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Inside Me
I didn’t dare to look into their eyes,
The way they hovered over me,
He tried to be as gentle as much as he could,
And she,
Well she was there mostly to watch.
At times I closed my eyes,
Nervous,
Full of anticipation,
Knowing it was going to hurt just a little,
I’ve felt pricks before
But sometimes some hurt more than others.
I opened my eyes,
His fingers were inside me,
Digging,
Prodding,
Poking,
Sliding inside and out,
I kept my cool as his tool went deep.
I flinched giving the slightest of groans,
He paused for a second and asked if I was ok,
But I nodded approvingly.
Then I felt her,
She was over me,
Her fingers were inside along with his,
Working as a team,
I didn’t want to look into her eyes,
She was close as she stared,
I laid there with my mouth open,
Frozen,
At times I could feel myself tense up,
Tightening,
Taut,
But then I heard him say
“Relax your tongue”.
It was a couple of hours later,
As I laid in my bed,
Hurting and sore,
I reflected on what happened
Earlier that afternoon,
When I told my wife
About my dentist experience.
The way they hovered over me,
He tried to be as gentle as much as he could,
And she,
Well she was there mostly to watch.
At times I closed my eyes,
Nervous,
Full of anticipation,
Knowing it was going to hurt just a little,
I’ve felt pricks before
But sometimes some hurt more than others.
I opened my eyes,
His fingers were inside me,
Digging,
Prodding,
Poking,
Sliding inside and out,
I kept my cool as his tool went deep.
I flinched giving the slightest of groans,
He paused for a second and asked if I was ok,
But I nodded approvingly.
Then I felt her,
She was over me,
Her fingers were inside along with his,
Working as a team,
I didn’t want to look into her eyes,
She was close as she stared,
I laid there with my mouth open,
Frozen,
At times I could feel myself tense up,
Tightening,
Taut,
But then I heard him say
“Relax your tongue”.
It was a couple of hours later,
As I laid in my bed,
Hurting and sore,
I reflected on what happened
Earlier that afternoon,
When I told my wife
About my dentist experience.
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Re. Inside Me
27th Apr 2019 7:16pm
Oh... the suspense of this made my heart beat fast, and I was relieved when I read the last 2 lines !
An awesome write, that could’ve easily went in all directions; even in the gutter where my mind oft hurls itself into.
An awesome write, that could’ve easily went in all directions; even in the gutter where my mind oft hurls itself into.
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Re: Re. Inside Me
28th Apr 2019 7:14pm
Re. Inside Me
27th Apr 2019 8:44pm
Wasn't sure at first where this was heading - like shadow_starzzz I was kinda relieved ayt the end. Dentist for me a week on Monday. Root canal treatment waits me; ah well.
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Re: Re. Inside Me
28th Apr 2019 7:48pm
Just had a root canal myself, so good luck with that. Just don't make eye contact, it's a bit odd.
Re. Inside Me
27th Apr 2019 9:40pm
Re. Inside Me
8th Jan 2022 2:11am
oh gosh Wally I thought you were coming out as bi and that would be fine with me oh my goodness your mind is so clever...this was really great....
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Re: Re. Inside Me
12th Jan 2022 6:26pm
Well, I've always been buy curious when it comes to buying the premises of a story or poem. So when I write, I like to take readers there, and then open the curtain at the very end.
Re. Inside Me
8th Jan 2022 2:20am
Hee hee hee.... I do love a spill full of amazingly crafted sexual innuendo!! This really cracked me up 😂 😂 while making my pulse race, Walter!
Absolutely stellar creativity!!
I'm so glad you bumped this one and I was able to get a chance to read it.
🌹 - 💙
B
Absolutely stellar creativity!!
I'm so glad you bumped this one and I was able to get a chance to read it.
🌹 - 💙
B
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Re: Re. Inside Me
12th Jan 2022 6:31pm
I had just taken my teenage boys to their dentist appointments which reminded me of this little ditty. Either way, that's the only time when another person (other than my wife) is that close to me.
If in the near future I have a proctology exam, expect a hilarious verse.
If in the near future I have a proctology exam, expect a hilarious verse.
Re. Inside Me
8th Jan 2022 5:13am
Re: Re. Inside Me
12th Jan 2022 6:31pm
Thanks Aaliyah. Yes, twist endings (especially with surprising laughter) are what I aim for.
Hope all is well.
Hope all is well.