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Mind Thief
It was in my failings that I found my peace
that's what I keep telling myself to put my thoughts at ease
as I effectively efface them with another round of stout
sorrow you are a mind thief
listless in a quest for common ground
I've heard the whispers in every hurtful sound
but the tone, that tone
it was deafening
and I tuned you out
I turned you out
but why is it me who wallows
when you have done the wrong
barkeep, another round
in solitude I hold hands with the silence
soon there'll be no sound
that's what I keep telling myself to put my thoughts at ease
as I effectively efface them with another round of stout
sorrow you are a mind thief
listless in a quest for common ground
I've heard the whispers in every hurtful sound
but the tone, that tone
it was deafening
and I tuned you out
I turned you out
but why is it me who wallows
when you have done the wrong
barkeep, another round
in solitude I hold hands with the silence
soon there'll be no sound
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Re. Mind Thief
4th Apr 2019 11:24am
Tim....I had to take a minute on this one! It struck a nerve and resonates down deep! This is the week from hell for me!! As it is every year!
"A poet's words incite emotion undecided by his pen
perhaps a tear, a scream
a laugh or naught even a grin"
That is way better than purple giraffes mating huh?
Minxy loves your ink Tim❣
"A poet's words incite emotion undecided by his pen
perhaps a tear, a scream
a laugh or naught even a grin"
That is way better than purple giraffes mating huh?
Minxy loves your ink Tim❣
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4th Apr 2019 2:25pm
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4th Apr 2019 12:34pm
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Anonymous
4th Apr 2019 1:51pm
maaaaaaaaaan
do i feel you
amazing where april leads
do i feel you
amazing where april leads
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4th Apr 2019 2:35pm
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Anonymous
4th Apr 2019 1:55pm
Sometimes we have no better company than the silence...
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Re. Mind Thief
4th Apr 2019 5:50pm
That's a great question, Tim. I think we feel disappointment in having believed in someone. Perhaps we wallow more for them than ourselves. Solid poem.
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4th Apr 2019 6:03pm
Thanks A, I think you're on to something there. That's how I felt after parting with the ex wife.
Re. Mind Thief
4th Apr 2019 6:16pm
"another round of stout"
It's a bit of a random connection, and in a differing relationship context, but the phrase reminded me of the Irish poet Paul Durcan's poem "My beloved compares herself to a pint of stout"
It's a bit of a random connection, and in a differing relationship context, but the phrase reminded me of the Irish poet Paul Durcan's poem "My beloved compares herself to a pint of stout"
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4th Apr 2019 6:26pm
Re. Mind Thief
4th Apr 2019 6:35pm
Another great write, this one's going to stick in my memory for a long while
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4th Apr 2019 6:50pm
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4th Apr 2019 9:22pm
I seek solace in alcohol myself, possibly too much of the demon vodka. Great work, JusTim. Love your new pic, by the way.
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5th Apr 2019 3:37pm
Thank you Crowfly,I'm going back at it in an hour but hope to settle this weekend
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Anonymous
4th Apr 2019 11:30pm
I found myself on a stool at the bar wishing you weren't thinking so loud while I was drinking. But that's only because you had me convinced that's where you were with this great story telling with its well choreographed repetitions.
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5th Apr 2019 3:38pm
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Anonymous
5th Apr 2019 2:37am
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5th Apr 2019 3:39pm