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The Realm of Self
He takes a breath, then comes apart
Abandoning all hope of sleep
Just one beat of his crusted heart
Informs him there's not much to keep
He is still one to live alone
Hunkered down beside the door
Or waiting by his useless phone
With tears pooled on the bedroom floor
He takes a breath, goes up in smoke
Soon drifting over city lights
And he can't fail to sense the joke
Whispered beneath his solo flights
Then back in abject solitude
Resigned inside the realm of self
His written words remaining crude
Cheap liquor on a sagging shelf.
Abandoning all hope of sleep
Just one beat of his crusted heart
Informs him there's not much to keep
He is still one to live alone
Hunkered down beside the door
Or waiting by his useless phone
With tears pooled on the bedroom floor
He takes a breath, goes up in smoke
Soon drifting over city lights
And he can't fail to sense the joke
Whispered beneath his solo flights
Then back in abject solitude
Resigned inside the realm of self
His written words remaining crude
Cheap liquor on a sagging shelf.
Author's Note
Painting by Edward Hopper.
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Re. The Realm of Self
17th Sep 2018 9:02pm
Oh ... this one aches ... feel it ... really feel it ... love the closing stanza ... the last line is crushing ...
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17th Sep 2018 9:18pm
I'm glad it got to you LilDragonfly, but I hope it wasn't too much of a downer. Thanks so much for the comment!
Re: Re. The Realm of Self
17th Sep 2018 9:21pm
No ... not too much of a downer ... real ... genuine emoting/evoking ... the essence of good poetry ...
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Re. The Realm of Self
17th Sep 2018 11:31pm
That opening line slammed me right into the feeling..... then what a great journey through attempted escape and back to the despair of the ending. So, so sad. Well done!
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Re. The Realm of Self
Anonymous
17th Sep 2018 11:52pm
Only a person who feels it can say it. Your pain is sincere. We are all lost in solitude and the bottle becomes our only friend. Very deep my friend. I too ask myself if it is all worth it. You always send a strong message. J

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Re. The Realm of Self
18th Sep 2018 00:28am
from your last poem to this damn you've silenced me
wow now this is some great work
I can even relate there moments where by I feel all alone and lost in this world with no one to turn to and nothing to call my own
wow now this is some great work
I can even relate there moments where by I feel all alone and lost in this world with no one to turn to and nothing to call my own
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18th Sep 2018 6:46am
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18th Sep 2018 9:22am
Loneliness is something I can relate to...something that I've adapted to...
I really can't imagine living with anybody. I guess I will always be a loner...
You hit a nerve with this one...good write.
I really can't imagine living with anybody. I guess I will always be a loner...
You hit a nerve with this one...good write.
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Re. The Realm of Self
24th Sep 2018 2:04am
His written words remaining crude Cheap liquor on a sagging shelf and a crusted heart is very clever use of language.
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