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very interesting, and i liked this bit most, of course:

"Structures
are
strAight jackets
with
flower
lace."

and altogether this little artsy salad makes its point. well brought.

since you're looking for critique, i suppose i would say... at the 'can you think?'
i would add a 'not' after 'you', but that's my only input i guess. this type of poetry is certainly not my forte just yet. [:

you have a good point

tis an awe'ful
strait when jack too straightight....butyet no
body's business to projectile such meta4s as perzoomin to possess
some
'kinda reality'....
each brain of ours reacts to stimuli in singularly unique ways, creating fiction of ALL, then mean-while, ego tells one that one's ficticious creation is reality to be Believed ~ thus launching 100's'o'1000's yrs of Human Mortal Combat--- there! n'ow wee know!!!*

*just seriously jesting about Our self-important seriousnesses

M

:) Respect

and envy.

Curtsy,

S'

thank you

Matthew,

Thanks for the very insightful comments on my poem.  I can tell you are a poet, have poetical imagination and don't give a "shit" (can I use that word here?) about what other people think, although you, like myself, enjoy comments on your poetry.  Your advice is very detailed, which other people's usually are not, acute and challenging.  I am using them as I'm sending the poem to a journal.  Part of your perception is in my need to feel (be) different, but as you say, although you don't put it this way, a difference to be a difference must make a difference, that is, there should be some intelligibility to it.  Thanks agaim.

marcella1  (Bob Craig)

Im always glad to help, and we have to have each othrs back because there aren´t many of us around

I'm intrigued by this and I love J's 'artsy salad' comment. Overall, it gets the idea across pretty efficiently. I feel like this would be an art form in itself written on a canvas.