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Supernovae
I slam my fist into it all—
CRRRRAAAAAAAACCKKKKKKKKK!
Shattering bone and cracking drywall.
Sobbing, wailing, crying on the floor,
A nascent star, once thriving;
Now, dying at its core.
Quivering, shaking,
My foundation is quaking
Shivering, scared
—SCREAMING
Tears steady streaming
“WHY, GOD!? WHY!?”
Bleeding, begging
—PLEADING
My still-beating heart cries!
The whole of my existence
DESTROYED
My fragile trust,
Thrust into the void
Leaving a gaping, black hole
In the lining of my soul
Where not a sliver of light,
Nor silver lining show.
HOW COULD YOU DO THIS?
You took the light from me.
You took the right from me
To have a normal life;
The gravity of the situation
Was a weight, far too great
For a child’s mind to bear.
Tragic memories, forever planted
In the soils of my despair.
CRRRRAAAAAAAACCKKKKKKKKK!
Shattering bone and cracking drywall.
Sobbing, wailing, crying on the floor,
A nascent star, once thriving;
Now, dying at its core.
Quivering, shaking,
My foundation is quaking
Shivering, scared
—SCREAMING
Tears steady streaming
“WHY, GOD!? WHY!?”
Bleeding, begging
—PLEADING
My still-beating heart cries!
The whole of my existence
DESTROYED
My fragile trust,
Thrust into the void
Leaving a gaping, black hole
In the lining of my soul
Where not a sliver of light,
Nor silver lining show.
HOW COULD YOU DO THIS?
You took the light from me.
You took the right from me
To have a normal life;
The gravity of the situation
Was a weight, far too great
For a child’s mind to bear.
Tragic memories, forever planted
In the soils of my despair.
Author's Note
The final breath of a dying star
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16th Apr 2020 1:59am
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Re: Re. Supernovae
16th Apr 2020 2:07am
I promise the next entry will be a bit more uplifting. Sorry I keep hitting you guys with these heavy poems.
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16th Apr 2020 2:01am
Re: Re. Supernovae
16th Apr 2020 2:08am
Wonderful would not exactly be my word of choice, but thanks for your kind words, Jen.
Re. Supernovae
Those are my feelings exactly as they dangle thoughts of of one day finding mine. Just to have it ripped away. Then I walk away like an empty shell broken again.
It's so important to fix these sort of things.
It's so important to fix these sort of things.
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Re: Re. Supernovae
16th Apr 2020 4:12am
Ah, I'm sorry to hear you've felt this way before... :\
Scars of the past still hurt sometimes... this is not one I've ever openly expressed.
Scars of the past still hurt sometimes... this is not one I've ever openly expressed.
Re. Supernovae
16th Apr 2020 2:57am
Never apologize for spilling your truth; it's not your job to entertain us here. Better out than in!
A good heartfelt write...
A good heartfelt write...
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Re: Re. Supernovae
16th Apr 2020 4:16am
brokentitanium,
Thank you very much for those kind words of encouragement :). While I agree it is probably better out than in, I always question the consequences when I share a dark poem such as this. I try to be a light in the world, ya' know?
Anyway, I really appreciate your readership and your kindness! Best wishes...
-NewB
Thank you very much for those kind words of encouragement :). While I agree it is probably better out than in, I always question the consequences when I share a dark poem such as this. I try to be a light in the world, ya' know?
Anyway, I really appreciate your readership and your kindness! Best wishes...
-NewB
Re. Supernovae
16th Apr 2020 3:07am
I can relate all to well to this, definitely brings back memories, very deep.
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Re: Re. Supernovae
16th Apr 2020 4:20am
It's a shame to see people who can relate to these terrible emotions, but I suppose it makes me feel less alienated. Thank you for sharing that, Joanna. I truly appreciate your readership and support, and am flattered by your RL entry :)
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16th Apr 2020 3:21am
Re: Re. Supernovae
16th Apr 2020 4:22am
Thank you so much for that kind comment. It was indeed a purge of old emotions... something I've probably needed to let go of. Not something I'd wish on anyone...
I really appreciate your readership and support, Valeriya!
I really appreciate your readership and support, Valeriya!
Re: Re. Supernovae
16th Apr 2020 4:34am
Trome! I truly appreciate you stopping in to give me your opinion of my writings. I'm glad that you liked this, and I am so flattered by the reading list entry!
Honestly, I am not entirely satisfied. I wanted the background to be black, with white text, but had I made it a visual image, it would have been barely legible.
I think a black background would have been a bit more fitting.
Anyway, it's too late now, it's posted. It seems it didn't matter too much either way. The message is the same.
Honestly, I am not entirely satisfied. I wanted the background to be black, with white text, but had I made it a visual image, it would have been barely legible.
I think a black background would have been a bit more fitting.
Anyway, it's too late now, it's posted. It seems it didn't matter too much either way. The message is the same.
Re. Supernovae
16th Apr 2020 3:42am
Scribe away as you please.
As you are a great writer.
Its your pen, your mind, your soul,
Its Yours.. good feelings or bad..
They all make the pieces come alive...
Its different from your norm but hell to what is the usual.
Keep them coming
Its therapy....
✨✨✨✨✨
As you are a great writer.
Its your pen, your mind, your soul,
Its Yours.. good feelings or bad..
They all make the pieces come alive...
Its different from your norm but hell to what is the usual.
Keep them coming
Its therapy....
✨✨✨✨✨
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Re: Re. Supernovae
16th Apr 2020 4:36am
Thank you so much for that, Poetic_Strength. You always have really kind and uplifting words for me :)
Like I said in previous comments... it's just more-so a concern with spreading positivity into the world vs spreading negativity. I think I spread more light than darkness...I sure do try.
Your encouragement means a lot, as this is definitely outside of the norm for me. I sooo much appreciate you stopping by to show your support :)
Like I said in previous comments... it's just more-so a concern with spreading positivity into the world vs spreading negativity. I think I spread more light than darkness...I sure do try.
Your encouragement means a lot, as this is definitely outside of the norm for me. I sooo much appreciate you stopping by to show your support :)
Re. Supernovae
16th Apr 2020 4:02am
dearest NB I feel for you pain expressed here
i've had panic attacks I know how dreadful they can be...
hugs on past terrors ❤
i've had panic attacks I know how dreadful they can be...
hugs on past terrors ❤
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Re: Re. Supernovae
16th Apr 2020 4:40am
Yeahhh,
That was a pretty low point for me. If you'd like a back story, pm me, and I will tell you more about what happened.
You are really sweet, crimsin. Thanks for your consolation. Btw, I am largely free of panic attacks now. I still deal with depression and anxiety, but my mental health is much better than it was back 10+ years ago.
That was a pretty low point for me. If you'd like a back story, pm me, and I will tell you more about what happened.
You are really sweet, crimsin. Thanks for your consolation. Btw, I am largely free of panic attacks now. I still deal with depression and anxiety, but my mental health is much better than it was back 10+ years ago.
Re. Supernovae
16th Apr 2020 5:13am
This poem is heartbreaking. I am glad you are feeling better for writing it. Keep on writing.
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Re: Re. Supernovae
16th Apr 2020 5:16am
Francisco... thanks for stopping by!
This is a memory, long in the past, but at that point in time. It was the end of my world. Didn't mean to break your heart, bud!
This is a memory, long in the past, but at that point in time. It was the end of my world. Didn't mean to break your heart, bud!
Re. Supernovae
16th Apr 2020 12:35pm
Heartfelt with truth spoken indeed a heartbroken is a heart that still bleeds even after the love is gone from the depth of the spiritual soul nicely composed brother...respect
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Re: Re. Supernovae
16th Apr 2020 3:25pm
Hey Stoney,
Thank you for your readership and your kind words. That is true, but at this point, it's more like a thick scar. It doesn't hurt like it used to, fortunately. Healing, one day at a time...!
Thank you for your readership and your kind words. That is true, but at this point, it's more like a thick scar. It doesn't hurt like it used to, fortunately. Healing, one day at a time...!
Re: Re. Supernovae
17th Apr 2020 9:45am
Respect brother poet it never last long cause we move on with our lives that is a good thing
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Re. Supernovae
16th Apr 2020 1:26pm
I’ve had far too many of these kinds of moments in life. The pain shrieks right off the page. We always come back from it though, don’t we? A little more rattled each time, but trekking on for survival. An emotionally vulnerable piece. I agree with brokentitanium, “better out than in”. Good work.
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I'm really sorry to hear that, Eerie... the uneasiness in your question is all too real. We do come back from traumas like these, and rattled to the core at times, but... nonetheless, here we are- writing away.
Such deep feeling of betrayal take a long time to sort themselves out. Losing control of your emotions in such a violent way is traumatic in itself. I had a lot of resent inside for a very long time, but things are getting better. Thank you for your empathy.
Such deep feeling of betrayal take a long time to sort themselves out. Losing control of your emotions in such a violent way is traumatic in itself. I had a lot of resent inside for a very long time, but things are getting better. Thank you for your empathy.
Re. Supernovae
16th Apr 2020 7:31pm
A heart wrenching spill NB. You painted the emotion so well I can picture it in my mind.
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Re: Re. Supernovae
17th Apr 2020 1:11am
Summer, thank you so much for your empathetic comment. It means a lot... You have always been so sweet to me - and I truly appreciate you! *hugs*
Re. Supernovae
16th Apr 2020 10:21pm
Wow- this poem is so raw. I could feel the emotion you were describing. Sad to read, but put together so well.
I hope this comment finds you well x
I hope this comment finds you well x
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Re: Re. Supernovae
19th Apr 2020 1:05pm
Thank you, emily. A recollection of a past trauma :\
I worked hard to recount the emotions I was feeling at the time.
Not exactly a pleasant experience, but it produced this poem, so...
Heh.
I appreciate you stopping by to read and comment on my poetry again, and I hope you're well!
I worked hard to recount the emotions I was feeling at the time.
Not exactly a pleasant experience, but it produced this poem, so...
Heh.
I appreciate you stopping by to read and comment on my poetry again, and I hope you're well!
Re. Supernovae
17th Apr 2020 1:04am
The powerful organic emotions felt in this reflective Write cuts to the core. It is stirring how your striking dramatic words truly connect! Thank you for sharing this Incredible submission!
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Re. Supernovae
17th Apr 2020 1:30am
The event horizon is beyond our view...a powerful piece of ink NB.
Peace...Harry
Peace...Harry
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4th May 2020 5:20am