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hope in the skies of the broken
my eyes awaken to the day
misfit child of Venus
stretching and evolving
inside me a knowing
the truth fled, I chased her down
a lifetime of hurt
anger my mother
at her breast, I drank
and spew rage
hatred my native tongue
I spoke fluent pain
in the darkness, I grew
the light blinds one such as I
backward and alone
the sun spell my name
it called on me to answer for my crimes
what is done in the dark comes to light
secrets held to my shame
the name of the game
was lies in my eyes
then you came in and saw me
the person I could be
you loved me in my silent times
when I couldn't utter a word
you took me to your breast
and fed me truth
in you I found hope
in your skies adored
Author's Note
thank you to my beautiful Taryn for helping me see....
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Re. hope in the skies of the broken
3rd Oct 2018 4:01pm
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3rd Oct 2018 4:12pm
Re. hope in the skies of the broken
Anonymous
3rd Oct 2018 4:09pm
Crimmy,
That's absolutely beautiful!
You amaze me daily, my friend!
Love,
Matthew.
That's absolutely beautiful!
You amaze me daily, my friend!
Love,
Matthew.
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3rd Oct 2018 4:12pm
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Anonymous
3rd Oct 2018 4:25pm
You're the sun, my friend...you've been beaming forever.
Love,
Matthew.
Love,
Matthew.
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Re: Re. hope in the skies of the broken
3rd Oct 2018 4:26pm
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Anonymous
3rd Oct 2018 4:35pm
I'm glad I do, because you are, and you make me feel the same!
Thanks Crimmy!
Matthew.
Thanks Crimmy!
Matthew.
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Re: Re. hope in the skies of the broken
3rd Oct 2018 4:41pm
Re. hope in the skies of the broken
3rd Oct 2018 4:11pm
Terrific poem Crim. "I spoke fluent pain" - those words say so much. Take care, Josh.
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3rd Oct 2018 4:13pm
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3rd Oct 2018 4:42pm
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3rd Oct 2018 4:49pm
Re. hope in the skies of the broken
3rd Oct 2018 7:03pm
"In the darkness I grew." True. You've evolved into a great poet, Brenda. This is a fine tribute to Taryn, and magnificent sample of your own skills.
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Re: Re. hope in the skies of the broken
4th Oct 2018 11:40am
Re. hope in the skies of the broken
3rd Oct 2018 7:25pm
What is done in the dark comes to light...how true that is...though I still like the dark.
Great write Crim...
Great write Crim...
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4th Oct 2018 11:41am
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3rd Oct 2018 8:32pm
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4th Oct 2018 11:42am
Re. hope in the skies of the broken
3rd Oct 2018 9:02pm
"the truth fled, I chased her down "- stellar
"at her breast, I drank
and spew rage "- outstanding visuals
I find this write lashing and hopeful at times, I dig it. keep'em coming crim.
"at her breast, I drank
and spew rage "- outstanding visuals
I find this write lashing and hopeful at times, I dig it. keep'em coming crim.
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4th Oct 2018 11:42am
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3rd Oct 2018 9:55pm
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4th Oct 2018 11:43am
Re. hope in the skies of the broken
Anonymous
4th Oct 2018 00:59am
Brenda.. simply brilliant.. glad Lady Taryn added some inspiration.. beautiful ink.. love my sisters..
Dave
Dave
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4th Oct 2018 11:44am
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4th Oct 2018 1:58am
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Re. hope in the skies of the broken
4th Oct 2018 2:56am
this one is a beautiful piece....
I don't think adding onto it would do it any justice it's perfect the way it is
I don't think adding onto it would do it any justice it's perfect the way it is
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4th Oct 2018 11:45am
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4th Oct 2018 11:45am
Re. hope in the skies of the broken
Anonymous
4th Oct 2018 4:14pm
Really beautiful write & read. Tender in its narrative.
Thank you for sharing.
-M
Thank you for sharing.
-M
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5th Oct 2018 2:07pm