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reality check
savage pain rips through my belly
my stomach loudly rumbles
it's the sound of death ravaging my insides
every time I eat I fear
the pain is coming and I know it
grumble, roar...
I lie in bed at night my husband listens
he silently cries
what was once embarrassingly funny
is now all too real symptoms
toxic smell fills the room
I have no more energy to expend
even drugs are failing to keep me marching
and he knows my days are numbered
I don't worry about myself today
I'm actually prepared to walk through the door
from this life to the next
what I'm not ready for is leaving him behind
he still needs me more than anyone
I'm worried about him
I always thought him my anchor on a chaotic sea
I knew without him I would be adrift
now I know he has no home without me
his soul abides with mine
where will his heart lay to rest when I'm no longer here?
God help my husband
please take care of him
I fucked up and didn't take care of myself
I'm abandoning the ones I love
forgive me
my stomach loudly rumbles
it's the sound of death ravaging my insides
every time I eat I fear
the pain is coming and I know it
grumble, roar...
I lie in bed at night my husband listens
he silently cries
what was once embarrassingly funny
is now all too real symptoms
toxic smell fills the room
I have no more energy to expend
even drugs are failing to keep me marching
and he knows my days are numbered
I don't worry about myself today
I'm actually prepared to walk through the door
from this life to the next
what I'm not ready for is leaving him behind
he still needs me more than anyone
I'm worried about him
I always thought him my anchor on a chaotic sea
I knew without him I would be adrift
now I know he has no home without me
his soul abides with mine
where will his heart lay to rest when I'm no longer here?
God help my husband
please take care of him
I fucked up and didn't take care of myself
I'm abandoning the ones I love
forgive me
Written by
crimsin
(Unveiling)
Published 4th Nov 2019
| Edited 5th Nov 2019
Author's Note
this is so embarrassing...
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Re. reality check
Anonymous
4th Nov 2019 11:38pm
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Re: Re. reality check
5th Nov 2019 00:13am
thank you dearest Riddler for reading me all these years and for caring... I'm still wondering who you are..I appreciate you reaching out today...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
Re: Re. reality check
5th Nov 2019 2:26am
why, its the 5thRiddler....:)~ just a smart ass here. Trying for a smile.<3
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Re: Re. reality check
5th Nov 2019 1:16pm
What what are you referring to with the term outsiders are you saying that you do not appreciate poems where people are just moaning about their problems ie most poems
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Re: Re. reality check
5th Nov 2019 2:23pm
outsiders? I'm unsure I don't read that term here...I was actually really loathe to write about this I even stopped writing for about a month to avoid it but I am a writer it's what I do and this problem is ever present on my mind it is my hopes to free myself to write about other things...
if you dig through my library I think you would be pleased to find a lot of pieces of pure imagination... though there are a lot of writes concerning my mortality... I feel poetry is a unique language some know some don't...
love Brenda 🌹
if you dig through my library I think you would be pleased to find a lot of pieces of pure imagination... though there are a lot of writes concerning my mortality... I feel poetry is a unique language some know some don't...
love Brenda 🌹
Re. reality check
Anonymous
4th Nov 2019 11:50pm
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Re: Re. reality check
5th Nov 2019 00:14am
thank you beautiful Sky for the love I deeply appreciate you yes it was great talking with you we will talk again I'm sure...
love Brenda ❤
love Brenda ❤
Re. reality check
No need for embarrassment, we all have intestines, yet it's somehow taboo to speak of them. This one hits home..the pain that no meds or heating pad helps any longer, the crazy sounds & fear of eating. Try to eat as much easily digestible stuff as possible. No red meat or fake stuff/processed, fried, certain vegetables, sugar, dairy, gluten, [ even if you aren't intolerant; it's bad for you]
...choice, fresh soups, lean protein, rice etc..
...choice, fresh soups, lean protein, rice etc..
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Re: Re. reality check
5th Nov 2019 2:24am
thank you beautiful Pandora for your understanding heart I think it being taboo is part of why I never talked about what was going on with anyone even my doctors...I will take it easy with what I eat thank you for the advice...
love you lady...
Brenda ❤
love you lady...
Brenda ❤
Re. reality check
5th Nov 2019 2:24am
deeply emotional and honest...thats you. never bullshit when I read your words...hugs and love beautiful lady. <3
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5th Nov 2019 4:56am
thank you beautiful Mysterious One for your beautifully understanding heart... I'm deeply feeling the love...
love Brenda ❤
love Brenda ❤
Re. reality check
5th Nov 2019 3:43am
Beautiful love & tenderness in this write.
As for the gut issues... with 2 in my household with inflammatory bowel disease (husband & son), I can relate to the symptoms you describe.... I pray that you'll get good news that it is something manageable & easily treated.
And please, drop the guilt. You are loved.
k
As for the gut issues... with 2 in my household with inflammatory bowel disease (husband & son), I can relate to the symptoms you describe.... I pray that you'll get good news that it is something manageable & easily treated.
And please, drop the guilt. You are loved.
k
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5th Nov 2019 4:58am
thank you beautiful poetess for sharing your own experiences about this kind of illness...I'm just afraid after so many years of ignoring my pain it might be too late you know the needle and the damage done and all that...you're so beautiful to me and shine hope on page... I deeply appreciate you...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
Re. reality check
5th Nov 2019 9:51am
Peace and Love to You Brenda, but never stop the fight, use that bully head.
The love/care/respect for Your Hubby...that empathy -use it's strength.
Research the hell out of similar cases and foodies that can help...yes damage done, but some things can heal/repair-albeit slow or minimal...You may find a balm through Natural or better foods....all one can do is try.
Bully Your way, be defiant...You are Amazon, I've known You well long enough.
Strong Write-Heartbreaking Kidd-O!!!
The love/care/respect for Your Hubby...that empathy -use it's strength.
Research the hell out of similar cases and foodies that can help...yes damage done, but some things can heal/repair-albeit slow or minimal...You may find a balm through Natural or better foods....all one can do is try.
Bully Your way, be defiant...You are Amazon, I've known You well long enough.
Strong Write-Heartbreaking Kidd-O!!!
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Re: Re. reality check
5th Nov 2019 2:25pm
thank you dearest Soul for the love it's deeply felt...I will begin to learn what foods go easier on my tummy...your presence here after all these years is deeply appreciated...
love Brenda ❤
love Brenda ❤
Re. reality check
5th Nov 2019 12:07pm
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5th Nov 2019 2:25pm
Re. reality check
5th Nov 2019 1:15pm
What did the narrator of this poem fail to do in terms of taking care of themselves that is not clear
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Re: Re. reality check
5th Nov 2019 2:17pm
thank you for your interest dearest poet I guess you're right you would have to read my previous poem "the next episode to understand what I did... I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
Re. reality check
5th Nov 2019 2:10pm
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5th Nov 2019 2:26pm
Re. reality check
The description of realizing the onset of what appears to be an inevitable reality makes for an incredibly depressing write. Yet, it is also beautiful in how it conveys deep love for your husband. It is the shining light through the darkness of this piece. I'm sorry for the pain you are experiencing. No more time for regrets and guilt, though. Make the most of what you have, and say those I love you's as often as you can. Whether a reader can relate or not, one thing we can all take from this poem is the reminder to not take life and people for granted. That reminder cannot be told to us as humans enough. Even if illness wins in the end, what matters is that you stood up to it and fought and still are trying. Be proud of that, and hold onto the fact that you are loved by your loved ones in spite of it all. Brave share.
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