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I Wish I Could
I wish I could eat my own words,
As if they’re truffles from the root.
The bonbons I pluck quickly blur,
Ambrosia I savor en croute
When you’re gone & I’m here alone,
I wish I could eat my own words.
I’ve no appetite for a stone,
How everything tastes so absurd.
If things could be different unheard,
I’d have you myself on a plate.
I wish I could eat my own words,
I’m wasting away at this rate.
If I could just have my own way,
I’d come back for seconds & thirds.
Until, you’re due back any day,
I wish I could eat my own words.
NaPoGloPoWriMo 2019
As if they’re truffles from the root.
The bonbons I pluck quickly blur,
Ambrosia I savor en croute
When you’re gone & I’m here alone,
I wish I could eat my own words.
I’ve no appetite for a stone,
How everything tastes so absurd.
If things could be different unheard,
I’d have you myself on a plate.
I wish I could eat my own words,
I’m wasting away at this rate.
If I could just have my own way,
I’d come back for seconds & thirds.
Until, you’re due back any day,
I wish I could eat my own words.
NaPoGloPoWriMo 2019
Author's Note
Day Nine of Thirty
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tommy
•unique words: 66
tommy
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9th Apr 2019 10:04am
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9th Apr 2019 12:09pm
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9th Apr 2019 3:53pm
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9th Apr 2019 3:57pm
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9th Apr 2019 4:01pm
A second poet who agrees, thank you, Josh... Neruda inspired me greatly during the first half of my writing career. Neruda, Lorca, Basho & Issa, and Shakespeare!
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9th Apr 2019 4:48pm
Yes, I have been inspired by him many times as well. You can probably tell :)
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9th Apr 2019 12:51pm
This quatern is another feather, Jade, as you grow wings to fly.
blessings,
Kathy
blessings,
Kathy
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9th Apr 2019 6:02pm
Ah Kathy, I’m replying out of chronological order while I was considering what I’d say to this, it’s so lovely! And perhaps this is my response after all. Thank you.➰
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10th Apr 2019 6:47pm
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9th Apr 2019 3:02pm
I felt this laced with an abundance of " tongue in cheek " humor (i am not sure i am conveying the right type of humor but i do read humor)
and a wispy poignant wonderful feel
even if i am unable to explain i feel this and it;s Beautiful and i liked it
and a wispy poignant wonderful feel
even if i am unable to explain i feel this and it;s Beautiful and i liked it
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9th Apr 2019 3:54pm
Thank you humbly, my T friend... you do in fact correctly interpret the humor imposed, with tongue in cheek and all.☝️🐯
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9th Apr 2019 4:01pm
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9th Apr 2019 6:12pm
And this from the woman who pens Rockhollow, my gosh, Poppy... I’ve come to adore that series for all of its depth, emotion... and beautifully detailed horticulture. And that’s why your comment knocks me for a loop. And I thank you.🙏🏻
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9th Apr 2019 4:44pm
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9th Apr 2019 5:19pm
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9th Apr 2019 11:39pm
Save some of those words for me. I always love your writes and Ninja, curled here by my side, adores them too when I read them aloud.
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10th Apr 2019 1:01am
Oohh my dear dear friend, what you’ve said is so lovely - I’m getting emotional - you and dear devoted Ninja, you’re both quite special to me. And I hope we’ll be able to have a chat soon. I’ll call you. x
Love to you both,
Jadey🐾
Love to you both,
Jadey🐾
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10th Apr 2019 1:34am
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10th Apr 2019 11:06pm
I concur with Tallen. I felt it had a whimsical quality, but also struck me with a sense of longing.
Daniel
Daniel
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11th Apr 2019 5:44am
Thank you most graciously, Daniel... and yes, most definitely a longing. The whimsical is actually the secondary emotion. You know, when you’re trying to show yourself the longing isn’t so bad, but it is.
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14th Apr 2019 3:38am
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11th Apr 2019 6:23am
I love the flow of your words - struggled to find the rhythm a little in the first stanza but the rhythm is there catchy and quirky.
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14th Apr 2019 5:35am