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Starlow and Moondeep
Starlow and Moondeep
Moondeep deep as that asteroids water
Shallow academics langauge dehydrating,
Desterifying the silver seas
Mindfull inquistive beauty-slaughter
Dragging me up and up in its smart attack
Far from reality to intelligence
But breaking my soul in the seas
Bursting my brain and backboned backpack
Starlow salvation brings me back from earth
Enraptured deep thought of creation
Artisan in my cobbled scientific thought
Yet natural and enigmatic in my refound mirth
Hydrated fire wildfire spreading drink
Far from the rational crowded crow harks
Now crafting and thinking as I want
Inspired and unintelligble as I think.
Moondeep deep as that asteroids water
Shallow academics langauge dehydrating,
Desterifying the silver seas
Mindfull inquistive beauty-slaughter
Dragging me up and up in its smart attack
Far from reality to intelligence
But breaking my soul in the seas
Bursting my brain and backboned backpack
Starlow salvation brings me back from earth
Enraptured deep thought of creation
Artisan in my cobbled scientific thought
Yet natural and enigmatic in my refound mirth
Hydrated fire wildfire spreading drink
Far from the rational crowded crow harks
Now crafting and thinking as I want
Inspired and unintelligble as I think.
Published 1st Nov 2011
| Edited 24th Nov 2011
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1st Nov 2011 11:46pm
versus the intangible, persona created and formed.
yet they challenge the mind. Good read, o Lord Viddax.
yet they challenge the mind. Good read, o Lord Viddax.
2nd Nov 2011 4:31pm
This was meant to be an entry for the rollercoaster emotion challenge but I thought it went a bit off-topic. Not to mention being far from the normal crowded style of up and down as each one is reversed.
Its real enjoyment as you pointed out versus the intangible 'intelligence' that can sometimes spoil it all with its sordid poking.
Its real enjoyment as you pointed out versus the intangible 'intelligence' that can sometimes spoil it all with its sordid poking.
24th Nov 2011 00:47am
i am a bit of a sucker for these poems that throw me into deep thought.
i like it, i like the words you chose, well o.k that might have been obvious but what i mean is the larger words that define the poem to me somewhat, i wont list them.
there is one that i could not get a definition for
"refounf" and after looking at my keyboard i figured that you may just of hit the f key instead of the d key.
anyhoo good stuff Viddax
i like it, i like the words you chose, well o.k that might have been obvious but what i mean is the larger words that define the poem to me somewhat, i wont list them.
there is one that i could not get a definition for
"refounf" and after looking at my keyboard i figured that you may just of hit the f key instead of the d key.
anyhoo good stuff Viddax
24th Nov 2011 00:53am
You are one of the few people who when they say they "like the words" I know you mean more, thanks. The words purposefully go against their single meaning when put together, making a sarcastic affair of words and meaning.
This throws you into deep thought, while at the same time firing you through a cannon towards enraptured inspiration.
"Refounf" - my stupid fingers and their tendency to work as neither eye watches the right hand work! Though it has now been removed, huzzah.
This throws you into deep thought, while at the same time firing you through a cannon towards enraptured inspiration.
"Refounf" - my stupid fingers and their tendency to work as neither eye watches the right hand work! Though it has now been removed, huzzah.
2nd Dec 2011 11:34pm
Love the undertones.
And it speaks at so many levels.
It surely would stay in my
mind for sometime for come.
It resonates.
Curtsy,
S'
And it speaks at so many levels.
It surely would stay in my
mind for sometime for come.
It resonates.
Curtsy,
S'
2nd Dec 2011 11:48pm
Almost a poem in tune with your profile wouldn't you say? My thanks for the comment, *bow*.
3rd Dec 2011 1:27pm
Lord
I have a meaningful smile
thanks to the reference to
my profile.
:) Look forward
S'
I have a meaningful smile
thanks to the reference to
my profile.
:) Look forward
S'
6th Dec 2011 10:58pm
Somehow a mantra that gets that type of reaction surely must come with a health warning. Thanks for the praise.
