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Spiral
The holiday did not last long
With a gramophone needle
Slid and left
Your shine is behind
Powder scattered
An uneasy morning
Draft and languor
And the coldness in my chest
I shiver from the damp
Scattered everywhere
Confetti…
Somewhere in the universal spiral
On the secret tablet
Everything that lies ahead of us
is inscribed
With smeared makeup
With a funny pantomime
We argued with time
Looking into his lens
Stars were falling from the sky
Multi-colored, variegated
Like confetti ...
A glove fell to the floor
Oh how merciless
There was a sound
the string that broke in the heart
Glass overturned
The cobweb trembles
I listen to the ringing
Suddenly reigned silence
You went into the fog
You said you were
dishonest with me ...
With a white swan wing
Harlequin's tear
Fates are inscribed
heavenly bodies
Ashes on the keys
Will you understand, will you fix it?
We missed each other
in the fog on the milky way
Blinded by the stars
Multi-colored, variegated
Like confetti ...
With a gramophone needle
Slid and left
Your shine is behind
Powder scattered
An uneasy morning
Draft and languor
And the coldness in my chest
I shiver from the damp
Scattered everywhere
Confetti…
Somewhere in the universal spiral
On the secret tablet
Everything that lies ahead of us
is inscribed
With smeared makeup
With a funny pantomime
We argued with time
Looking into his lens
Stars were falling from the sky
Multi-colored, variegated
Like confetti ...
A glove fell to the floor
Oh how merciless
There was a sound
the string that broke in the heart
Glass overturned
The cobweb trembles
I listen to the ringing
Suddenly reigned silence
You went into the fog
You said you were
dishonest with me ...
With a white swan wing
Harlequin's tear
Fates are inscribed
heavenly bodies
Ashes on the keys
Will you understand, will you fix it?
We missed each other
in the fog on the milky way
Blinded by the stars
Multi-colored, variegated
Like confetti ...
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Re. Spiral
28th Oct 2020 8:43pm
This is an excellent write. It challenged my imagination and reality to interpret it, which is great. Hugs and peace. oral
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28th Oct 2020 8:52pm
Thank you so much Oralizer, your comment made me feel better because that is the reaction I had hoped for. 💖
Re. Spiral
28th Oct 2020 9:26pm
I'm always a sucker for a "stream of consciousness" write, which is the feel this piece gave me. (I'm only guessing here... lol)
It's definitely impactful and your referring back to confetti, had an additional impact on me too..
broken pieces, maybe?..
Ty for sharing this.
It really is a terrific thought piece..
💜🌹💜
xoxo
-B
It's definitely impactful and your referring back to confetti, had an additional impact on me too..
broken pieces, maybe?..
Ty for sharing this.
It really is a terrific thought piece..
💜🌹💜
xoxo
-B
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Re: Re. Spiral
28th Oct 2020 9:38pm
Definitely stream of consciousness so I am really glad you liked it as this is another different style for me. Thank you for the comment and compliment. 💖
Re. Spiral
28th Oct 2020 10:51pm
This is a brilliant poem that has a universal flow to it...each line is connects dots of infinity. One of my favs Kristina.
🙏 Harry
🙏 Harry
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Re: Re. Spiral
28th Oct 2020 10:58pm
Thank you so much Harry, you have made me really happy that it is one of your favorites and you could connect the dots. 💖
Re. Spiral
28th Oct 2020 11:46pm
I'm with Harry, you're firing on all cylinders here: intimacy, proportion, sensitivity, gorgeously fluid voice and alchemical metaphor. Your voice is growing. 💖🙏🏻
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Re: Re. Spiral
29th Oct 2020 00:22am
You are determined to leave me without words to respond. :) Thanks so much for your continued feedback and support Daniel. Your comment means a lot to me. 💖
Re. Spiral
Bravissima, Kristina❣❣ This conjured Images of the mess left over after the last Goddess/God left a cosmic New Year's party. I love this melancholic, romantic passage,
"We missed each other
in the fog on the milky way
Blinded by the stars." Genius begets brilliance, awesome write, BD.
"We missed each other
in the fog on the milky way
Blinded by the stars." Genius begets brilliance, awesome write, BD.
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Re: Re. Spiral
29th Oct 2020 7:52pm
Likewise, your comment makes it difficult to respond. Thanks so much for your continued support and feedback, GW. I like the imagery I got from "last Goddess/God left a cosmic New Year's party" 💖
Re. Spiral
29th Oct 2020 00:59am
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29th Oct 2020 7:50pm
Re. Spiral
29th Oct 2020 8:25pm
Has kind of a drumbeat roll to it
Echo the others
My kind of reading matter
Like
Echo the others
My kind of reading matter
Like
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29th Oct 2020 8:30pm
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29th Oct 2020 8:39pm
I just posted a poem and credited you with the inspiration. I’m going to read more of you ....
Thank you
Thank you
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Re: Re. Spiral
29th Oct 2020 8:45pm
I am honored that you found inspiration and I look forward to reading it and more from you as well. Thank you! :)
Re. Spiral
This is brilliant and well deserving of all the praise it has received. You should be proud of yourself for deeply moving others with your perfectly placed words. I just read your profile and I strongly disagree with you. You are most certainly a writer and yes, a poet, of the finest kind. I applaud you! I'm so glad I stopped to read you.
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30th Oct 2020 00:15am
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30th Oct 2020 3:42am
The pleasure was mine. You're like a breath of fresh air and I so look forward to reading more of your wonderful work.
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Re. Spiral
29th Oct 2020 10:32pm
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30th Oct 2020 00:17am
Re. Spiral
31st Oct 2020 4:17am
Dear K,
This calls to mind a few conversations, as of late, that are not really fun to have with ones significant other. There is such an awful sinking feeling when this happens. But, you come out the other side much better for talking it out. I loved the references to what I consider pretty things, yet could easily represent the strings of a heart breaking. Why can’t relationships be simple? Of course they would be if everyone just bent to my will and wisdom 😉. Will they never listen? Really lovely genius write. H🌷
This calls to mind a few conversations, as of late, that are not really fun to have with ones significant other. There is such an awful sinking feeling when this happens. But, you come out the other side much better for talking it out. I loved the references to what I consider pretty things, yet could easily represent the strings of a heart breaking. Why can’t relationships be simple? Of course they would be if everyone just bent to my will and wisdom 😉. Will they never listen? Really lovely genius write. H🌷
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31st Oct 2020 3:33pm
"If everyone just bent to my will and wisdom" They should. Maybe one day they will listen. ;) As always, you have made me feel really good; 'genius write' is an amazing compliment. :) Thank you so much. 💖