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fracture
tiny fractures over rib and heart
all lie of this hurt
for inside me, I bleed quietly
you broke me with your beauty
cut me with a smile so loving
so I hid myself away
hoping you wouldn't see the devil in me
blood from bone
soul within body
let him not taste the taint of betrayal
bittersweet epiphany
lessons learned where the viper bit
a poisonous cure to tame me
I cry to the gods
"please be my covering"
so inside their sacred halls
I await my sentencing
pleading don't take my angel from me
a man of masculinity
a boy of tender innocence
who I would gladly follow to the end of my days
don't let the darkness win
and take him far from me
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Re. fracture
7th Nov 2018 3:31pm
Re: Re. fracture
7th Nov 2018 3:33pm
Re. fracture
7th Nov 2018 3:36pm
Some strong words.
“so I hid myself away
hoping you wouldn't see the devil inside me”
Love those lines
“so I hid myself away
hoping you wouldn't see the devil inside me”
Love those lines
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Re: Re. fracture
7th Nov 2018 3:38pm
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Re: Re. fracture
7th Nov 2018 4:31pm
thank you graciously dearest Bender for such a beautiful comment...
love Brenda 💕
love Brenda 💕
Re. fracture
7th Nov 2018 4:32pm
Re: Re. fracture
7th Nov 2018 4:33pm
aw thank you dearest Dark Sun you moved me with your comment... brightening a darkened day...
love Brenda ❤
love Brenda ❤
Re: Re. fracture
7th Nov 2018 7:05pm
Re. fracture
7th Nov 2018 7:06pm
for inside me, I bleed quietly seemed to be descriptor for the entire piece. Moving. Liked
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Re: Re. fracture
7th Nov 2018 7:07pm
thank you graciously beautiful Nari for such a keen observation...
love Brenda 🌹
love Brenda 🌹
Re. fracture
Anonymous
7th Nov 2018 7:14pm
There's a prayer-like quality to this beautiful poem, my lovely Dark Angel. A benediction with lit candle held between palms...
"don't let the darkness win
and take him far from me"
Gorgeous poetry. I love you...
...ever your Willow
"don't let the darkness win
and take him far from me"
Gorgeous poetry. I love you...
...ever your Willow
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Re: Re. fracture
7th Nov 2018 7:16pm
thank you beautiful Willow you're right it is a bit of both prayer and incantation...
I deeply appreciate you lovely one...
I love you...
love Brenda 💕
I deeply appreciate you lovely one...
I love you...
love Brenda 💕
Re. fracture
7th Nov 2018 8:37pm
I agree. It does seem like a prayer at times, one like none other. My favorite lines:
bittersweet epiphany
lessons learned where the viper bit
a poisonous cure to tame me
I love the ambiguity here. It takes a poison, not some medication, to effect a cure. Excellent job!
bittersweet epiphany
lessons learned where the viper bit
a poisonous cure to tame me
I love the ambiguity here. It takes a poison, not some medication, to effect a cure. Excellent job!
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Re. fracture
7th Nov 2018 8:53pm
Great write, it's a shame we feel that we are unworthy of love sometimes (most of the time).
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Re. fracture
7th Nov 2018 10:33pm
The whole poem carries the feel of 'Fracture', and on every line the words speak of the same essence - wonderful write.
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