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Savages
Ideally,
an endless, replenishing
source of nourishment,
an ever flowing fountain.
In reality,
braving quenchless thirst,
accustomed to leaky faucets,
sporadically dripping.
Trying our best to avoid dehydration
Hypothetically,
a warm invitation to
dine amongst a long crowded table
adorning an abundant feast.
In actuality,
grappling hunger pains.
Unwelcomed outcasts,
tossed scraps under the table
sparingly offered left overs,
sometimes settling for mere crumbs.
Barely escaping starvation.
A hodgepodge
Some, fortunate enough to find it
Others, spend a lifetime
searching for it.
The clusterfuck of love
Yet, here I am
accepting what is,
In the habit of taking
whatever I can get ...
Don’t mind me,
over here,
Shamelessly
Savagely
Licking
love
off
Knives
an endless, replenishing
source of nourishment,
an ever flowing fountain.
In reality,
braving quenchless thirst,
accustomed to leaky faucets,
sporadically dripping.
Trying our best to avoid dehydration
Hypothetically,
a warm invitation to
dine amongst a long crowded table
adorning an abundant feast.
In actuality,
grappling hunger pains.
Unwelcomed outcasts,
tossed scraps under the table
sparingly offered left overs,
sometimes settling for mere crumbs.
Barely escaping starvation.
A hodgepodge
Some, fortunate enough to find it
Others, spend a lifetime
searching for it.
The clusterfuck of love
Yet, here I am
accepting what is,
In the habit of taking
whatever I can get ...
Don’t mind me,
over here,
Shamelessly
Savagely
Licking
love
off
Knives
Written by
Lazy_Dead
(.Julia.)
Published 22nd May 2020
| Edited 9th Mar 2025
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Anonymous
- Edited 25th Oct 2022 6:45pm
22nd May 2020 00:05am
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Re: Re. Savages
22nd May 2020 3:00am
Re. Savages
22nd May 2020 00:16am
beautiful Julia oh my god what fucking savage ending to this poem
it resonated within me ❤
it resonated within me ❤
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Re: Re. Savages
22nd May 2020 00:20am
That makes my heart smile 💖 we do what we gotta do to survive... I’m glad this resonated with you. Thank you for reading and appreciating this little window into my soul.
Re. Savages
22nd May 2020 00:18am
I like this so much I'll comment again
I feel like this all too often killer write ❤
I feel like this all too often killer write ❤
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Re: Re. Savages
22nd May 2020 2:59am
I’m glad you feel the same way I have felt about your work 💖 poetically representing each other’s pain...
Re. Savages
22nd May 2020 1:15am
I like this a lot
I always read your work twice
There's a lot grasp here
Still with your dry humor within
You're a beauty inside and out
Your day will come
No napkin required
Like
I always read your work twice
There's a lot grasp here
Still with your dry humor within
You're a beauty inside and out
Your day will come
No napkin required
Like
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Re: Re. Savages
You know my style... lots of hidden messages and meaning. You may be the only one who finds the humor.
Re. Savages
22nd May 2020 2:47am
I'm finding a suspenseful flow to be an earmark of your writing. The whole time I am considering the perspectives of the stanzas, wondering where it is going. The closing stanza strikes you with its finality, the stark metaphor, aching with meaning. Terrific work.
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Re: Re. Savages
I very purposefully avoided putting love in the title or in the poem until after the middle. I really wanted people to wonder what the fuck I was talking about and let the ending have it’s impact... so thank you for noticing...
Re. Savages
22nd May 2020 3:35am
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22nd May 2020 8:46am
Great poeting here ... love the relentless last stanza ... powerful ...
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Re. Savages
22nd May 2020 11:48am
The beginning half of this felt like automatic Write-was it?
This Write flows fast within its passion.
How well we chase Love and what a healing light/energy it can be.
I hope maybe that knife has something truly good on it like chocolate icing.
That kind of love never goes away heehee.
Excellence found here Kidd-O!!!
Ink On!!!
This Write flows fast within its passion.
How well we chase Love and what a healing light/energy it can be.
I hope maybe that knife has something truly good on it like chocolate icing.
That kind of love never goes away heehee.
Excellence found here Kidd-O!!!
Ink On!!!
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Re: Re. Savages
22nd May 2020 5:23pm
Here you go, getting all technical on me, using actual terms of poetry and writing 😊🙃. I just write what I feel and try to make sure it’s well written. You’re the expert....I feel more like a vessel than anything else...
Also, I fully support the chocolate icing. Good call. Let’s put that out into the universe...
Also, I fully support the chocolate icing. Good call. Let’s put that out into the universe...
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22nd May 2020 5:16pm
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22nd May 2020 5:18pm
You speak truth my friend. My pen just bleeds emotions. It speaks what my heart can’t...
Re. Savages
22nd May 2020 7:44pm
Freak that is cool and it can in so many ways apply to the society that we live in. Freaking tight piece
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Re: Re. Savages
22nd May 2020 8:11pm
I’m glad you appreciated this and can see it from a different perspective. I appreciate your continued support
Re. Savages
22nd May 2020 8:43pm
Either you have what it takes to hunt and kill to survive, or you find yourself on the menu. Its as simple as that.
On a random note, the vision of you licking the blood from a blood soaked knife is pleasingly alluring. ;P
XXX
On a random note, the vision of you licking the blood from a blood soaked knife is pleasingly alluring. ;P
XXX
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Re: Re. Savages
22nd May 2020 11:17pm
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22nd May 2020 11:12pm
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Re: Re. Savages
22nd May 2020 11:19pm
I’m glad you appreciate the dry humor. Not too many pick up on it. It’s usally there in some of my pieces. It is definitely hard to balance. Sometimes it’s comes out unintentionally too, just sneaks in there. Anyway, it’s nice to make your acquaintance. Thank you for reading and commenting! It is appreciated.
Re. Savages
23rd May 2020 8:47am
you say your not poetically incline but I disagree you are very poetic in my opinion
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23rd May 2020 8:49am
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23rd May 2020 9:03am
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24th May 2020 6:13am
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27th May 2020 6:43pm
Wow, that last stanza is such a vivid metaphor. Well get on up here, sit at the table, and I'l give you a heaping serving of adoration 😍 This is such a melancholy piece that illustrates well that profound yearning in all of us to be loved. I identify well with this passage,
"A hodgepodge
Some, fortunate enough to find it
Others, spend a lifetime
searching for it.
The clusterfuck of love."
I spend an inordinate amount of precious time searching in some peoples hearts for love that just doesn't in them exist.
"A hodgepodge
Some, fortunate enough to find it
Others, spend a lifetime
searching for it.
The clusterfuck of love."
I spend an inordinate amount of precious time searching in some peoples hearts for love that just doesn't in them exist.
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Re: Re. Savages
27th May 2020 7:01pm
You always understand my pieces so well!! And o love that. It’s sad but I’m also humorous with it. I love your rich comments so much. Thank you!
In response to your last point.... you and me both!! It’s like my sickness. Actually I have a poem I just wrote that relates, you might like if. Maybe I’ll post it later.
In response to your last point.... you and me both!! It’s like my sickness. Actually I have a poem I just wrote that relates, you might like if. Maybe I’ll post it later.
Re: Re. Savages
27th May 2020 7:19pm
Please do. Maybe our symbiosis is due to the San Jose water we grew up drinking. 😃
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