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MY CONSTANT LIGHT IS FREE FROM GRUDGE.
MY CONSTANT LIGHT IS FREE FROM GRUDGE.
I see a mild and constant light directing me
towards the truth, the shining faith l love to see.
I have been working all my life to pave its way
as l see that it is the path to that great day.
A man appears to say my light leaves us at night
when it is needed most to help the obscured sight.
We need a light that we turn on just when we need
to help the wise when night is quiet to think and read.
Another sees my shining light will fade his own.
He wants himself to be the sun that weaves the dawn.
He tries to destroy all the lights and darken life.
His light should shine or let pitch darkness be so rife.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
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I see a mild and constant light directing me
towards the truth, the shining faith l love to see.
I have been working all my life to pave its way
as l see that it is the path to that great day.
A man appears to say my light leaves us at night
when it is needed most to help the obscured sight.
We need a light that we turn on just when we need
to help the wise when night is quiet to think and read.
Another sees my shining light will fade his own.
He wants himself to be the sun that weaves the dawn.
He tries to destroy all the lights and darken life.
His light should shine or let pitch darkness be so rife.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
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Published 22nd Oct 2019
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22nd Oct 2019 8:28pm
Should not your second line read "towards the truth, the shining faith l love TO see"?.
22nd Oct 2019 8:52pm
22nd Oct 2019 8:59pm
So rife, so rife, so rife my life’s with scorn
that I can barley find the energy
to love the righteousness that’s meant for me
to worthy be of god’s ordained eternity.
and face with happiness his world each morn.
A quiet night, I’m told, means one sans light
that renders me without ability
to read and think my thoughts responsibly
or write paged words with some felicity
like men whose eyes obscured are without sight.
I wonder if I might destroy the dark
if I were now to see the path that leads
to worlds where no one suffers pain or bleeds
a place that souls for happiness do need
and light illuminates divine remarks.
Curse those who’d deign to have it otherwise.
Who’d seek the diminution of my faith,
my sure reception of god’s saving grace.
May they forever be from love displaced!
Deprive them, god, of life within the skies!.
that I can barley find the energy
to love the righteousness that’s meant for me
to worthy be of god’s ordained eternity.
and face with happiness his world each morn.
A quiet night, I’m told, means one sans light
that renders me without ability
to read and think my thoughts responsibly
or write paged words with some felicity
like men whose eyes obscured are without sight.
I wonder if I might destroy the dark
if I were now to see the path that leads
to worlds where no one suffers pain or bleeds
a place that souls for happiness do need
and light illuminates divine remarks.
Curse those who’d deign to have it otherwise.
Who’d seek the diminution of my faith,
my sure reception of god’s saving grace.
May they forever be from love displaced!
Deprive them, god, of life within the skies!.
22nd Oct 2019 9:19pm
22nd Oct 2019 9:27pm
Surely -- to those who have eyes to see -- it's as self evident as claiming that light holds grudges.
22nd Oct 2019 10:09pm
I am not going to criticize it, but l tell you that it reveals the inconvenience of your attitude towards my poetry. Now, it is clear to me as well as to all the readers of my page.
22nd Oct 2019 10:15pm
What on earth does "the inconvenience of an attitude" mean? And how many readers do you think you have?
Here's what your language and your syntax indicate you are saying in your composition:
A person sees a particular type of light that directs him towards a set of beliefs that he delights in seeing, even thought it seems to be unable to bring him to his heart’s desire since the way to get there is full of obstacles that he must expend a lot of energy in removing so that he can get to some future day that he claims is at the end of it.
But someone arrives to make the unsubstantiated and questionable claim that the aforementioned directing light shines only during the day time and that “we” need a light that “we” can turn on to give assistance to a blocked view of something and to some people who wish only on certain nights (i.e., quiet ones) to engage in the act of thinking.
And then another man, who has (or is) his own directing light and who is jealous of the one the speaker sees and claims as his because this other man thinks it threatening to diminish his own, and tries in some unspecified way and for some unspecified reason, to put out even the one he possess, apparently, but inexplicably, intent to plunge the word into darkness.
Is this correct? If so, what's your compositions purpose? And what's its purpose even if my reading of what you are depicting isn't correct?
A person sees a particular type of light that directs him towards a set of beliefs that he delights in seeing, even thought it seems to be unable to bring him to his heart’s desire since the way to get there is full of obstacles that he must expend a lot of energy in removing so that he can get to some future day that he claims is at the end of it.
But someone arrives to make the unsubstantiated and questionable claim that the aforementioned directing light shines only during the day time and that “we” need a light that “we” can turn on to give assistance to a blocked view of something and to some people who wish only on certain nights (i.e., quiet ones) to engage in the act of thinking.
And then another man, who has (or is) his own directing light and who is jealous of the one the speaker sees and claims as his because this other man thinks it threatening to diminish his own, and tries in some unspecified way and for some unspecified reason, to put out even the one he possess, apparently, but inexplicably, intent to plunge the word into darkness.
Is this correct? If so, what's your compositions purpose? And what's its purpose even if my reading of what you are depicting isn't correct?
