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ONE, TO NO END
ONE, TO NO END
The jewel that she has is dear.
It is the brand of her pure heart.
God's placed that gift for her clean mate
to be the prize for his white acts.
She keeps that wealth intact and safe
for that man who deserves that gem.
The clean should catch hands with the pure
to plant their great love and it rear.
His help to keep her pure is more
than that her parents strain to give
as he will blend his soul with hers
and both will be one to no end.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
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The jewel that she has is dear.
It is the brand of her pure heart.
God's placed that gift for her clean mate
to be the prize for his white acts.
She keeps that wealth intact and safe
for that man who deserves that gem.
The clean should catch hands with the pure
to plant their great love and it rear.
His help to keep her pure is more
than that her parents strain to give
as he will blend his soul with hers
and both will be one to no end.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
____________________________________
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Re. ONE, TO NO END
26th Oct 2019 10:30pm
I wonder if you realize that besides proclaiming the execrable patriarchal view that a woman is a gem and valuable to men only if she keeps he virginity intact, you note in your "and both will be one **to** no end" that being "one" is pointless?
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Re. ONE, TO NO END
26th Oct 2019 11:59pm
Dear Baldwin,
Her virginity is a sign of her purity and devotion to one man, isn't it? Of course she expects the man to behave similarly.
Her virginity is a sign of her purity and devotion to one man, isn't it? Of course she expects the man to behave similarly.
Re. ONE, TO NO END
27th Oct 2019 1:00am
Where within this piece is there any indication or depiction of, or a statement about, what the virgin expects?
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Re. ONE, TO NO END
27th Oct 2019 1:03am
When I was ten
and innocent
of fleshy thoughts,
I was hard raped and cast aside
by gangs
of vicious, patriarchal men
who laughed
and called me little bitch
when I with tears
did scream
at them so plaintively
and told then
no
repeatedly.
My cries fell bootless
on deaf ears.
.
And now
because
of something which
was not my doing,
that was against my will,
I’m branded as a woman
less than pure,
unclean,
defiled,
unworthy of
the love of any man
who otherwise,
had I remained
untouched,
might then
have been my mate.
Is it any wonder
I am filled with rage
and hate
for those whose gender’s
masculine?
and innocent
of fleshy thoughts,
I was hard raped and cast aside
by gangs
of vicious, patriarchal men
who laughed
and called me little bitch
when I with tears
did scream
at them so plaintively
and told then
no
repeatedly.
My cries fell bootless
on deaf ears.
.
And now
because
of something which
was not my doing,
that was against my will,
I’m branded as a woman
less than pure,
unclean,
defiled,
unworthy of
the love of any man
who otherwise,
had I remained
untouched,
might then
have been my mate.
Is it any wonder
I am filled with rage
and hate
for those whose gender’s
masculine?
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Re. ONE, TO NO END
27th Oct 2019 7:54am
Dear Baldwin,
Believe me if l say that l consider you a very dear friend now. I would like to have you as a friend on the FACEBOOK. However, the truth is your writing is not poetry to me. I am not saying that to annoy you, but l don't find the sentence that charms me in your writing, whereas l find a lot of them in mine. I write traditional poetry poetry, influenced by old poets like Shakespeare, Wordsworth, etc. Your writing is like prose, written in the form of two or three words in a line to appear like what's called modern poetry. You could have written it in two or three lines of prose. I find a pitiful idea in it, but that's what we can do in prose. I am saying that not to annoy you, but to discuss the wrong concept of poetry in your mind. For me, poetry is the charming sentence written in a charming rhythm.
Believe me if l say that l consider you a very dear friend now. I would like to have you as a friend on the FACEBOOK. However, the truth is your writing is not poetry to me. I am not saying that to annoy you, but l don't find the sentence that charms me in your writing, whereas l find a lot of them in mine. I write traditional poetry poetry, influenced by old poets like Shakespeare, Wordsworth, etc. Your writing is like prose, written in the form of two or three words in a line to appear like what's called modern poetry. You could have written it in two or three lines of prose. I find a pitiful idea in it, but that's what we can do in prose. I am saying that not to annoy you, but to discuss the wrong concept of poetry in your mind. For me, poetry is the charming sentence written in a charming rhythm.
Re. ONE, TO NO END
27th Oct 2019 1:58pm
So .. there are no pitiful ideas in poetry? Ever? And do you think that each and every one of the the lines you write are charming? Would you please give me your (not a dictionary's) definition of "charming" and then produce some of the lines that you have written that fit this definition?
And why on earth should anyone be guided as to what is and is not poetry by the criterion of whether something is poetry to you?
And why on earth should anyone be guided as to what is and is not poetry by the criterion of whether something is poetry to you?
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Re. ONE, TO NO END
27th Oct 2019 2:37pm
Dear Baldwin,
I talk about what l believe and feel. Don't get angry. You are really dear and very useful to me, but please don't misunderstand me. I have my own ideas about what is good poetry. l've formed these ideas by reading a lot of poetry and other subjects.However, my character plays an important role.
I talk about what l believe and feel. Don't get angry. You are really dear and very useful to me, but please don't misunderstand me. I have my own ideas about what is good poetry. l've formed these ideas by reading a lot of poetry and other subjects.However, my character plays an important role.
Re: Re. ONE, TO NO END
This is a dodge of my questions -- which is a pretty sure indication that you have no answers for them, otherwise you would have produced them.
And if reading lots of poetry is the guarantee that one's ideas about poetry are valid, then I am just as qualified as you, if not more so, to say and be correct about how bad and lacking in charm your writings are and how good mine are.
In any case, the matter at hand isn't whether you write about what you think and feel. It's whether you write in such a way about what you think and feel that makes readers of your "work" experience what you talk about -- and without having to fill in gaps when you only imply things and correct your syntax and grammar in order to understand what you are intent to convey.
And if reading lots of poetry is the guarantee that one's ideas about poetry are valid, then I am just as qualified as you, if not more so, to say and be correct about how bad and lacking in charm your writings are and how good mine are.
In any case, the matter at hand isn't whether you write about what you think and feel. It's whether you write in such a way about what you think and feel that makes readers of your "work" experience what you talk about -- and without having to fill in gaps when you only imply things and correct your syntax and grammar in order to understand what you are intent to convey.
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Re. ONE, TO NO END
27th Oct 2019 4:31pm
Dear Baldwin,
Who told you that poetry is just understanding the idea? If it is as such, you can write prose exactly as you do, but you write it two or three words in a line, pretending this is the sophisticated rhythm of modern poetry, which avoids monotony, as you pretend. Poetry should have the mind spellbinding idea, and the beautiful cadence, which your writings lack. Sorry for disappointing you, but you have no sense of what poetry should be. This is what l've got from the two or three poems you've written in answer to my poetry.
Who told you that poetry is just understanding the idea? If it is as such, you can write prose exactly as you do, but you write it two or three words in a line, pretending this is the sophisticated rhythm of modern poetry, which avoids monotony, as you pretend. Poetry should have the mind spellbinding idea, and the beautiful cadence, which your writings lack. Sorry for disappointing you, but you have no sense of what poetry should be. This is what l've got from the two or three poems you've written in answer to my poetry.
Re. ONE, TO NO END
27th Oct 2019 5:37pm
Where did I say that poetry is just understanding "the (?) idea" (of what, BTW?). If you are claiming that I did, then you are resorting (once again) to the underhanded tactic of putting words in my mouth so that you can score a rhetorical point.
I wonder if you will tell me what your definition of beautiful cadence is and then defend your claim that a writing has to have more than two or three words in its lines to possess a "beautiful" cadence and not be monotonous.
My money is that you can't do this. But I'd be happy to see you prove me wrong.
I wonder if you will tell me what your definition of beautiful cadence is and then defend your claim that a writing has to have more than two or three words in its lines to possess a "beautiful" cadence and not be monotonous.
My money is that you can't do this. But I'd be happy to see you prove me wrong.
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