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Limitless
Take me anywhere
beyond where the known
is etched in our hearts
I want to feel the oncoming adventure
deep inside my veins
and blow a kiss goodbye
to the world that was
Don't you know tomorrow
is weightless in its endless wonder
don't let yesterday hold us down
in mirror image retribution
let's smash the glass
of what we'd become
if we stayed on this platform
waiting for better
If they say life is what we make it
I'd rather live it with you drifting among the stars
than with my feet pinned to the ground
in dreamless solidarity
So take me anywhere
beyond where the known
is etched in our hearts
I want to feel the oncoming adventure
deep inside my veins
on the 8:20 train to anywhere but here
Take me anywhere
beyond where the known
is etched in our hearts
I want to feel the oncoming adventure
deep inside my veins
and blow a kiss goodbye
to the world that was
Don't you know tomorrow
is weightless in its endless wonder
don't let yesterday hold us down
in mirror image retribution
let's smash the glass
of what we'd become
if we stayed on this platform
waiting for better
If they say life is what we make it
I'd rather live it with you drifting among the stars
than with my feet pinned to the ground
in dreamless solidarity
So take me anywhere
beyond where the known
is etched in our hearts
I want to feel the oncoming adventure
deep inside my veins
on the 8:20 train to anywhere but here
Published 23rd Jan 2019
Author's Note
Written for the "A picture is worth 1000 words #5 competition"
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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23rd Jan 2019 8:52am
23rd Jan 2019 10:51am
This sounds like that repeating coordinate on a sin wave... up and down while moving forward, unable to stay, hoping for the best, and then....again... another roll....yet, instead of its being some one off, it's a pattern....a vision quest...
23rd Jan 2019 3:46pm
Great poem, Miss Indie. The fourth stanza was particularly my favorite.
Thanks for participating in my competition!
Thanks for participating in my competition!
24th Jan 2019 10:41pm
This is fantastic. it's the "edging" to the literary and poetry world feeling lol. strong vocabulary, no boring parts that lagged at all, and there's a good emotional urge that presses the reader forward. if this was the Sunday paper you could put it to bed. this is the spirit of adventure in the form on an oncoming train and i wanted to feel every part of it rolling over me. if my reading list was not full I would add this. keep up the good work on bridging the frontier of feeling and dreamers because this world is always in short supply.
12th Feb 2019 1:35am
