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Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
If I were a mason
& You,
stone
I’d chip away
(@ You)
making our
home
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a Dream-spun Brevity now, a journal entry
in the upper right corner next to the doodle art of
a capybara
Author's Note
This is what woke me up early this morning...........
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Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
14th Jan 2020 3:12pm
This is beautiful, Tallen! I truly enjoyed your little poem!
Excellent writing 😊
Excellent writing 😊
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Re: Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
14th Jan 2020 3:15pm
Beautiful ?
Wow -- didn't see beauty
perhaps not enough coffee
this morning
appreciate Your take and read on this wee ink
thank You
Wow -- didn't see beauty
perhaps not enough coffee
this morning
appreciate Your take and read on this wee ink
thank You
Re: Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
14th Jan 2020 3:17pm
Yes, the message was beautiful, and you worded it in a poetic way! Beauty is in the eye of the beholder, I guess, heh.
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Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
14th Jan 2020 3:14pm
Re: Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
14th Jan 2020 3:17pm
the things we think about when not conscious,
eh?
thank You for the read and share
eh?
thank You for the read and share
Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
Anonymous
14th Jan 2020 5:26pm
It is a very lovely sentiment, Tallen.
It reminds me somewhat of the song "If I Were A Carpenter" by Tim Harden, though to be honest, those lyrics are lacking in poetry.
It reminds me somewhat of the song "If I Were A Carpenter" by Tim Harden, though to be honest, those lyrics are lacking in poetry.

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Re: Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
aaaaargh! Now that tune is in my head!!
(& i have been working on a spill about Arizona's local beasties, the Javelina, but now all i have is:
if i were a carpenter,
& You are a pig,
i'd build You a pen
and make it real big.
Damnit, JB!!!
(& i have been working on a spill about Arizona's local beasties, the Javelina, but now all i have is:
if i were a carpenter,
& You are a pig,
i'd build You a pen
and make it real big.
Damnit, JB!!!
Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
14th Jan 2020 7:15pm
Dear T,
What were your thoughts behind this piece? I read this work as a loving and hopeful idea of two people building a life together. For me, it totally works as a beautiful poem. Yep, that’s my vote. 😉 H🌷
What were your thoughts behind this piece? I read this work as a loving and hopeful idea of two people building a life together. For me, it totally works as a beautiful poem. Yep, that’s my vote. 😉 H🌷
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Re: Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
14th Jan 2020 7:57pm
You caused me to smile --
thank You
i am not certain what caused me to think of this
as this thought is what caused me to wake up this morning.
i have many a
theo - ry
but nothing definite or "solid" in concrete
appreciative of Your vote, though
thank You
thank You
i am not certain what caused me to think of this
as this thought is what caused me to wake up this morning.
i have many a
theo - ry
but nothing definite or "solid" in concrete
appreciative of Your vote, though
thank You
Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
14th Jan 2020 8:39pm
Re: Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
14th Jan 2020 8:51pm
i truly don't understand the attention this spill has garnered as i dreamed it and most of the time i do not trust my unconsciousness.
However, that said,
You are a pillar of this Deep...place and so,
i'll take Your word for it and thank You -- thank You, Brother for the read and kind share and
Honored for the RL add
However, that said,
You are a pillar of this Deep...place and so,
i'll take Your word for it and thank You -- thank You, Brother for the read and kind share and
Honored for the RL add
Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
15th Jan 2020 10:37am
Re: Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
15th Jan 2020 5:46pm
Re: Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
15th Jan 2020 8:54pm
You comment reminded me of that song
Home, Home on the Range
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qgfQSSnzDLI
Home, Home on the Range
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qgfQSSnzDLI
Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
15th Jan 2020 8:06pm
Lovely metaphor, Tallen. Reminds me of that old song "If I were a Carpenter" in some respects.
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Re: Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
15th Jan 2020 8:55pm
thank You
it's what JB said and then that song got stuck in my mind but now because of Tim's comment
i got another song stuck in my head -- lol
Honored for the RL add
it's what JB said and then that song got stuck in my mind but now because of Tim's comment
i got another song stuck in my head -- lol
Honored for the RL add
Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
am i going to be the soggy pop tart and say that i read something ominous and got serious RS vibes from this?...
Ich habe Pläne große Pläne
Ich baue dir ein Haus
and
Stein um Stein mauer ich dich ein
Stein um Stein
Ich werde immer bei dir sein
tho, in my defense, i'm a little weird and nicotine deprived :/
i love how this is making me think in crazy straw bendy ways
a fantastic little write, tallen
💕💖💕
Ich habe Pläne große Pläne
Ich baue dir ein Haus
and
Stein um Stein mauer ich dich ein
Stein um Stein
Ich werde immer bei dir sein
tho, in my defense, i'm a little weird and nicotine deprived :/
i love how this is making me think in crazy straw bendy ways
a fantastic little write, tallen
💕💖💕
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Re: Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
15th Jan 2020 9:51pm
absolutely LOVE Your share, here,
Beautiful
thank You for causing to me smile and appreciate
the insight You spilled to me in German -- Wow!
i concur
if You and me or me and You
or a couple became Statues.........
idols
Hell, Yeah, we'd be etched in granite for a
long long time
Damnit!! Now i will be wanting a Heavy Metal song from You and in fucking German, damnit!!
Beautiful
thank You for causing to me smile and appreciate
the insight You spilled to me in German -- Wow!
i concur
if You and me or me and You
or a couple became Statues.........
idols
Hell, Yeah, we'd be etched in granite for a
long long time
Damnit!! Now i will be wanting a Heavy Metal song from You and in fucking German, damnit!!
Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
16th Jan 2020 5:51pm
Re: Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
16th Jan 2020 6:17pm
Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
23rd Jan 2020 3:19am
Very nice piece hun, hey waking to words like these is all needed to make a great morning and inspirational, I loved it good job hun 🤗❤
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Re: Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
23rd Jan 2020 9:08am
appreciate the kind praise
i wake up at all odd early morning hours
with complete spills
some are longer and some, like this Brevity,
short.
i suppose this means my subconscious also writes Poetry
i wake up at all odd early morning hours
with complete spills
some are longer and some, like this Brevity,
short.
i suppose this means my subconscious also writes Poetry
Re: Re. Solid relationships often take a lot of Time
23rd Jan 2020 1:36pm
You welcome and our subconscious basically does wrote poetry cause words whisper in mine of some kind of poetic verse so its best to just write it haha...🙂
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23rd Jan 2020 3:59pm
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