thin brush on the canvas
Maybe I do not paint well, I'm sorry
But I really want to so badly
I don't know the grace of lines
I can't mix colors in the right tone
What if I paint a picture
from small droplets of different colors?
Yellow droplets of sun glare -
warm specks of happiness and summer
Quiet tenderness will spread
in pink like clouds at dawn
Green drops - they absorbed freshness,
leaves and herbs on wet ground
Transparent drops - drops of sadness
tears of rain on the cold glass
Scarlet droplets, beads of blood
I will gather under a scarred heart
Dairy drops are the ones that will cover
warm lips and provide nourishment
Blue drops - the sea splashes
in memory of seagulls, freedom and wind
Black droplets - splash out grief
drops of fear, drops of death
The only pity is that I cannot complete
this painting, even though I desire to
I miss the DROPS OF LIFE,
They are not among my colors -
Mother of pearl
The incompleteness is so tangible
The idea was not realized, but
I will give you this picture,
maybe YOU can finish it ...
Written by
KristinaX
Published 14th Nov 2020
Author's Note
I was just thinking how often I write something but I am never satisfied or do not complete it; always hesitant to post at all. And the more people seem to like, the more anxious I am that my writing will disappoint especially amidst such amazing talent here. So thank you so much for all the support and continuing to make me feel I might add a little value here.
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Re. Droplets
14th Nov 2020 10:49pm
X, this piece is fire lady we love the matching of colors references. This is tight work Lady just wait and see you RL and comments light up
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14th Nov 2020 11:01pm
Thank you so much I_IS_ME, I am really glad you liked it. 'fire' and 'tight' means a lot to me. :) 💖
Re. Droplets
14th Nov 2020 11:10pm
beautiful Kristina this is wonderful I understand completely about not being sure if my artistry is done
both when I'm painting and writing sadly only the artist can say this...
I enjoy the metaphor for life yes maybe a special someone can give you help with your ending...
great write ❤
both when I'm painting and writing sadly only the artist can say this...
I enjoy the metaphor for life yes maybe a special someone can give you help with your ending...
great write ❤
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Re: Re. Droplets
14th Nov 2020 11:24pm
Thank you so much, I can say without hesitation that your artistry is gorgeous. I have yet to read something that was not perfect and when I speak of talent, there can be no doubt that you are among the top. 💖
Re: Re. Droplets
14th Nov 2020 11:30pm
Re. Droplets
14th Nov 2020 11:32pm
Writing from the heart is what it's all about.
When you start writing for the audience you lose the organic spontaneity
You're doing just fine
Like
When you start writing for the audience you lose the organic spontaneity
You're doing just fine
Like
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Re: Re. Droplets
15th Nov 2020 5:40pm
From the heart is all I know. Thank you for the comment, I am glad you liked it and really appreciate your feedback. :) 💖
Re. Droplets
14th Nov 2020 11:41pm
When painting the picture is.never complete. It's the essence an artist gives and the viewer completes with their imagination.
Thank you for all that you've shared. <3
Thank you for all that you've shared. <3
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Re: Re. Droplets
15th Nov 2020 5:42pm
I like that, very wise comment indeed. Thank you so much for the encouragement and all the beauty you have shared. 💖
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Re: Re. Droplets
15th Nov 2020 5:43pm
I look back with surprise that I have written so many when I never really expected to post anything. I have always been more analytical. :) Thank you so much for the encouragement. 💖
Re. Droplets
14th Nov 2020 11:52pm
Dear K,
Echo the above comments. I truly relate to this. Every time I hit the submit button my stomach lurches and I think “delete delete delete” then I realize if I don’t submit I won’t see ways to get better. Such a conundrum but the support and kindnesses from the community on the site are so uplifting. With respect, you’ve a natural talent for writing and I always look forward to reading your posts. H🌷
Echo the above comments. I truly relate to this. Every time I hit the submit button my stomach lurches and I think “delete delete delete” then I realize if I don’t submit I won’t see ways to get better. Such a conundrum but the support and kindnesses from the community on the site are so uplifting. With respect, you’ve a natural talent for writing and I always look forward to reading your posts. H🌷
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Re: Re. Droplets
15th Nov 2020 5:44pm
Thank you so much Honoria, your beautiful comments are always an inspiration! You are a truly lovely person. 💖
Re. Droplets
15th Nov 2020 4:00am
I will help you with whatever you need but I can't draw. Keep on writing.
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Re: Re. Droplets
15th Nov 2020 5:47pm
Re. Droplets
15th Nov 2020 4:16am
An artist is speaking to their ghosts. Speak to yours unabashedly and we will feel the honest vulnerability, the depth of it. Your metaphors are lovely and fluid here, paint on life's canvas. Colors have a particular anchoring effect on the psyche. Only smells are stronger in recognition, I think. This is beautiful work. Write for the joy of expression. Comparison is the thief of joy, Roosevelt said, I believe. 💖🙏🏻
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Re: Re. Droplets
15th Nov 2020 5:49pm
"An artist is speaking to their ghosts", I really like that and it makes me think about writing something about ghosts. :) Thank you for the continued feedback and guidance. It has helped me a lot and I appreciate it so much. 💖
Re. Droplets
15th Nov 2020 6:06am
Dear Kristina, there's magic in this one. The characteristics you've ascribed to various colors is beautiful and comforting. I am made happier by reading your words. 🙏😘
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Re: Re. Droplets
15th Nov 2020 5:51pm
Thank you so much for the comment GW, that you feel there is magic and my words could make you a little happier means so much to me. As does your continued support. :) 💖
Re. Droplets
15th Nov 2020 8:24am
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15th Nov 2020 5:51pm
Re. Droplets
15th Nov 2020 3:45pm
The mother of pearl will bring you good luck and fortune. In a painting of life, paint with colors of light as they mix you will gain understanding. Painting with pigments May change the tone, however the more you mix only darkness you’ll find.
Love the write
Love the write
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Re: Re. Droplets
15th Nov 2020 5:52pm
Thank you so much for the beautiful and wise comment. I have been using more pigments lately and I am really glad you liked this one. 💖
Re. Droplets
15th Nov 2020 5:54pm
I loved this, Kristina. You paint a beautiful picture :). Gosh, I know that feeling lol. I am up to 25 poems in my drafts, and I am hardly ever satisfied with any of them. That writer's esteem is something else 😅
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Re: Re. Droplets
15th Nov 2020 6:05pm
I can only imagine what amazing and beautiful things await in your drafts! Thank you so much for continued feedback and support NB. 💖
Re. Droplets
15th Nov 2020 10:16pm
Bravo! This is more like a tapestry of wonderful words Kristina...the poem has a brilliant textual feel to it...the poem is just so damn good my friend.
🙏 Harry
🙏 Harry
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Re: Re. Droplets
15th Nov 2020 10:54pm
Thank you so much Harry, your description evokes a beautiful imagery for me. And I am really happy that you liked it enough to give such wonderful feedback. 💖
Re. Droplets
15th Nov 2020 11:23pm
Incredible intimacy.....
The Ortolan bunting sings aloft and I shield my eyes
as the greenish grey bird gives way
to thoughts much greater
swishing fearlessly off the banks
in splendor and high grandeur
sparking only diluted colors
to fall into my brazen hands
In each stroke and in each palette
swirls of magic appear
blowing away like the leaves
farther away with each droplet
each pain staking brush
until these clouded eyes can see
what isn't there
The Ortolan bunting sings aloft and I shield my eyes
as the greenish grey bird gives way
to thoughts much greater
swishing fearlessly off the banks
in splendor and high grandeur
sparking only diluted colors
to fall into my brazen hands
In each stroke and in each palette
swirls of magic appear
blowing away like the leaves
farther away with each droplet
each pain staking brush
until these clouded eyes can see
what isn't there
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Re: Re. Droplets
15th Nov 2020 11:37pm
Wow, your comment takes my breath away. I am truly honored if my words could help inspire such beauty. 💖
Re. Droplets
16th Nov 2020 8:53pm
Probably what makes great writers, never satisfied with their art. I'm sure the uncertainty causes the stress and torment, as you experience.
You "paint an apt picture" correlating the missing color to the missing piece that is needed to complete the puzzle. But with your offer for assistance, a partner, lover - the two of you together can mix up the right color and complete your picture of life together! : )
You "paint an apt picture" correlating the missing color to the missing piece that is needed to complete the puzzle. But with your offer for assistance, a partner, lover - the two of you together can mix up the right color and complete your picture of life together! : )
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Re: Re. Droplets
16th Nov 2020 9:41pm
The never ending desire for perfection is a great burden indeed. In the end we must learn to accept imperfection. :)
A perfectly worded interpretation Da Vinci. Another, is the painting as a metaphor; needing assistance to complete so many things I have written but fail to appreciate or complete on my own. :)
Thank you so much for the comment and support. 💖
A perfectly worded interpretation Da Vinci. Another, is the painting as a metaphor; needing assistance to complete so many things I have written but fail to appreciate or complete on my own. :)
Thank you so much for the comment and support. 💖
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Re: Re. Droplets
16th Nov 2020 11:45pm
Thank you so much for the feedback and support Tim. I really appreciate it. 💖
Re. Droplets
17th Nov 2020 2:16am
an entirely common mental disposition, not sure adding to the chorus will help in the long run. there's a sweet poetic irony in the numbers
conceptified very well and executed with the same level
it's interesting the different colours you attach to things. good stuff
among other things I think the sentiment shows you care about what you write. i would suggest keep a balance, try not let pleasing the reader be the driving force of your poetry
conceptified very well and executed with the same level
it's interesting the different colours you attach to things. good stuff
among other things I think the sentiment shows you care about what you write. i would suggest keep a balance, try not let pleasing the reader be the driving force of your poetry
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Re: Re. Droplets
17th Nov 2020 2:41am
Please do add to the chorus, it only makes it more beautiful.
I really appreciate your feedback and love it when you step out of the shadows for a moment. ;)
I like the description 'interesting'.
I care about what I post but it pretty much comes out however it does so although I want it to be worth reading, pleasing the reader is not really the driving force. I do want it to be comprehensible though because some stuff I write and don't post probably no one but me would understand.
I really appreciate your feedback and love it when you step out of the shadows for a moment. ;)
I like the description 'interesting'.
I care about what I post but it pretty much comes out however it does so although I want it to be worth reading, pleasing the reader is not really the driving force. I do want it to be comprehensible though because some stuff I write and don't post probably no one but me would understand.