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Please Wait . . . Two Words Different Directions
thoughts struggle to move
I'm tangled, twisted and tied
with only tingles left inside
lightning goes off in the distance
I look up and sense all her might
swirls of white;
wisps across an ocean
there's no darkness to be seen
in a sky that's made of grey
I picture sunshine kissing
the dimple off your rosey cheek
as you gallop towards the sea
the view from here's magnificent
it's pure, it's beauty and it's free
I'm not alone
the world is also watching
desperately longing for you
a widow of peace
but a giver of life
hear these whispers
sung gently in the rain
please wait . . .
right there for me
I'm tangled, twisted and tied
with only tingles left inside
lightning goes off in the distance
I look up and sense all her might
swirls of white;
wisps across an ocean
there's no darkness to be seen
in a sky that's made of grey
I picture sunshine kissing
the dimple off your rosey cheek
as you gallop towards the sea
the view from here's magnificent
it's pure, it's beauty and it's free
I'm not alone
the world is also watching
desperately longing for you
a widow of peace
but a giver of life
hear these whispers
sung gently in the rain
please wait . . .
right there for me
Published 3rd Apr 2019
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3rd Apr 2019 3:45pm
3rd Apr 2019 3:47pm
Thanks DF, I had please wait in my mind this morning and didn't know which direction my muse wanted to take it so I decided to write both.
3rd Apr 2019 3:48pm
Love it when that happens ... the poem urging you to write ... poetic magic ...
3rd Apr 2019 3:52pm
3rd Apr 2019 3:56pm
Anonymous
3rd Apr 2019 3:57pm
Wow...
3rd Apr 2019 3:58pm
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3rd Apr 2019 6:03pm
ahhhh, id buy your book of poetry Tim. I'd give it to the hubby and tell him to read it aloud, lmao!
3rd Apr 2019 6:12pm
3rd Apr 2019 6:22pm
Nah, his talents lie elsewhere, lol. A poem from my Beloved would go something like this...
Rose's are red, violets are blue
I'm ready for bed now how about you
What's for dinner? Where's the kids?
Wanna play Call of Duty, or go Shooting at the Range
I love you so much! Please never change!
And that's with my additions and editing, lol!
Rose's are red, violets are blue
I'm ready for bed now how about you
What's for dinner? Where's the kids?
Wanna play Call of Duty, or go Shooting at the Range
I love you so much! Please never change!
And that's with my additions and editing, lol!
Anonymous
3rd Apr 2019 7:03pm
christ on a crutch,
this is beautifully wrought
this is beautifully wrought
3rd Apr 2019 7:06pm
3rd Apr 2019 9:06pm
Fine work, JusTim. My favorite lines:
I'm not alone
the world is also watching
desperately longing for you
a widow of peace
but a giver of life
Sigh... "a giver of life." I'd say that may apply to you as well, judging by your work.
I'm not alone
the world is also watching
desperately longing for you
a widow of peace
but a giver of life
Sigh... "a giver of life." I'd say that may apply to you as well, judging by your work.
3rd Apr 2019 9:09pm
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4th Apr 2019 2:28am
