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Aspects of Joy in a Strange Land
After Gwendolyn Brooks
There it was—
after twelve hours of ocean
and incandescent clouds:
sewn patchwork of color
beyond the portal
of a plane's window
Momentarily gone
—American melancholy
hovering so far from home
I was six—
a whimper amid adult dialogue;
my teacup tongue, rattling
against saucer lips—
unheard
Gaiety—
my father, statuesque
congratulatory
Footing, steep metal steps
clinking; laughter propelling
across the concourse—
teeth in the wind
Holiday! mustn't end!
Familiar foreigners—
aspects of joy in a strange land
No! stay to. . .together!
—hap. .. hap. . .happiness!
my tongue, rattling—
no one listened;
buses, cars
drove separate directions
We travelled northeast
toward the coast
stopping once at a station—
skipping, lollipop return
joyful . . .
as two children
in a stranger dialogue
whispered,
"Hey! Yankee!
Go home!"
~
There it was—
after twelve hours of ocean
and incandescent clouds:
sewn patchwork of color
beyond the portal
of a plane's window
Momentarily gone
—American melancholy
hovering so far from home
I was six—
a whimper amid adult dialogue;
my teacup tongue, rattling
against saucer lips—
unheard
Gaiety—
my father, statuesque
congratulatory
Footing, steep metal steps
clinking; laughter propelling
across the concourse—
teeth in the wind
Holiday! mustn't end!
Familiar foreigners—
aspects of joy in a strange land
No! stay to. . .together!
—hap. .. hap. . .happiness!
my tongue, rattling—
no one listened;
buses, cars
drove separate directions
We travelled northeast
toward the coast
stopping once at a station—
skipping, lollipop return
joyful . . .
as two children
in a stranger dialogue
whispered,
"Hey! Yankee!
Go home!"
~
Author's Note
For the CCC's 'We Real Cool' Gwendolyn Brooks' Tribute: https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/competitions/read/11510/#492565
Inspired by 'An Aspect of Love, Alive in the Ice and Fire: https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/58378/an-aspect-of-love-alive-in-the-ice-and-fire
Inspired by 'An Aspect of Love, Alive in the Ice and Fire: https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/58378/an-aspect-of-love-alive-in-the-ice-and-fire
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2nd Aug 2020 6:33pm
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Anonymous
2nd Aug 2020 7:21pm
Just. Damn.
Talk about being transported by poetry! You certainly flew me away with this vignette.
"There it was—
after twelve hours of ocean
and incandescent clouds:
sewn patchwork of color
beyond the portal
of a plane's window
Momentarily gone
—American melancholy
hovering so far from home"
Not that the first stanza wasn't phenomenal with O assonance, but the deployment of it in the second stanza is completely enchanting.
And it doesn't stop there : among, tongue, dialogue, congratulatory, across, concourse, etc etc ....
This is a truly beautiful poem.
📝❤
Talk about being transported by poetry! You certainly flew me away with this vignette.
"There it was—
after twelve hours of ocean
and incandescent clouds:
sewn patchwork of color
beyond the portal
of a plane's window
Momentarily gone
—American melancholy
hovering so far from home"
Not that the first stanza wasn't phenomenal with O assonance, but the deployment of it in the second stanza is completely enchanting.
And it doesn't stop there : among, tongue, dialogue, congratulatory, across, concourse, etc etc ....
This is a truly beautiful poem.
📝❤
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2nd Aug 2020 9:45pm
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12th Aug 2020 4:15pm
what he said!
the whole thing is just so damn good, but that little section. perfect. perfect, A.
the whole thing is just so damn good, but that little section. perfect. perfect, A.
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Anonymous
3rd Aug 2020 4:57pm
Hey Ahavati.......you just keep getting better with every ink.......souls can be so cruel without knowing a thing about you......I’ve overseas and had to deal with rudeness.......but it happens here in the USA as well.......brilliant as always.......purple luv & hugs xo :)
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3rd Aug 2020 5:22pm
Re. Aspects of Joy in a Strange Land
3rd Aug 2020 10:19pm
Loved the bubbling cherubic sonorous innocence in the aloud resonance all throughout.. you take along a reader in all ambience & atmospherics of the period & setting & the times... Lovely read ..light & love ev xx
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3rd Aug 2020 10:21pm
Thank you, Dear Uma. I appreciate your innate spiritual take; it made me smile and resonate deep inside.
Much Love, my Friend.
xo
Much Love, my Friend.
xo
Re. Aspects of Joy in a Strange Land
4th Aug 2020 00:15am
Like a good wine A...you just keep getting better with time. Such a wonderful poem my friend.
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
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Re. Aspects of Joy in a Strange Land
10th Aug 2020 11:10pm
This is one of those pieces that not only spark my interest in the comp but it feels like a timeless classic. It sounds like you wrote this 50 years ago, and it's so mesmerizing that had you not notated this a Gwendolyn Brooks tribute comp, I would have thought it was Gwendolyn herself.
You're channeling skills are off the charts!
Excellent work.
You're channeling skills are off the charts!
Excellent work.
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11th Aug 2020 2:14am
Thank you for that excellent observation, Wally! You must know how much I appreciate it. Emulating the classic poets is not an easy task ( for me ). So when someone thinks I've hit the mark it means a lot.
Much appreciated.
Much appreciated.
Re. Aspects of Joy in a Strange Land
13th Sep 2020 9:59pm
time desintegrating? virtues unheard. Go home? but when.. I do want to.
Otherwise, a bit alien and patriotic at the same time. Builds a strong character. Visual sequence of acts, and it recreates the scene. I love it.
Otherwise, a bit alien and patriotic at the same time. Builds a strong character. Visual sequence of acts, and it recreates the scene. I love it.
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13th Sep 2020 10:51pm
Thank you so much, Aaron! I truly appreciate and really enjoyed your analysis!