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Lean, Mean, Cleaning Machine (Day 11)
Nature may abhor a vacuum
but the household adores me;
it behoves me to hoover,
for I am the prime remover
I suck so much that I am great;
with a wilful whir and whine
sucking up dust, dirt and detritus
No filth can escape my grasp
The floor is my domain
sweeping up all dirty invaders
until all is clean and quiet
and my work is done.
but the household adores me;
it behoves me to hoover,
for I am the prime remover
I suck so much that I am great;
with a wilful whir and whine
sucking up dust, dirt and detritus
No filth can escape my grasp
The floor is my domain
sweeping up all dirty invaders
until all is clean and quiet
and my work is done.
Published 11th Apr 2020
Author's Note
Entry 11 for NaPoWriMo2020.
Cleanliness is next to Godliness.
Cleanliness is next to Godliness.
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12th Apr 2020 10:48pm
Viddax... heh, creative way to talk about housework, to say the least! Very interesting...makes me wonder if there was some underlying meaning I might be missing lol.
By the way, where you said:
"with a wilful whir and whine
sucking up dust, dirt and detritus "
I was expecting 'dust, dirt, and grime', but I'm always looking for rhyme opportunities lol.
Anyway, fun read. And thanks for sharing. Best wishes :)
By the way, where you said:
"with a wilful whir and whine
sucking up dust, dirt and detritus "
I was expecting 'dust, dirt, and grime', but I'm always looking for rhyme opportunities lol.
Anyway, fun read. And thanks for sharing. Best wishes :)
13th Apr 2020 6:40pm
If there is some underlying meaning, be sure to let me know! For once it is as it is.
To me grime is worked in mess that a noble hoover is not quite the right tool for; grime needs some elbow scrubbing action.
To me grime is worked in mess that a noble hoover is not quite the right tool for; grime needs some elbow scrubbing action.
13th Apr 2020 6:59pm
LOL. I will stop searching for something that isn't there. I understand that, and I figured that's probably why you didn't use the word. I just saw the opportunity ;)
