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nothing more
the melody in your breath held me spellbound
you sang to me about tomorrows with rainbows in your eyes
I shyly looked away
I feared the razor in my smile would cut you
pessimistic clouds loomed overhead
they'd shadowed me since birth
dreams dared to envision were on the horizon
I just had to walk into the sun
all my demons protested
they argued we will be seen
bottled and brewed courage was one thing
sobriety saw me frightened in the light of truth
thoughts rain inside
of not good enough
and if they only knew
spotlighted and highlighted sin spoke
I never lied
I stood proud in my truth
naked in it
I took a step onto the stage of life
a schizophrenic with the need to write
nothing more
who has stepped to the brink
looked out at the masses
with thoughts of why not me?
Author's Note
I have hopes of being published I both embrace and fear it...
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17th Dec 2018 7:14pm
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Re: Re. nothing more
17th Dec 2018 7:16pm
thank you dearest Bender if it's in the cards it will play out that way...if not I will continue to do what I love...
love Brenda π
love Brenda π
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- Edited 30th May 2019 2:51pm
17th Dec 2018 7:21pm
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Re. nothing more
17th Dec 2018 7:25pm
Fantastic write, Brenda. My favorite lines:
spotlighted and highlighted sin spoke
I never lied
I stood proud in my truth
naked in it
I took a step onto the stage of life
This inspires me to overcome my stage fright. Or try to. You stand proud in your truth and compose wonderful lines.
spotlighted and highlighted sin spoke
I never lied
I stood proud in my truth
naked in it
I took a step onto the stage of life
This inspires me to overcome my stage fright. Or try to. You stand proud in your truth and compose wonderful lines.
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Re: Re. nothing more
thank you graciously dearest Sir Crow I really like those lines too...though I am more perhaps naked and shaky lol...
I deeply appreciate you my friend...
love Brenda π
I deeply appreciate you my friend...
love Brenda π
Re. nothing more
17th Dec 2018 7:28pm
"thoughts rain inside
of not good enough"
... that eternal lie we all have to face.
"looked out at the masses
with thoughts of why not me?"
... I guess action leads to hope as well as hope leads to action. Time to upgrade yourself. :))
of not good enough"
... that eternal lie we all have to face.
"looked out at the masses
with thoughts of why not me?"
... I guess action leads to hope as well as hope leads to action. Time to upgrade yourself. :))
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Re: Re. nothing more
18th Dec 2018 1:53pm
thank you dearest Josh for your thoughts on this write... yes I can't lie I hope to be published someday though I fear it too...
love Brenda π
love Brenda π
Re. nothing more
Anonymous
17th Dec 2018 9:43pm
Crimmy,
Another beautiful bouquet of words. You're a flower in the desert, young lady, sunshine in the darkness, and you should be published, and we're honored to have you here.
Love,
Matthew.
Another beautiful bouquet of words. You're a flower in the desert, young lady, sunshine in the darkness, and you should be published, and we're honored to have you here.
Love,
Matthew.

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Re: Re. nothing more
18th Dec 2018 1:54pm
thank you graciously dearest Matthew beautiful soul...for such a loving comment... if it is meant to be I will be published someday...
love Brenda π
love Brenda π
Re. nothing more
17th Dec 2018 11:04pm
Victory through vulnerability.....our excesses are used by others to try to bury us....but, we stand on them....we stand on the bones of our previous attempts at being ourselves. Spot on.
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Re: Re. nothing more
18th Dec 2018 1:54pm
thank you graciously dearest RT for such a beautifully insightful comment...
love Brenda πΉ
love Brenda πΉ
Re. nothing more
18th Dec 2018 2:09am
Excellent piece Brenda so so goodππ
"bottled and brewed courage was one thing
sobriety saw me frightened in the light of truth" thats deep and relatable
"thoughts rain inside
of not good enough" i really felt this deeply
Great piece Brendaππ
"bottled and brewed courage was one thing
sobriety saw me frightened in the light of truth" thats deep and relatable
"thoughts rain inside
of not good enough" i really felt this deeply
Great piece Brendaππ
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Re: Re. nothing more
18th Dec 2018 1:56pm
thank you graciously dearest Hunter for feeling and understanding this write so deeply...
love Brenda β€
love Brenda β€
Re. nothing more
9th Feb 2019 9:34pm
Coming out of the darkness and into the light is a very empowering thing. It all starts with that first step.
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