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The Closer I Get To The Sun
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The closer I get to the sun,
Perfection isn’t meant for me.
I know this as I breathless run
The marathon of Life to be.
So much I haven’t seen or found,
The closer I get to the sun.
As hands of Time are slowing down,
The hands of God are never done.
In seconds left before there’s none,
I’ll be like specks of Saturn rings.
The closer I get to the sun,
Will be a cosmos beckoning.
The solar winds will ever blow.
Together, melt, become as one
When death is drifting in like snow,
The closer I get to the sun.
Image: NASA public domain stock.
The closer I get to the sun,
Perfection isn’t meant for me.
I know this as I breathless run
The marathon of Life to be.
So much I haven’t seen or found,
The closer I get to the sun.
As hands of Time are slowing down,
The hands of God are never done.
In seconds left before there’s none,
I’ll be like specks of Saturn rings.
The closer I get to the sun,
Will be a cosmos beckoning.
The solar winds will ever blow.
Together, melt, become as one
When death is drifting in like snow,
The closer I get to the sun.
Image: NASA public domain stock.
Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 13th Dec 2018
Author's Note
A life cut too short due to type 2 diabetes (which doesn’t define one if you still manage to hold on to a passion that does).
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Re. The Closer I Get To The Sun
13th Dec 2018 11:37pm
Awesome quatern! Beautiful piece
"So much I haven’t seen or found,
The closer I get to the sun.
As hands of Time are slowing down,
The hands of God are never done." Excellent verse powerful words👏👏
Check out the quatern I recently wrote, also about the sun✌
"So much I haven’t seen or found,
The closer I get to the sun.
As hands of Time are slowing down,
The hands of God are never done." Excellent verse powerful words👏👏
Check out the quatern I recently wrote, also about the sun✌
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13th Dec 2018 11:47pm
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Re: Re. The Closer I Get To The Sun
14th Dec 2018 6:32pm
Re. The Closer I Get To The Sun
Anonymous
14th Dec 2018 00:23am
That's awesome, Jadey!
I love that! I love the sun, too. It's the most interesting thing.
Beautiful!
Matthew.
I love that! I love the sun, too. It's the most interesting thing.
Beautiful!
Matthew.
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Re: Re. The Closer I Get To The Sun
14th Dec 2018 6:36pm
Thank you very much, Matthew... I’ve loved everything to do with astronomy since before I could read.
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Anonymous
14th Dec 2018 8:01pm
Really?? Me, too! It's so damn interesting. Did you know, even though it's not closest to the sun, that Venus is the hottest surface planet because of it's thick, dense atmosphere that keeps the heat in? Pretty cool.
And the sun! Oh, man! 27 million degrees at the core! Can you imagine being in there? And every moment there are nuclear-type reactions going off inside it! It's just so cool.
I like that you're an astronomy person.
Matthew.
And the sun! Oh, man! 27 million degrees at the core! Can you imagine being in there? And every moment there are nuclear-type reactions going off inside it! It's just so cool.
I like that you're an astronomy person.
Matthew.
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Re: Re. The Closer I Get To The Sun
14th Dec 2018 9:15pm
Oh yes, I cut my teeth on children’s’ books on space, and now there’s been the Internet for years.., so much to keep the passion fired up like the sun.
Re. The Closer I Get To The Sun
14th Dec 2018 2:00am
Re: Re. The Closer I Get To The Sun
14th Dec 2018 6:44pm
Re. The Closer I Get To The Sun
What a perfect title for the difficult subject-matter covered; giving weight to the value of acceptance concerning the cycle of life.
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14th Dec 2018 6:49pm
Re. The Closer I Get To The Sun
14th Dec 2018 6:41pm
I like the weaving of solar and planetary based elements. But I ESPECIALLY enjoyed
When death is drifting in like snow,
The closer I get to the sun.
because of the seemingly contradictory nature of drifting in like snow, the closer to the sun.
When death is drifting in like snow,
The closer I get to the sun.
because of the seemingly contradictory nature of drifting in like snow, the closer to the sun.
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Re: Re. The Closer I Get To The Sun
Yes, SeaCat, exactly why It’s written that way...
to drive deep the reality of death inspite the extreme contradictions.
And my gracious thanks.
to drive deep the reality of death inspite the extreme contradictions.
And my gracious thanks.
Re. The Closer I Get To The Sun
14th Dec 2018 7:02pm
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Re. The Closer I Get To The Sun
14th Dec 2018 10:48pm
I've just finished reading a book on Pluto. The universe is fascinating.
Dark Sun.
Dark Sun.
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Re: Re. The Closer I Get To The Sun
Yes, that’s so right, with so much happening out there that scientists never dreamed was possible. Once Voyagers 1 & 2, and then the Hubble telescope went where no man had ever gone before, life on OUR planet has never been the same!
Re: Re. The Closer I Get To The Sun
15th Dec 2018 10:59pm
Voyagers 1 & 2 are still transmitting back data 40 years after their launch. You can actually follow them on twitter.
Dark Sun.
Dark Sun.
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Re. The Closer I Get To The Sun
15th Dec 2018 3:27pm
What a wonderful conversation around this and "2001". How deeply this quatern was founded in you?
Loving it!
Loving it!
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Re: Re. The Closer I Get To The Sun
15th Dec 2018 4:34pm
Thank you dearest tomcat...
for the generous span of time you gave me, that helped me realize my own reasons for birthing the piece, and so much more.
Always, another awakening.
for the generous span of time you gave me, that helped me realize my own reasons for birthing the piece, and so much more.
Always, another awakening.