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The Soft Sound of Hard Words Falling Out My Brain
i wish i was borna king
but wishin's jus' fishin
in a pool o' pity --
can't catch nothin' butta damned ol' cold
still...
i wish i was made o' money
peelin' fitties off my ass
spittin' quarters in the sink
sweatin' silver, shittin' gold
'cause
jesus lord, i'm tired o' workin
tired o' bustin this ol' tail
tired o' yes sir
tired o' yes ma'am
tired
an you can go to hail
but wishin's jus' fishin
in a pool o' pity --
can't catch nothin' butta damned ol' cold
still...
i wish i was made o' money
peelin' fitties off my ass
spittin' quarters in the sink
sweatin' silver, shittin' gold
'cause
jesus lord, i'm tired o' workin
tired o' bustin this ol' tail
tired o' yes sir
tired o' yes ma'am
tired
an you can go to hail
Published 2nd Apr 2020
Author's Note
Hail...that's how we say it down here.
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2nd Apr 2020 3:43pm
You had me remembering when i was a mgr in retail working 18hr shifts
and later in life working from 6am to 4pm on salary and then clocking in at 5pm to 11pm or midnight
at the same place of employment (i rec'd 2 sets of W2's)
i found that to get away from a metaphor theme like what You've spilled with respect to aging / retirement
is to have solid hobbies in place -- preferably the type where You can pick up spending $$ doing something You are passionate about.
and later in life working from 6am to 4pm on salary and then clocking in at 5pm to 11pm or midnight
at the same place of employment (i rec'd 2 sets of W2's)
i found that to get away from a metaphor theme like what You've spilled with respect to aging / retirement
is to have solid hobbies in place -- preferably the type where You can pick up spending $$ doing something You are passionate about.
2nd Apr 2020 4:09pm
Tallen...thanks so much for reading and commenting.
I'm just working eight hour shifts, but I think working among the aged in this Age of Corona is wearing me out.
So many changes.
Precautions.
Breathing through a mask all day.
Everybody feels the stress of this thing that is still evolving.
And you are so right about having passionate interests outside of work.
Thanks again for reading. And commenting.
I'm just working eight hour shifts, but I think working among the aged in this Age of Corona is wearing me out.
So many changes.
Precautions.
Breathing through a mask all day.
Everybody feels the stress of this thing that is still evolving.
And you are so right about having passionate interests outside of work.
Thanks again for reading. And commenting.
2nd Apr 2020 4:32pm
Hey Java, how truthful such feelings, this voices how many of us feel.
The exhaustion of it all can hammer away on a person, making everyday stressful physically and mentally!!!
Your speech pattern is very much like it is in these parts (WV) and my family who are true southerners (AL) it made me smile to see it expressed this way :)
Excellent vent with style!!!
The exhaustion of it all can hammer away on a person, making everyday stressful physically and mentally!!!
Your speech pattern is very much like it is in these parts (WV) and my family who are true southerners (AL) it made me smile to see it expressed this way :)
Excellent vent with style!!!
2nd Apr 2020 5:32pm
S.,
Thanks for reading and for your kind comments.
I'm from SC. I love the southern dialect. Dialect(s).
And you're right. We're all already worn down.
And with a ways to go, I'm sure.
Stay safe.
Thanks again.
Thanks for reading and for your kind comments.
I'm from SC. I love the southern dialect. Dialect(s).
And you're right. We're all already worn down.
And with a ways to go, I'm sure.
Stay safe.
Thanks again.
2nd Apr 2020 10:51pm
Damn relatable piece I'm feeling that these days!! Great write love the interesting flow
2nd Apr 2020 11:01pm
Thanks so much, Hunter.
I'm glad it struck a chord.
I was off today, but I'm still wiped out.
Dreading the grind tomorrow, but thankful I have work.
I'm glad it struck a chord.
I was off today, but I'm still wiped out.
Dreading the grind tomorrow, but thankful I have work.
3rd Apr 2020 3:23am
LOL! This is GREAT, Javalini!
I lived with my Aunt & Uncle in Wisconsin or awhile, and whenever we went out, the local people would ask me to say one thing:
Whale Hale! LOL
You nai'yuled this'un!
I lived with my Aunt & Uncle in Wisconsin or awhile, and whenever we went out, the local people would ask me to say one thing:
Whale Hale! LOL
You nai'yuled this'un!
3rd Apr 2020 1:33pm
Thanks, Ahavati.
We're all tired, but we push on.
Really, the lucky push on. The rest have to worry about feeding their families and paying their bills.
And what the hale? I love the accent.
We're all tired, but we push on.
Really, the lucky push on. The rest have to worry about feeding their families and paying their bills.
And what the hale? I love the accent.
