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The Veil
I wonder,
do you feel me
underneath your veil?
You're close enough to touch,
but not enough to feel.
This veil gives us a
sense of comfort,
but it is merely an illusion.
For beneath the opacity
we suffer from
loneliness &
confusion.
As much as I love you,
and want you to stay,
inevitably, I feel you
once more
slipping away
--
into the veil's
suffocating
embrace.
do you feel me
underneath your veil?
You're close enough to touch,
but not enough to feel.
This veil gives us a
sense of comfort,
but it is merely an illusion.
For beneath the opacity
we suffer from
loneliness &
confusion.
As much as I love you,
and want you to stay,
inevitably, I feel you
once more
slipping away
--
into the veil's
suffocating
embrace.
Published 8th Nov 2020
Author's Note
Written for Eerie's competition, Painting Words. The painting that I drew my inspiration from is "The Lovers II" by surrealist, René Magritte.
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8th Nov 2020 8:00pm
That's a great painting; says so much in so many different languages. This is a nice entry and I wish you the best in the competition.
9th Nov 2020 4:55am
Thank you for the kind words! For some reason, I've always been drawn to this painting... it speaks to my heart. ❤
18th Nov 2020 2:25am
"For beneath the opacity
we suffer from
loneliness &
confusion." that stanza and these lines convey so much emotion and depth. Excellent work.
Good luck in the comp.
we suffer from
loneliness &
confusion." that stanza and these lines convey so much emotion and depth. Excellent work.
Good luck in the comp.
18th Nov 2024 4:09pm
The veil symbolizes both comfort and separation, illustrating how intimacy can sometimes lead to feelings of loneliness and confusion. your pen captures the tension between closeness and emotional distance in a relationship. it's a haunting meditation on the challenges of truly feeling connected.
