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Heart Says ..No?
I entered this is a forum post it was about how you went against what your heart told you when it clearly said no. But I changed it around a bit, enjoy :)
Heart says..
"I feel you yearn for his desire"
Heart says..
"I feel you burn internally with fire"
Listen to the beat--- irregular
The deaf hears it best--- inaudible
Love sometimes flows like river ---unattainable
Pump the blood ---irresistible
Heart says..
"Forget the formalities!"
Heart says..
"Dive in for the thrill!"
Emotions indecisive; bipolar spectrum
Intricacies of the mind; [i]imperfect[i] soul
My Heart said "Yes!"
To the fatal mistake that was you.
Heart says..
"I feel you yearn for his desire"
Heart says..
"I feel you burn internally with fire"
Listen to the beat--- irregular
The deaf hears it best--- inaudible
Love sometimes flows like river ---unattainable
Pump the blood ---irresistible
Heart says..
"Forget the formalities!"
Heart says..
"Dive in for the thrill!"
Emotions indecisive; bipolar spectrum
Intricacies of the mind; [i]imperfect[i] soul
My Heart said "Yes!"
To the fatal mistake that was you.
Published 15th Dec 2011
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15th Dec 2011 6:40pm
Great work the ending left me breathless and your
words always provide great imagery
I see you changed it so the heart was wrong i would have entered if it was this way (because i haven't experienced when it was right,)
words always provide great imagery
I see you changed it so the heart was wrong i would have entered if it was this way (because i haven't experienced when it was right,)
15th Dec 2011 7:31pm
Im not really a fan of the forums to be honest. Esp on 'chat' forums which are endless and sometimes repetitive every now and then i randomly decide to post. Usually its a free write where i just come up with somn and post it then i re-read and decided that things sound better else where. shrugs
♪you leave me breathless♪ hahah :) great stuff
Tyty for your comment
♪you leave me breathless♪ hahah :) great stuff
Tyty for your comment
Anonymous
15th Dec 2011 10:47pm
loved that - brilliant write - yes the heart sometimes jumps with that so what feeling - only to grrrrrrrrrrrrrr later - he he - nice poem - ^v^
16th Dec 2011 3:22pm
Im a stickler for memorable last lines -- i try :)
lol@"grrr". TY much for your comment. [Rubix]
lol@"grrr". TY much for your comment. [Rubix]
