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Shame
you can kiss my vulgarity
I'm about to get cruel on you
shadowed shame I have none
all know me I'm just Brenda
not pretending to be anyone else
Raven is an extra on the Crimsin show
she picks up the slack when Crim is feeling crazy
I've been here since 2011
I've never bothered anyone in pm
if you come at me all flirty like
you know I'll ignore you right?
I'm here to write...
this may be a pickup zone for some
it pisses me off but to each their own
if you got catfished I can't help but laugh
this isn't kindergarten what the hell did you expect?
true love on the internet?
attention seeking hos I'm embarrassed for you all
I see pictures featuring body parts
is this really how you want to represent yourself?
this is a warning you should heed
don't try and pick up here if you're looking for true love
this place is sacred...to express art
to some, it's just a place to get off
honestly, I feel sorry for you
Author's Note
fuck...
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Anonymous
- Edited 8th May 2020 8:45pm
24th Jun 2019 4:27pm
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Re: Re. Shame
24th Jun 2019 4:29pm
thank you beautiful poetess I love your response you made me smile...
love Brenda ❤
love Brenda ❤
Re. Shame
24th Jun 2019 6:41pm
Woahh wow way to go, you said what I felt but never dared say. I'm thrilled to know there are women like you in the Western world who think more of their dignity than revealing body parts to all random strangers. You express in a powerful impressive way indeed. So men are flirting you eh.!! They do it to me on other sites but here gladly ironically despite it being the most erotica featuring site I find the men are pretty well behaved, I mean with me. So your advising men and women to just write poetry and not flirt for pick ups is a sound beneficial advice that you give poetically. Kudos!!
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24th Jun 2019 6:48pm
thank you beautiful poetess for the very thoughtful comment on this write... I understand getting erotically creative with another writer but I think that should be the focus writing...
I deeply appreciate your insight...
love Brenda
I deeply appreciate your insight...
love Brenda
Re. Shame
24th Jun 2019 7:20pm
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24th Jun 2019 7:42pm
Anonymous
- Edited 4th Jun 2022 2:45am
25th Jun 2019 2:46am
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25th Jun 2019 7:18pm
thank you graciously dearest Ethan it's been bothering me for awhile I understand developing connections with people while you're creating together etc. but coming here sole purpose of picking up gets on my nerves...
your response to this poem gifted me smiles...
love Brenda 💕
your response to this poem gifted me smiles...
love Brenda 💕
Anonymous
- Edited 4th Jun 2022 2:45am
25th Jun 2019 9:23pm
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Re. Shame
25th Jun 2019 4:09am
A spill packed with bitter truths. This site is not meant to be other than it is. That's why one can use a different name here. I agree with all you said here.
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25th Jun 2019 7:21pm
thank you graciously beautiful Summer I agree I have an alternate account and it say I'm crim also on my profile for Raven I used them for creative reasons people who use them to trick people is wrong but then again you shouldn't be shopping around on the internet for the love of your life this is a poetry website...
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda 🌹
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda 🌹
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Anonymous
27th Jun 2019 1:53pm
This is why I interact very little outside the comments box. I'm here for poetry. That I've managed to make a few strong connections is an unintentional gift. I hear what you're saying here. Stay in your lane and don't look for faerie tale endings on the internet. If the happily ever after finds you, consider yourself blessed. Go get 'em, girl! I love you...
...ever your Willow
...ever your Willow
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2nd Jul 2019 2:23pm
thank you beautiful Willow forgive my tardy response... I know you're all about the poetry and so damned beautiful a writer you are...I love your insight on this write...someone just irked me with their poem about being taken on the internet which is sad but can be expected...
I miss you on my pages please don't think I don't appreciate you I just get behind here in responses...
I love you...
love Brenda 🌹💕🌹
I miss you on my pages please don't think I don't appreciate you I just get behind here in responses...
I love you...
love Brenda 🌹💕🌹
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Anonymous
3rd Jul 2019 4:39am
Dear Brenda, Your verse never seems to "run out of wicked", does it? :-) It's all effective thought...so your readers can empathize... I've seen some work too hard at expressing (I'm guilty of it myself)...you seem to be consistent in your discipline...the continuity shows. Good piece!
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3rd Jul 2019 11:57am
thank you dearest Skeets you've picked up on my dark side I actually try to suppress it but it seems to emerge in my writing from time to time... your comment made me smile I try to write every day if I can I'm happy it's not for naught...
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda ❤
I deeply appreciate your thoughts...
love Brenda ❤
Re. Shame
6th Jul 2019 11:24pm
Wow never has a truer words ever been said, if there are that kind of people on here then Fuck off you don't deserve the time or the beautiful minds of the true people on here.
I love this because it says what should be said no holds barred beautiful.
I love this because it says what should be said no holds barred beautiful.
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6th Jul 2019 11:30pm
thank you dearest poet for the love here in retrospect I was a little harsh I've had plenty of poetry crushes meaning crushing on the way someone writes... it will happen to you to... it's the nature of things to touch a soul you get no closer than we do here...I guess I was a little frustrated with someone this day and this came out...
p.s Raven is my other screen name smackdownraven I know the name is scary it was chosen for me by another poet who thought it represented well my writing style at that time...I'm not really that scary lol...
love Brenda 🌹
p.s Raven is my other screen name smackdownraven I know the name is scary it was chosen for me by another poet who thought it represented well my writing style at that time...I'm not really that scary lol...
love Brenda 🌹