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Vanishing
( a Sonnet )
A life, with its veneer of tears and pain
That shimmer from a season’s sun and rain,
No vicar with a St. James Bible verse
Will honor you a free ride in a hearse.
When by volition taking of one’s breath,
Thus causes bringing on of one’s own death.
The vantage point of this is fading fast
From cultures tightly clinging to the past.
A vacancy that’s vying to be filled,
A burial for every one that’s spilled,
Will come to pass with every desperate vow,
For nothing’s vulgar in the ways of how.
The vignette view’d by some that ‘spare the rod’,
And those who patient wait to be with God.
A life, with its veneer of tears and pain
That shimmer from a season’s sun and rain,
No vicar with a St. James Bible verse
Will honor you a free ride in a hearse.
When by volition taking of one’s breath,
Thus causes bringing on of one’s own death.
The vantage point of this is fading fast
From cultures tightly clinging to the past.
A vacancy that’s vying to be filled,
A burial for every one that’s spilled,
Will come to pass with every desperate vow,
For nothing’s vulgar in the ways of how.
The vignette view’d by some that ‘spare the rod’,
And those who patient wait to be with God.
Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 29th Sep 2019
| Edited 30th Sep 2019
Author's Note
For the letter “V”.
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Re: Re. Vanishing
29th Sep 2019 8:33pm
Re. Vanishing
29th Sep 2019 4:04pm
Re: Re. Vanishing
29th Sep 2019 8:43pm
Thanks very much, Robert, your visit, the read, and your words are greatly appreciated. With my best.
Re. Vanishing
29th Sep 2019 4:17pm
Re: Re. Vanishing
29th Sep 2019 8:29pm
Well yes... thanks Joe, that’s something I’ve always been aware of. But what are you saying about the actual poem, you kinda lost me. Sorry.
Re: Re. Vanishing
29th Sep 2019 9:02pm
That was the first impression that came to mind. Your a poet of form, structure, and letter, better than I.
May I safely say, I liked your composition (and hope my auto-correct behaves)?
May I safely say, I liked your composition (and hope my auto-correct behaves)?
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Re: Re. Vanishing
29th Sep 2019 9:18pm
*kinda bashful smile*
Aaw thanks, Joe, I’m connected now.
I’m grateful for #1: you like my effort, and #2: your auto-correct was a perfect gentleman.
Be well✍🏻
Aaw thanks, Joe, I’m connected now.
I’m grateful for #1: you like my effort, and #2: your auto-correct was a perfect gentleman.
Be well✍🏻
Re. Vanishing
29th Sep 2019 5:24pm
Re: Re. Vanishing
29th Sep 2019 6:50pm
Re: Re. Vanishing
Hey!
Andy, thank you for this... and recent honors you’ve given to a few other titles of mine.
How have you been?
Andy, thank you for this... and recent honors you’ve given to a few other titles of mine.
How have you been?
Re. Vanishing
Closing 2 lines of stanza 1. No vicar with a St. James Bible verse
Will honor you a free ride in a hearse. Wow. Straight up. (or toes up, as it were lol). For nothing's vulgar in the ways of how. I normally find grabbing and repeating lines trite, kind of like, let me pretend I really delved into this, but each of those just hammered a nail into my truth. Wanted to repeat to solidify that. Tight work, end to end.
Will honor you a free ride in a hearse. Wow. Straight up. (or toes up, as it were lol). For nothing's vulgar in the ways of how. I normally find grabbing and repeating lines trite, kind of like, let me pretend I really delved into this, but each of those just hammered a nail into my truth. Wanted to repeat to solidify that. Tight work, end to end.
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Re: Re. Vanishing
30th Sep 2019 1:46am
Thank you, Daniel, and no fear. I’ve never had a sensation run up & down my spine as a forewarning of faux delving by the fire element.🔥
But I do love your description of how parts of this piece crucified your truth - nailed it!🤜🏻🤛🏻
But I do love your description of how parts of this piece crucified your truth - nailed it!🤜🏻🤛🏻
Re. Vanishing
6th Oct 2019 12:10pm
Dear Jade this is so touching and thought provoking. Thank you for having shared this with your reader(s).
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Re: Re. Vanishing
6th Oct 2019 3:14pm
Why thank you, Kathy, the honor is all mine. Thank you for the read as well.🙏🏻
Re. Vanishing
13th Oct 2019 7:49am
I don't know how you use the words so precisely. But, it's absolutely brilliant.
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Re: Re. Vanishing
2nd Nov 2019 10:27pm
Oh my friend, I didn’t catch your words till now, my apologies.
I’m moved how you’ve expressed the way my piece has touched you. I’m honored, and grateful.
I hope you’re doing well.
I’m moved how you’ve expressed the way my piece has touched you. I’m honored, and grateful.
I hope you’re doing well.