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Meth Wish
Seems I'm inclined to take it slow
Just coasting in a sluggish flow
I feel my head caught in a crush
But duck the medicated rush
Yet she speaks of a need for speed
Straight thoughts paid so little heed
And two steps just ahead of death
For all pleasures of crystal meth
And I'm tempted to go along
To join her in a garbled song
But I see in her reddened eyes
That death would take us by surprise.
Just coasting in a sluggish flow
I feel my head caught in a crush
But duck the medicated rush
Yet she speaks of a need for speed
Straight thoughts paid so little heed
And two steps just ahead of death
For all pleasures of crystal meth
And I'm tempted to go along
To join her in a garbled song
But I see in her reddened eyes
That death would take us by surprise.
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Re. Meth Wish
2nd Nov 2018 7:20pm
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2nd Nov 2018 7:21pm
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I was a meth head for many years, and I can feel every one of them, the health compromised, the time wasted. Thank you oldgolfer and SatinUGal!
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2nd Nov 2018 10:34pm
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Not sure I understand the face. The mouth looks like a straight line. Mixed feelings? Thank you in any case.
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Anonymous
2nd Nov 2018 8:38pm
We are all addicts or ex addicts of some sort, my friend. We all have damaged ourselves in some way, regretting justly our mistakes. But the fact that we are here and that we share our experiences, to awaken others to avoid tragedy, is a great achievement. I say to you, as to others and to myself, there is no shame in having survived. That is, per se, a victory we should shout out loud! As per the style, you are a master of rhythm and rhyme. This piece is beautiful in it's tragic description. Excellent work. J
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Re: Re. Meth Wish
3rd Nov 2018 8:28pm
Survival is an education, not just staying alive. Getting burned by drug usage (I have multiple scars) is almost inevitable in the long run. Thank you for the kindness, J.
Re. Meth Wish
3rd Nov 2018 10:16am
Temptation is a beast; glad you're able to resist.
You make rhythm & rhyme look effortless.
You make rhythm & rhyme look effortless.
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3rd Nov 2018 8:31pm
I can resist the meth. Booze and pot are another story. Thank you brokentitanium!
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3rd Nov 2018 11:15pm
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3rd Nov 2018 2:42pm
dearest Sir Crow stellar rhythm
with a deadly truth it would be the death of us...
so we walk away...
great write...
love Brenda ❤
with a deadly truth it would be the death of us...
so we walk away...
great write...
love Brenda ❤
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3rd Nov 2018 8:32pm
Sometimes I feel I've returned from the dead, in a way, but still have a long way to travel. Thank you Brenda!