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I wish...
I wish I was...
...a falling snow
floating down gently
experience the thaw
as the season go by
...a sunray that lights
up the dawn
uncover each sights
like a budding smile
...a floating fluff
that makes children laugh
the aged sighs
and think of past joys
...a curvy rainbow
that colour the azure sky
during an afternoon shower
greeting the sunny day
...a lover's whisper
promises made
and kept forever
never betrayed.
...a falling snow
floating down gently
experience the thaw
as the season go by
...a sunray that lights
up the dawn
uncover each sights
like a budding smile
...a floating fluff
that makes children laugh
the aged sighs
and think of past joys
...a curvy rainbow
that colour the azure sky
during an afternoon shower
greeting the sunny day
...a lover's whisper
promises made
and kept forever
never betrayed.
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5th Jan 2012 8:54am
The light
5th Jan 2012 9:13am
I feel that you are all that you have said. To feel all of this is the reflection of true inner beauty. I liked the verse of the falling snow. For not one snowflake is the same. Just as your poem. I think that you have covered the meaning of everyones true wish of how life should be. It was a pleasure reading your poem. Thank you for the warm feeling.
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re: The light
5th Jan 2012 9:46am
Thanks so much Atropabelladonna for that very nice comment. Its true though, I wish all those and know I am not. Just another breathing existence. But it would be so beautiful then if I were...all those. Thank you for reading and commenting!
:)))
5th Jan 2012 9:17am
yes never betrayed gracey , now that would be nice ay ? I love it as always :)
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re: :)))
5th Jan 2012 9:48am
Thank you Paul: Yes that would be perfect indeed. Never betrayed. :D Thank you for dropping by and commenting.
these words are beautiful
Anonymous
5th Jan 2012 9:20am
"...a lover's whisper
promises made
and kept forever
never betrayed."
this whole piece was lovely!
promises made
and kept forever
never betrayed."
this whole piece was lovely!
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re: these words are beautiful
5th Jan 2012 9:48am
Milkyway, you are such a dear for dropping by and commenting. Thank you so much.
Gracious
5th Jan 2012 11:47am
re: Gracious
5th Jan 2012 1:39pm
Thanks dear Kym for dropping by, reading and commenting. That means so much to me. Thanks again.
re: Wish
Anonymous
5th Jan 2012 3:14pm
Grace,
So light and airy and then you drop in a hint of mystery. Great change of gears. Enjoyed!
tornado
So light and airy and then you drop in a hint of mystery. Great change of gears. Enjoyed!
tornado
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re: re: Wish
5th Jan 2012 6:25pm
:)
5th Jan 2012 3:17pm
Grace
Lovely wishes.
Love how the drapery falls
and takes everything within.
:)
S'
Lovely wishes.
Love how the drapery falls
and takes everything within.
:)
S'
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re: :)
5th Jan 2012 6:28pm
Dear Sumeet: Thanks ever so much for dropping by and commenting. Your insight is so blessed.