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Obedience
She tries to be obedient
But it remains a test of nerve
Her Master is not lenient
Although she is prepared to serve
She kisses his sacred rod
And licks its prodigious length
Murmurs that he is her God
A deity of endless strength
She swallows his pearlescent burst
And considers it a pleasure
It satisfies both taste and thirst
For ambrosia beyond measure
She rises slowly to her feet
Waiting for his next demand
But his satisfaction is complete
And she feels her heart expand.
But it remains a test of nerve
Her Master is not lenient
Although she is prepared to serve
She kisses his sacred rod
And licks its prodigious length
Murmurs that he is her God
A deity of endless strength
She swallows his pearlescent burst
And considers it a pleasure
It satisfies both taste and thirst
For ambrosia beyond measure
She rises slowly to her feet
Waiting for his next demand
But his satisfaction is complete
And she feels her heart expand.
Published 3rd Dec 2018
| Edited 4th Dec 2018
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Anonymous
4th Dec 2018 1:17am
Very hot! Giving me new ideas...
Well done, sir Crow
Well done, sir Crow
4th Dec 2018 11:24pm
Anonymous
5th Dec 2018 00:34am
You did well, sir Crow!
Anonymous
4th Dec 2018 1:54am
This is true sensual beauty. I really felt this one. When pleasure is truly satisfaction of all those involved, it becomes a true act of religious bliss. J
4th Dec 2018 11:28pm
No harm done between consenting adults. And it can be a spiritual experience if all concerned are satisfied. It can be sublime. Thank you J!
4th Dec 2018 2:09am
Bravo Sir Crow! Awesome, titillating piece. Favorite words "prodigious" and "ambrosia. "
4th Dec 2018 11:30pm
Those words came from the farthest reaches of my limited vocabulary. Thank you Gahdess!
5th Dec 2018 00:01am
4th Dec 2018 11:32am
For my dearest crowfly friend, I’m so glad we got to talk at length yeaterday. And spoke of cabbages and subs.
Your writing is unique to anything on this sight, and to everything you spin with ink. Nothing fancy, but either with ironic humor, a reality that’s straight forward, or a quiet depth of dark that comes as a surprise to the reader. In “Obediance”, you address how this woman thinks & feels like many do or have under the circumstances. Not because they observe the BD/SM fetish lifestyle but because they’re women.
Not all women indulge like this, but they do similarly under different circumstances. So what you express here fits like a glove.
Jadey x
Love to Ninja.
Your writing is unique to anything on this sight, and to everything you spin with ink. Nothing fancy, but either with ironic humor, a reality that’s straight forward, or a quiet depth of dark that comes as a surprise to the reader. In “Obediance”, you address how this woman thinks & feels like many do or have under the circumstances. Not because they observe the BD/SM fetish lifestyle but because they’re women.
Not all women indulge like this, but they do similarly under different circumstances. So what you express here fits like a glove.
Jadey x
Love to Ninja.
4th Dec 2018 11:36pm
Thank you for the female perspective, Jadey. I often wonder how women react to my written words. I really appreciate that long and articulate comment, and our chat yesterday. And Ninja, curled up in her favorite chair, sends her love.
4th Dec 2018 12:36pm
she crosses over to the sink
and there at leisure she'll repent
and spills the load without a blink
she tries to be obedient
giggles - sorry - had to let it go sir
there are only too many surrenders one can take in a day
and there at leisure she'll repent
and spills the load without a blink
she tries to be obedient
giggles - sorry - had to let it go sir
there are only too many surrenders one can take in a day
4th Dec 2018 11:39pm
Thank you for those lines, SweetOblivion. And feel free to let it go anytime. I believe you do so in your own work, and it's a thrill.
5th Dec 2018 2:09am
My gosh, dear O, those are wonderful & touching lines you’ve gifted to our crowfly.
4th Dec 2018 2:29pm
dearest Sir Crow fuck me this is hot
you really got down on this write...
love Brenda 😈
you really got down on this write...
love Brenda 😈
4th Dec 2018 11:43pm
I'm delighted I got such a fevered reaction from you, Brenda. You do the same for me with your own work, raising my temperature by a few degrees.
7th Dec 2018 5:08pm
Ha, “prodigious length”, amazing imagery.. feeling a bit distracted now :)
Wonderful poem Crow.
Wonderful poem Crow.
