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Lost Man's Dream
I lay back and hear the stream
Then sink into a lost man's dream
My demons guide me down to Hell
Another wayward soul to sell
But I waken to the stellar light
A certain glint, despite the night
Yet I am not thus truly blessed
This soul tainted, so far from rest
Much sanity is left behind
My face frozen, but deeply lined
Yet I still hear the water's flow
And long for peace, that inmost glow.
Then sink into a lost man's dream
My demons guide me down to Hell
Another wayward soul to sell
But I waken to the stellar light
A certain glint, despite the night
Yet I am not thus truly blessed
This soul tainted, so far from rest
Much sanity is left behind
My face frozen, but deeply lined
Yet I still hear the water's flow
And long for peace, that inmost glow.
Published 16th Mar 2019
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Anonymous
16th Mar 2019 11:40pm
The rhyming scheme ...
it draws you in.
(good to read you once more)
16th Mar 2019 11:54pm
Anonymous
17th Mar 2019 00:00am
Yup, anytime ... ;)
Anonymous
16th Mar 2019 11:43pm
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16th Mar 2019 11:56pm
I hope that somehow I can achieve the serenity hoped for here. It's elusive so far. Thank you Sky_dancer!
17th Mar 2019 00:13am
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18th Mar 2019 00:13am
17th Mar 2019 00:25am
I just got home found that my laptop and cellphone were stolen, I haven't eaten nor slept
This is just the poem I needed
Good write
This is just the poem I needed
Good write
17th Mar 2019 00:54am
17th Mar 2019 10:56pm
That must be a genuine trauma, poetOftragedy. So glad this write helped. I hope the thieves will be snapped up by the law, and your laptop and cell recovered.
17th Mar 2019 00:32am
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17th Mar 2019 1:00am
This gives me the sense of small moments of peace that never last.... and the melancholy that ensues. I can relate to this feeling.... constantly graspng for something better but never quite being able to hold onto it....
Wishng you much peace that lasts. Sad but lovely write.
Wishng you much peace that lasts. Sad but lovely write.
17th Mar 2019 10:59pm
Thank you for the thoughtful comment, brokentitanium. I wish the same lasting peace to you.
17th Mar 2019 1:19am
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17th Mar 2019 1:56am
Bravo Sir Crow! This beautifully composed piece is evidence of your "inner glow,"
17th Mar 2019 11:02pm
Anonymous
17th Mar 2019 5:37am
Deeply emotive! Love the rhyming...oh, lordy I just love your words, Crowfly.
17th Mar 2019 11:04pm
Glad you enjoyed the rhyming, Liah. It's not to everyone's' taste, but I simply can't resist. Thank you!
17th Mar 2019 2:58pm
This is so good crowfly! I absolutely love this👏
"I lay back and hear the stream
Then sink into a lost man's dream
My demons guide me down to Hell
Another wayward soul to sell"
Wow! Just phenomenal
Love your poetry!
"I lay back and hear the stream
Then sink into a lost man's dream
My demons guide me down to Hell
Another wayward soul to sell"
Wow! Just phenomenal
Love your poetry!
17th Mar 2019 11:06pm
17th Mar 2019 8:07pm
Wow ... I am in awe of your rhyming ... how do you do that ... wonderful crowfly ...
17th Mar 2019 11:09pm
I grew up listening to pop and rock tunes with lyrics that usually rhymed. Somehow it stuck. Now I can't seem to shake it. Thank you LilDragonFly!
Anonymous
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17th Mar 2019 8:22pm
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17th Mar 2019 11:12pm
Thank you The Renaissance. If this provided you with serenity, even for a few moments, I'm pleased.
29th May 2019 9:47am
So peaceful and stunning, this piece! I am loving the rhyme scheme… So light on its feet.
Seriously well done!
Delanee.
Seriously well done!
Delanee.
