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...ekuL
for all the procrastination
weeks on end
it was over in a few words
words
and he, he done
what he's always done:
made me proud
weeks on end
it was over in a few words
words
and he, he done
what he's always done:
made me proud
Written by
lepperochan
(Craic-Dealer)
Published 20th Oct 2020
| Edited 22nd Oct 2020
Author's Note
if you get this you get it , i'm not going to help you
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Re. Luke..
20th Oct 2020 2:41am
I have no idea, but I feel like congratulations are in order...
In any case, I enjoyed the warmth of this. 😊
In any case, I enjoyed the warmth of this. 😊
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Re: Re. Luke..
20th Oct 2020 2:35pm
Hullo
my many thanks to you for feeling the warmth, Lady and for dropping by to read me
my many thanks to you for feeling the warmth, Lady and for dropping by to read me
Re. Luke..
I'm with brokentitanium.
(I haven't any clue, either)
This gets you right in the feels.
... well wishes to you and yours.
😊🌹
(I haven't any clue, either)
This gets you right in the feels.
... well wishes to you and yours.
😊🌹
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Re: Re. Luke..
20th Oct 2020 2:42pm
Hullo lady
happy to hit you in the feels , or is it feel you in the hits ..either or, I guess
I think this is one of the few of mine which I wrote for me. in itself, it was a very private affair hense the ambiguity. that said, I'm not so selfish that I didn't leave a giant clue, haha
thanks much for your visit and thought-print
happy to hit you in the feels , or is it feel you in the hits ..either or, I guess
I think this is one of the few of mine which I wrote for me. in itself, it was a very private affair hense the ambiguity. that said, I'm not so selfish that I didn't leave a giant clue, haha
thanks much for your visit and thought-print
Re. Luke..
20th Oct 2020 1:05pm
good morning dearest Eamonn
this has me reading it a certain way
I see it as you speaking of yourself
or maybe it's just the way I perceive you...
great write ❤
this has me reading it a certain way
I see it as you speaking of yourself
or maybe it's just the way I perceive you...
great write ❤
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Re: Re. Luke..
20th Oct 2020 2:47pm
Good morning, Brenda
Thanks muchley, Lady
you'd probably kick yourself if I told you. so I'm never going to cos i wouldnt be able to live with myself as the catylist for such violence
shine on
Thanks muchley, Lady
you'd probably kick yourself if I told you. so I'm never going to cos i wouldnt be able to live with myself as the catylist for such violence
shine on
Re. Luke..
20th Oct 2020 4:35pm
Dear L,
If your family operates near the same level of crazy irritation mine does, your son put off a very important decision and when it finally came down to it he made the right one for everyone involved. What i appreciate the most about your write is you wore beige and kept your mouth closed so he could come around to the conclusion by himself. I think it’s the hardest position to be in but what do I know?
What I am certain of, even if I’ve missed the mark, it’s still a beautiful write bursting at the seams with love, pride and perhaps some relief. Lovely write. H 🌷
If your family operates near the same level of crazy irritation mine does, your son put off a very important decision and when it finally came down to it he made the right one for everyone involved. What i appreciate the most about your write is you wore beige and kept your mouth closed so he could come around to the conclusion by himself. I think it’s the hardest position to be in but what do I know?
What I am certain of, even if I’ve missed the mark, it’s still a beautiful write bursting at the seams with love, pride and perhaps some relief. Lovely write. H 🌷
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Re: Re. Luke..
20th Oct 2020 8:21pm
Hullo
I was thinking about what you've said. brought me back a few years when the chap at the centre of this little write left his closet. the words above would fit perfectly. good stuff
I've just noticed something with the title, gonna have to figure out a way to fix it.
your eyes and words are much appreciated and I thank you much accordingly
I was thinking about what you've said. brought me back a few years when the chap at the centre of this little write left his closet. the words above would fit perfectly. good stuff
I've just noticed something with the title, gonna have to figure out a way to fix it.
your eyes and words are much appreciated and I thank you much accordingly
So it could be a couple things...
20th Oct 2020 8:23pm
but either way, I'm so glad it went as well as this. I'm so sure there is a way to use the weight of this without saying it, but because you used
"he did what he always does, made me proud"
that, itself, is a universal sentiment so it's accessible enough for people to get where you're coming from.
Yay!
Keep writing for you, too
"he did what he always does, made me proud"
that, itself, is a universal sentiment so it's accessible enough for people to get where you're coming from.
Yay!
Keep writing for you, too
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Re: So it could be a couple things...
21st Oct 2020 4:47am
Hullo
(I think you missed a not in your comment *not so sure*) and you're dead right. p'raps the last line saved it (for lack of better phrase) maybe it was luck or maybe I'm just that good but I changed the ending some minutes after I posted it
these short ones always invoke a wondering if there's enough, and indeed too much. writing the poem is the easy part, the hard part is trying to win an argument with myself :),
many thanks for your eyes and ears, Jesta. and thanks bunches for your presence and words
(I think you missed a not in your comment *not so sure*) and you're dead right. p'raps the last line saved it (for lack of better phrase) maybe it was luck or maybe I'm just that good but I changed the ending some minutes after I posted it
these short ones always invoke a wondering if there's enough, and indeed too much. writing the poem is the easy part, the hard part is trying to win an argument with myself :),
many thanks for your eyes and ears, Jesta. and thanks bunches for your presence and words
Re. Luke..
20th Oct 2020 9:53pm
Re: Re. Luke..
21st Oct 2020 4:49am
Hullo
so much better to say, Miss. thanks some millions for being here to hear it, and for laying your thoughts
tip o the hat to ya
so much better to say, Miss. thanks some millions for being here to hear it, and for laying your thoughts
tip o the hat to ya
Re. ...ekuL
30th Oct 2020 6:36am
Aww... man. I don't even know who we're proud for, but I'm proud too. It says all it needs to say ❤️. Great writing, friend!
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Re: Re. ...ekuL
30th Oct 2020 3:05pm
Hullo
made me smile, good person of the latter genesis. thanks much for your presence and words
made me smile, good person of the latter genesis. thanks much for your presence and words
Re. ...ekuL
I dunn wanna deconstruct your minimalist gem hitting right obviously hidden in your verses ..right from the title... the reversal of the usual worldly (ab)norm... is being that simplistic raw straight minimalist n in absolute working perfection . that (principally~ effectually) speaks as words.. not (emptily~ gaudily ) mere words as (dead[ly]) words. . that's only making up for undones & never dones & untimely inappropriately done dones.tats juz me from your spilled minimal word wisdom Lep..you never fail to enlighten encourage n inspire us the worded blabbers as us in all the needed wisdom .light & love ev :)
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