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Down the pits.
Not nice the
Way he treated
Her spitz.
No wonder
The vitriolic brew
And his journey
Down the pits.
Way he treated
Her spitz.
No wonder
The vitriolic brew
And his journey
Down the pits.
Published 27th Aug 2020
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27th Aug 2020 11:27pm
sounds like he needs to adjust his mindset? ..
Hmmm
leaves one to assess
🤷🏻♀️
B—
Hmmm
leaves one to assess
🤷🏻♀️
B—
27th Aug 2020 11:30pm
27th Aug 2020 11:36pm
I liked that it was somewhat ambiguous..
The thing with the short poems (like haikus)
you have to consider every single word...
they have to have a punch 👊🏻
flow together tightly
BECAUSE
its a small amount of text
... for me anyway
just my silly 2 cents
try to rhyme?
it's an option
The thing with the short poems (like haikus)
you have to consider every single word...
they have to have a punch 👊🏻
flow together tightly
BECAUSE
its a small amount of text
... for me anyway
just my silly 2 cents
try to rhyme?
it's an option
27th Aug 2020 11:50pm
Rhyme: If and when. Sometimes I find that some poets try too hard to make stuff rhyme. It does not look ''worked''. it seems that they just looked for any word that would ''fit''. Many thanks. Keep up the nice work (and lovely pics). Kisses, Robert.
27th Aug 2020 11:53pm
I didn't say force it... just try it, if it feels like it might flow better, that's all.
Ive done that, forced it..
it's always apparent, you're right
Ty for the pic compliment.
I search high and low sometimes
Ive done that, forced it..
it's always apparent, you're right
Ty for the pic compliment.
I search high and low sometimes
