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24th Jul 2020 6:19pm
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Anonymous
22nd Jul 2020 11:14pm
Hey Ahavati........waterfalls are so beautiful I never looked at them as dangerous........very thought provoking ink my friend........luv it......purple luv & hugs xo :)
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24th Jul 2020 6:34pm
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Anonymous
23rd Jul 2020 7:42am
Beautiful haiku... and I like the play with alliterations. :)
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24th Jul 2020 6:34pm
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Anonymous
23rd Jul 2020 9:33am
Ahhh, Nature's loom - whata wonderful way of looking at it.
❤📝📷
❤📝📷
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24th Jul 2020 6:35pm
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10th Aug 2020 7:12pm
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10th Aug 2020 7:22pm
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Anonymous
10th Aug 2020 7:23pm
I say stick with web because veil isn't personally manifesting to my eyes.
Although, while on the subject of what it does look like, lightning comes to mind.
Although, while on the subject of what it does look like, lightning comes to mind.
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10th Aug 2020 7:25pm
Well Holy Poetic Medic; you're right! Gosh—I could've prolly taken this to an entirely different level. . .
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Anonymous
10th Aug 2020 7:27pm
Maybe you have a similar photo to play with?
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10th Aug 2020 7:30pm
Nah; this is it. But, I will definitely keep that lightening in mind for another!
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Anonymous
10th Aug 2020 7:31pm
My brain rarely works like that, so run with it. xo
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23rd Jul 2020 11:02am
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24th Jul 2020 6:36pm
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23rd Jul 2020 11:34am
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24th Jul 2020 6:37pm
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24th Jul 2020 5:10am
Dear A,
Like a beautiful necklace that’s how I’m seeing the waterfall. (I can’t help it diamonds are a girls best friend)
Moreover, what I truly thought inspiring is how delicate and profoundly strong is nature. So beautiful you can’t help but be enraptured and even if you can’t find the words of gratitude for it I think there is an energetic vibe sent into the universe in appreciation. Lovely write. H🌷
Like a beautiful necklace that’s how I’m seeing the waterfall. (I can’t help it diamonds are a girls best friend)
Moreover, what I truly thought inspiring is how delicate and profoundly strong is nature. So beautiful you can’t help but be enraptured and even if you can’t find the words of gratitude for it I think there is an energetic vibe sent into the universe in appreciation. Lovely write. H🌷
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24th Jul 2020 6:37pm
Thank you, Honoria. I truly enjoyed your perspective. To take a haiku and see so much within it is wonderful.
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27th Jul 2020 2:41pm
"Gossamer" is one of my favourite words. I also like the use of alliteration in the third line. I think this is too metaphorical to be a haiku, but it's a lovely whatever-it-is!
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27th Jul 2020 2:44pm
Thank you, Jack. I love gossamer too; however, hardly ever use it. It's one of those words that seem so over-used in poetry, so it has to really fit ( for me ). I agree about a traditional eastern haiku, that's why I put western haiku - practically anything goes with that.
Thank you for your observations.
Thank you for your observations.
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28th Jul 2020 9:26pm
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28th Jul 2020 9:28pm
Thank you, Sweet Summer. This shot isn't mine. I have no idea whose it is; I saw it online and was inspired by it, particularly how the water looked hitting the rocks.
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28th Jul 2020 9:37pm
You're welcome ❤. Nevertheless your haiku expressed the beauty and enhanced it.
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10th Aug 2020 7:03pm
i love a good western haiku! (even if every time i say it all i can think about is a short little poem putting on a fringed button up and cowboy boots!)
the word web sticks out for some reason. maybe because i don't see a web in the photo. what about veil?
the word web sticks out for some reason. maybe because i don't see a web in the photo. what about veil?
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10th Aug 2020 7:06pm
Hey thanks! That 'web' is definitely there ( in my eyes )! I tried to blow the photo up ( actually it is enlarged as it is ); however, it began pixelating too much, so I had to stop.
I do love the word veil, however. I may consider editing it in.
Thanks again!
Ride'm Haiku! :D
I do love the word veil, however. I may consider editing it in.
Thanks again!
Ride'm Haiku! :D
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10th Aug 2020 7:26pm
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10th Aug 2020 7:34pm
ah! who cares what Johnny says! ;-)
i do see the lightning, though.
rocks weave waterfall
into a lightning web -
spellbound spectators
(i know that middle line doesn't have enough syllables, but who cares! it's a yeeeeee-haaaaaaw haiku!)
i do see the lightning, though.
rocks weave waterfall
into a lightning web -
spellbound spectators
(i know that middle line doesn't have enough syllables, but who cares! it's a yeeeeee-haaaaaaw haiku!)
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10th Aug 2020 8:37pm